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Reviews for Breaking Apart

By : cloudydayz

From ANON - Ivy on February 14, 2008
The anticipation...please update :-) Your story is really the best at capturing a variance of moods and feelings. I can't wait to see how Naruto's night will unfold. Who would have thought vulnerable Sasuke is as hot as a possessive Sasuke ^_^ I love the thing about his hope is what make people in his life want to save him, because no matter how hard he tries there is some innocence left in his soul. Anyways I'm on the lookout for a new chapter!
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From Gwyllion on February 10, 2008
What a bittersweet and angsty moment between those two! My heart broke so badly....at least they get a night of peace just to be together. *sighs* What a beautiful moment....I do hope things would lighten up a bit later on. Thanks so much for sharing! I'll be waiting patiently for more. :D
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From ANON - Anon on February 10, 2008
loved you're story :3
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From ANON - lonelylulaby on February 09, 2008
This story is really making me sad. I don't want Naruto to leave Sasuke after their last night together. I think I might cry when that happens. I liked how Sasuke wanted Naruto to keep humming and how in the last paragraph Naruto was like 'It's only for you...' that made my heart go BOOM BOOM.

ja ne till next time and keep up the good work
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From himesamadakko on February 09, 2008
yeah! you rule! told you a month isn't that long! Great update! do your best and hopefully you get some time off for yourself.
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From YuukoUchiha on February 07, 2008
Ooo... how to begin? Hell of a stress reliever! It�s not fair, I can�t dance to the gods that you keep yourself stressed, can I? .:thinks darkly:. No I can�t... I�m not that mean!

Yes, it�s morbid, twisted, disturbing and I love it! XD jaja, just kidding!

I think that it�s not as dark as it seems, the premise is a little bit and actually it remind me the Piero�s doujinshis in the Narutoverse, Sasuke is so twisted in them and I just loved them..!

The plot is getting more angst, I don�t mind but I�m worried for the ending .:sigh:. But I�m very curious about the Sand arc �as you called- I love Gaara, and yes, I loved yours, he is strong and wicked! But I have to confess that to me the Kankuro-Naruto thing was so weird, well let�s be honest maybe not weird but is not very common

let me tell you, I usually don�t like when one chapter is one pov and the next chapter is the same scene but in a different pov but in yours it just seems so right like we really need to know what was in their heads

And the evolution of the characters, how it starts with a broken Naruto and a sick Sasuke, a very scary Sasuke... to a stronger Naruto still broken but for the pain that Sasuke�s betrayal brought to him and the resolution that he took.
But what I think that I have liked the most so far was Neji�s talk with Sasuke. The way that you described the language and the bond that now they share... when Sasuke was thinking about Itachi that he wanted Itachi to kill him and all the things that he took away from him... it explained to me the reason why Sasuke �lost it� and now I think that Sasuke is more sane now that he realized some things that obviously didn�t before, I could picture him like a child in all that darkness and blood focusing only in Naruto but then Neji brought him some light even when Naruto misunderstood the bond with a new affair, I really want to know why Sasuke hates Naruto...

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From ladywolfTerri on February 06, 2008
okay, that chapter was sweet.. but after what Sasuke has put Naruto through... gawds!!.. if I was Naruto, I wouldn't put up with it either...

Sasuke needs some serious payback.. I mean more than just losing Naruto... like maybe Naruto going through sleeping with everyone, and Sasuke can't do anything but watch as everyone gets to have what was once his.. that is till his libedo cost it for him... hmm.. and maybe the trip to Sand, ooohhh.. wouldn't Sasuke have a shit fit if Gaara offers to hand over Ino in exchange for one night with Naruto...but damn.. the whole Naruto having been Kankuro's lover at one time... what would be hot would be a threesome, Naruto and the Sand brothers...and damn would that be a slap in Sasuke's face as well!!!

Sasuke went and had his screws, now it's time for Naruto to go get his lovin'!! and I don't mean from Sasuke!!.. I mean everyone else.. cause you know unlike with Sasuke, everyone would fall hard for Naruto, and what would kill Sasuke is knowing Naruto actually genuinely cared for them too...
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From Ihadadream on February 06, 2008
YOU UPDATED????!!!!!!!! YATTA!!!!
Thank you so much! I was really desperate to have to wait 2 or 3 more months!

