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Reviews for Breaking Apart

By : cloudydayz
  • From ANON - Damp on March 04, 2007
    Let me tell you this...I don't have my version of Sasuke because I don't bother with trying to see "underneath the underneath" as Kakashi says. So yea, when I read a fanfic I love to see how far authors stretch the character. I always ask myself, "Is this how Sasuke would react?" or "Is that what she really would have done?", when I'm reading their fanfic. I liked how you explained your character's OOCness, though I really didn't mind...your not the only one who's made a character seem bogus *not that I'm saying they're bogus*. It's your story, we all say to "blend in" but then again we also say "be an individual" ...So "blending in" is totally redundent..."You're an individual, be an individual. Don't blend in, blend out!"
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  • From yaoiismyantidrug on March 04, 2007
    I am liking this fic so far. Yes, Naruto and Sasuke are OOC - if you compare them to their 12-year-old counterparts. Who knows what years and years of changing times and traumatic situations will do to a person. You are justified in writing them however you want. It is a dark fic, and that's one thing that sets it apart from a lot of the other ones on AFF.

    I have to say this, and I don't mean it as an insult in any way. I really enjoyed your Author's Note. Like really really. I'm still trying to figure out why, but strangely enough, it's probably my favorite thing I've read today.

    Please keep working on the story, and I'll definitely keep reading.
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  • From ClaireBear on March 04, 2007
    I loved your essay on Sasuke in the Author's note but don't get the wrong idea, I love your story too actually I adore it. Bastard Sasuke is so intriguing.

    Anywho, you mentioned something in your thesis that you wrote this story because it was something you would enjoy reading and that's really what writing should be all about. The fanfics I write are all stories that I, myself, would read because if I wouldn't enjoy reading them then I wouldn't enjoy writing them.

    So, keep at it and remember to enjoy it.
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  • From Genderless on March 04, 2007
    I agree with pretty much everything you said in your notes. The only thing I disagree with is Sasuke being likable.
    Personally I hate him to such a degree I almost couldn't watch/read the series. Part of the reason I enjoy reading you're fic is that Sasuke is utterly evil and I get to hate him remorselessly for cannon acts and for what you’re making him do. Maybe that isn't your intention but as far as I'm concerned any fic where I can hate Sasuke, he has to be quite in character.
    But yeah, keep writing!
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  • From ANON - dar on March 04, 2007
    It is very dark and exciting in it's own little way! I like!!! Keep up the good work, and without a beta you still do well I like!!! Please Update soon!!!
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  • From ursweetheartless on March 04, 2007
    AAWWW again! for some reason i found sasuke in the last chapter cute in some twisted depraved way. (its not that he got rid of shino either >.
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  • From ursweetheartless on March 04, 2007
    AAWW shino was (kinda) nice, and i have to admit i thought it was adorable when he said "if i had you, i'd do the same thing" to naruto ^.^
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  • From ANON - Jadebyrd on March 04, 2007
    i have recently discovered that i have a strange liking to dark fics involving SasuNaru....you have now just satisfied my sick thirst for this, and i love ya for it!!! thank you!!! i can't wait to see what happens next!!!

    -Jenn
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  • From Starryeyedstar on March 03, 2007
    Personally I love it when a writer takes the time to answer reviews. I never really take the time, but over at fanfiction.net they have the niffty little review reply thing, so I do reply to any ones that have questions, people I know, or one that catches my eye.

    I'm so very happy you updated, this really was a great treat to come home to after a hard day at work! Thank you SO much~!


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  • From ANON - Damp on March 03, 2007
    Possession is having some degree of control over something else. Generally, to possess something, a person must have an intention to possess it. A person may be in possession of some property (although possession does not always imply ownership). Like ownership, the possession of things is commonly regulated by states under property law. Languages have several means to indicate possession. I got that from dictionary . com , and you Sasuke have just crossed the line by saying that Naruto was you possesion...and not your lover...die Sasuke...
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  • From TakiTenshi on March 03, 2007
    Sadistic Sasuke, Possesive Sasuke, Obsessive Sasuke...*jumps up and down and claps happily whiles going into a fan-screaming fit* My three favaourite things! Whooooooooooooo!!! Bring on the bastard-ness...ness! lol I'm being stupid, ignore me...but acknowledge my review!! I love this story, I can't wait till Naruto wises up and leaves Sasuke because I like it when he gets all crazy raging maddy-like and all "Naruto-Is-Mine" and "If-I-can't-have-him-no-one-can!" aggressiveness!! Hurry and update pleeease!! Thanks for updating twice in one day!

    But you gotta update again!

    Ki`Tara
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  • From ANON - dana on March 03, 2007
    wow great chapter. i like how we saw what happened through sasuke and naruto's pov of the same events. like how sasuke was seeming oblivious to naruto but knew he was lying and how naruto seems oblivious to sasuke's secret life both knowing something is up but still continuing to play the role. is naruto going to be the one who is pregnant and will it be sasuke's because from what i've seen of your version of uchihas they shouldn't have no kids (by the way loved the way you described the bloodbath). can't wait til the next update.
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  • From ANON - purplekitty on March 03, 2007
    Ah another greta chapter! What's gonna happen next? How's Shino goona react to Sasuke's decision? Is Sasuke gonna find out Naruto knows? What's gonna happen to Naruto? Who drank my smoothie!?!? The anticipation is killing me^^
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  • From ANON - kaa-san on March 03, 2007
    Are you sure honesty kept Sasuke sane? Can't wait for your next update.^^
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  • From celticfx on March 03, 2007
    You updated! Hooray! I really enjoyed this chapter. It was almost a second part to chapter two (first seeing Naruto's perpective and then Sasuke's). Sasuke IS getting scary (but in an entertaining, I-can't-wait-to-see- what-he'll-do-next type of way!). Poor Naruto! Looking forward to your next chapter!
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