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By : cloudydayz

From ANON - Ivy on December 16, 2008
Oh my surgery sucks :-( I had one a few years ago and recovering can be awfully unpleasant. Glad that you are feeling better though!!!
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From ANON - Angel on December 16, 2008
Howdy Cloudy :)

I'm a stalker :) - I have not signed on with any of these forums so naturally I check on this story at least once a day for the update ha ha.

Hint hint hint... this hiatus has not in any way dimmed the emotions and psychoses of this story but the anticipation is mighty fretting he he he
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From ANON - Ivy on December 16, 2008
Hope your holiday season is going well! Will you put up an AN about what's going on with the story or better yet a new chapter? ;-) Good luck w/this!
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From ANON - Angel on December 01, 2008
Just checking to see whether you have updated!!! I check everyday but now am starting to worry... you know the content of this story has all the setup of being a mind-screw :) and the emotional content you have compounded it with, well I'd be crushed if you didn't continue. You said you wrote it for therapy? Goodness gracious hope you still need it :)

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From ANON - Angel on November 24, 2008
Oh no!!! Sasuke still sounds so unbalanced, I guessed right in the last chapter and Naruto is still so darned oblivious at times!

So Sasuke hates Naruto for being weak eh? He detests all that time he nursed him? Sasuke is a psycho kljasdfjasjdfajsdfkl!!! HELLO he ravished the whole village with his sexual exploits and razed another to the ground. He is proud of having done that for Naruto but not the care he exerted on him, it makes me so sad and fearful of him and Naruto needs reprieve from that.

I would have thought Sasuke'd have hated Naruto for what was being done to him, as though illogical, is usually how one takes to such a problem - you know denial, anger etc before acceptance but I did not think he hated Naruto for the result of his torment :( and to think he lauds "taking care" of him as some sort of ownership over Naruto? It still gratingly peeves me off!

I hope Naruto gets away, Sasuke suffers slowly and painfully lol and then voila Naruto comes back and heals him. It also worries me that Sasuke still associates sex with care well you know what I mean... I hope

Oh gosh this fic is one of those heady heavy ones and I hope upon hope you update soon :)
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From ANON - Angel on November 24, 2008
You made me cry throughout that whole chapter!!!

Again those characterisations are so in-depth. It's weird there were often times where I thought you got them mixed up - attributed to Sasuke what is in my eye inherently a Naruto characteristic, then you blurred the lines until now where I finally get it.

Brute strength vs pure force of will. They are interchangeable they see in each other what they are. Naruto talking about Sasuke's hope...that line clobbered me! I never understood Sasuke like that yet it is Naruto's hope in him isn't it? Or is it Naruto's own unique hope that he can delve that out of Sasuke who does not realise what hope is let alone he exudes it for Naruto ... lol

I have never read smut like this, I realise I'm crying but I'm crying for them too...and they are so stupid! Do I gather Sasuke already knows Naruto's plan by his one night line and the DOBE doesn't know Sasuke knows?

Obviously I didn't review the past chapters because I LOVE NEJI but I was getting mighty jealous of his new bond with Sasuke and Sasuke eyeing him, that stupid Sasuke. Sasuke is one sick teme and gosh their symmetry is so bloody ... well angsty! They both recognise the instability in the other's mental processes.

Okay onto the next chapter
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From ANON - Angel on November 24, 2008
About bloody time! I�m a prude, I abhor dark fics, non-consensual blah blah blah just darkness in general. I cannot handle it, maybe I�m just weak or understand life is dark enough without searching for it, you know?

So yes, I read the warnings, yes I read all those ugly words that I run from, but the first line was so deceptive and inciting. I read it. Then another line and another.

It was pretty clear to me this is not the fic for me to be reading but I was glued. Sasuke is mad. Naruto is a - I don�t know but some bloody mess. Sasuke is a corpse. A freaking psychotic corpse. Ewwwwwwww to all the sex sorry I only read Sasuke and Naruto, so Sasuke and Shino bloody hell, I want to put a chidori though Sasuke�s heart and bloody run Shino over with something lol.

Then hellllllllllllllooooooooooooooo you made me cry!???!! Naruto in utter bloody stupidity, shivers spewing some crap about only being strong to defend, so bloody pathetic in a fic this dark�I find myself crying�because it is so out of it, yet so compoundingly true Naruto Uzumaki.

Then came THE CHAPTER and against myself I read it�all the while thinking I have Zrina�s SoD to refer to, to rinse the bile IF YOU WERE REALLY HEADING THAT WAY.

Then Sasuke whipped Naruto and I want him DEAD!!! DEAD!!! And I thought no, I can�t read anymore but again, something just propelled me to continue, and it hurts more that Sasuke even in his madness can�t bring himself to hurt Naruto. He holds off, he bargained with Kyubi. You are killing me!!!

I�m still so afraid, I�m about to read chapter 12 now but am just so relieved, it�s about bloody time Naruto comes out of the closet lol � the fact he just now realises he lives with Sasuke bwaaaaaaaah! I�m so glad to see him recognise a backbone that I�m giddy. I don�t know whether to curse his love or just keep crying � to know he willingly put himself through that for Sasuke � okay at this stage, it�s obviously crying that�s winning out.

I love how Sasuke characterises him � not stupid but oblivious!!! Soooo true!