This chapter was absolutly fantastic!!! I love how naruto tames sasuke, showering him with love! He is so sweet and kind and loving!
I'm glad naruto told his intentions upfront to sasuke, it's just for this one night (hopefully not) their last night; it would have been dishonnest for naruto to abuse sasuke's feelings. What is most troubling is that sasuke agreed, knowing full well that after that naruto was planning to leave! It just doesn't seem like sasuke not to put up a fight but like you said, naruto has picked up his curiosity and that's what makes their love stronger. They're awed and troubled by each other. This kind of love is violent and kinda sadistic but it makes it all the more passionate and firy!
The morning after promises to be hard for the both of them, when they return to the harsh reality and the ruins of their relationship... but we're not there yet! the fun has just begun! ;-)

Anyway, Naruto has to keep control and show that love and pleasure aren't always laced with pain as sasuke think. He doesn't love this way, naruto is all candlelinght and butterfly kisses, kindness and massage oils! so great! They both have their own way to do things and you pictured their differences well!
Sasuke showed naruto his fire, will naruto use wind? I loved the 'wind caresses' you talked about in 'coming together'!!
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From Jelp on February 05, 2008
Take your time and do as you please, and don't worry about us being confused. ^_^ I just love this fic so much. You're an amazing writer due to the way you explain and delve into Sasuke's and Naruto's emotions. :-) ~ Jelp
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From ANON - mrk33 on February 05, 2008
I love this fic and I completely understand the "Break" in which speaking. After reading your latest author note I do not undersatnd what the confusion is all about. Basically, this is a Dark Fic, and this poses strong possiblities when you have characters such as Sasuke and Naruto whom had very trumatic childhoods, and I do not care how the anime tries sugar it up. The commom denonminator in this fraction is the need for love, and bonds since both experienced loss beyond their control.I can see Sasuke's need to dominate hence the killing of his clan was beyond him, and it seemed his destiny was determined by his dark twisted brother. Unfortunately, this overbearing dominance spills over into a unhealthy display of love to it's extreme towards Naruto. I will leave the diagnosis of Naruto to someone else. All in all great fic!
MK
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From Picspixie on February 05, 2008
this story is amazing, and at first i was all 'grrr i hate sasuke and naruto should leave his ass' but i just can't help but still think that sasuke and naruto need each other, so u saying that naruto might leave him but not forever makes me happy :3 cause sasuke definately deserved to be punished for all his many crimes against the relationship but i'm glad that naruto can't stay mad forever :P, hehe also really happy that u say this story is going to be alot more chapters coming, this story though it may take a while in between each chapter is amazingly well written and detailed, i really enjoy reading it and it gets me emotionally involved in its twists and turns lol, and i agree with u with naruto holding off on the sex and being romantic, it suits whats going on, the sex would not have the same affect as naruto trying to convey all the love sasuke could have recieved from him..well i'll stop rambling now, hope u update soon lol i'm impatient but its worth it :P
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From Mignonne422 on February 05, 2008
Darling, that was beautifully, masterfully done!

I loved the update. I'm so excited you finally got the chance to update this, because I love this story. I love the exploration of the darker side of their personalaties that you are undertaking. It's fascinating and unique. I love the premise and the history/characterization that you've given them.

I loved the whole clan-speak Naji/Sasuke interaction. I'm so sad that they have to suffer, but, in the end, I'm sure it will be for the best. Sometimes you have to lose what you have to really learn to value it, right? Naruto knows that already, but Sasuke, Sasuke's never lost Naruto. It's high time he gives the teme a taste of his own medicine.

Can't wait for more!

Beautiful job.
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From animeaddict666 on February 05, 2008
Oh dear. I started crying. The emotion is almost too intense in this chapter. I really can't believe you've moved me this way. You're an amazing author, but this is a new level of insight and character development that few ever attain. My god. I am just in quiet shock. You develop the dialectic tension so well between them. It's palpable. This is one of the few stories to which I look for updates constantly. You leave the reader wanting to get to the next page, the next page, the next paaaaage!!!! It's awful having to stop. I actually reread most of the damn thing ever time just to enjoy the flow again. Ah, I love this story. As good as any novel I've ever picked up. Amazing work. Truly.
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From hisoka on February 05, 2008
hes alot more gentle than i though he would ever be. and i didnt even think sasuke would admit weakness,this chapter was just plainly full of amazement.so im guessing that they dont stay together in the end,but what i really wonder is...when does sasuke give up on him?hope you update soon
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From ANON - SasuNaru723 on February 05, 2008
Chapter 17 was so passionate yet in a soft way filled with stirring emotions between Naruto and Sasuke. Ahhh, the distance still in between them does sadden me especially when Naruto was pointing out the things that drive him and Sasuke apart. For some reason it kind of felt like Sasuke had a hunch Naruto�s attempting moderate closure with their relationship by doing all this for Sasuke (while the two were relaxing in the bath). I really liked this chapter more so because there was the right amount of building emotions both Sasuke and Naruto were expressing and there was also a smooth transaction of some foreplay in between. Excellent job on this chapter, cloudy! It was absolutely worth all the waiting!
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