BTW oh my gosh!!! I love how you made me begrudgingly love Shino!!! He is one kewl cat and the fact he loves Naruto � in the sense he recognises his true strength�

Okay onwards and upwards � still reading hesitantly and afraid, there is still so much uncertainty and this could go sooooo ugly, but I have hope �

You have a knack of stripping down characters and situations to the bare essentials that it doesn�t matter what you throw on them, their true colours just shine� It�s a gift and I�m glad you�re sharing and despite my trepidation I�m glad I read this �

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From ANON - SasuNaru723 on November 21, 2008
Hey, cloudy! SasuNaru723 here, aka Kariko. Just wondering how the updating process of Breaking Apart is going as well as how life�s been treating you for this winter. Also saying hello and I still wish you the best of luck in getting Chapter 19 posted soon! ^_^

~Kariko~

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From ANON - Ivy on November 10, 2008
Hey, just wondering when you are updating this...before thanksgiving? Christmas? ever? It just seems like this is about to join the ranks of the multitude of discontinued fics which would be disappointing because you have such a unique prespective and fresh vision.
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From ANON - blisblop on September 09, 2008
Thank you for the wake up. Your clarity and reasoning, the details and the ritual have made this 'verse (and ours) so much richer.I'm impressed by your voice.Sasuke and Neji do shine together.I wonder if this is what clans really do (did) or this is an entire fiction , either way its fascinating.
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From ANON - moonmoore on September 02, 2008
Thanks for letting me know that you had updated. I hope you keep telling me in the future. I just returned for a two weeks vacation from Mexico and didnt have had time to check my email. About this chapter, I find the tone of the story changing, e. i., Sasuke inner monologue. I will just hold to what comes next and then comment further. Anyway, thanks again!

Sincerely

Moonmoore
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From ANON - Ivy on August 31, 2008
I really like how you layer the story and how the plot is flushed out with each chapter. I find Sasuke's insistence to give Naruto whatever he needs contradicted with his unwillingness to let him go. I can't wait for the next chapter and am especially excited for the reappearance of Gaara. Please update this soon!
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From maggiekebs on August 26, 2008
Great chapter. Hope the next one does not take as long.
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From ANON - Anon on August 20, 2008
Chapter 17: Wow. Been awhile, hasn�t it?
Sasuke�s POV this time. (*still hoping for revenge on the guy*) ____ So Orochimaru�s where he gets it from. ____ I like that bit about how he hated himself. ____ He�s wondering what�s going on; he should know�he screwed up big time. ____ �Damn near killed me,� yeah right. So dramatic. ____ Gotta say: you�re still writing beautifully, cloudydayz. =) ____ Funny, him thinking that Naruto was using him. �_� ____ That�s a cool line: �I have honed my ability to tell lies with my body.� ____ What�s entertaining is that both Sasuke and Naruto are so certain in their beliefs of the future that it really makes me wonder which is going to end up proved false. I hope it�s Sasuke. ____ Hehehe, I like this part: ��He will always want me,� I think smugly, �He�s addicted to me and he doesn�t even know it.�� I wonder when in the story Sasuke�ll realize that he had it backwards. ____ �It feels . . . good. Better than good.� Naruto�s plan is working then. =) ____ ��No, dobe, I am not weak.�� Says the guy who needs to prove to himself that his dick still works by testing it with everybody. ____ (*sigh*) So not fair how he looks so damn good when he�s so damn evil. Never thought I�d hate my passion for Sasuke until I read this story. That sonofabitch. ____ Love Sasuke�s perception on the answer to Neji�s questions. I really really hope that Sasuke�ll be able to heal in this. (???) Wait a minute. What did I just say? . . . Oh my God, I�m beginning to see Sasuke as a victim, too. But . . . he�s committing such evil . . and enjoying it. How. . . ? Wow. All of a sudden, I�m seeing this story from a new angle. O_O ____ Naruto�s charm is beginning to work on Sasuke. Your writing, cloudydayz, really grips me. It�s beautiful and agonizing and has so many dimensions to it. ____ I�m at �My world is broken,� and I�ve loved everything I�ve read. It�s wild how this writing can truly mix love and hate together. If someone were to say �it�s wonderful,� the word �horrible� would come to mind; and if they were to say �it�s hideous,� we�d think �beautiful.� And vice-versa for everything. We really can�t tell where the beauty ends and the ugliness begins. And that makes the writing phenomenal. I�ve never been so sadly confused when reading a story. This really is a story for stress relief; it makes me want to cry and rage, but it feels good to let that feeling out. ____ Love how Sasuke�s studying Naruto�s body. You write beautiful physical descriptions, and I love the comparison between him and Sasuke. ____ �I bask in the realization that I am Naruto�s and he is mine.� Strangely he�s right. And, like everything else in this story, at the same time he�s wrong: they belong to no one, not even each other. It�s the balance, baby, the balance. Yin & Yang and all that.

Very beautifully done. Thanks for updating. MORE!! XDD And END HAPPY-HAPPY (not sad/angry-happy)!!
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From ANON - Viri L on August 18, 2008
WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO UPDATE...LOL! ITS JUST I LOVE THIS STORY AND PLUS IM A SUCKER FOR HAPPY ENDINGS! AND THIS STORY IS SO [HOW TO SAY IT] NOT HORROR, BUT HOW HUMAN PEOPLE INTERACT AND ABOUT LOVE! YOU CREATED A FINELY TUNED STORY! AMAZING JOB, CHICA! YOU HAVE MY RESPECT...TAKE CARE AND KEEP UPDATING!
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