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Reviews for Breaking Apart

By : cloudydayz

From megera on November 10, 2007
When. when. when update?
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From ANON - Dreigon on November 09, 2007
This story really got me stick to it. I really love the monologues of Sasuke and Naruto, they are very interesting to see them arguing with themselves. You are a nice writter, and can't wait to read the next chapter.
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From ANON - SasuNaru723 on November 06, 2007
Is there a chance that the next chapter will be updated this week perhaps? Maybe? I was hoping to read it before next Tuesday because I won�t be able to use a computer for like a week or so till my eyes recover (I�m getting LASIK next Tuesday). Yay! 20/20 vision here I come! You are mine perfect vision �all mine to possess! I will have you! MUHAHAHAA!!

Ja, I�ll be looking out for an update this week if you do post chapter 17 then! ^0^

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From ANON - gai sensei on November 03, 2007
Pleaaaaaaaaaaaaase update!!! Come on now, it has been sooo long! *beg*
I can't wait anymore!!! *throws a tantrum*
This story is so great!! Are you a perfectonist or something? I'm sure whatever you post will be ok!! i've read last chapter a hundred times already! i know, it makes trice a day!! so what? I'm crazy like that! *lemon lemon lemon*
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From sunlight159 on October 07, 2007
awww why couldn't they just have talked earlier!!! hopefully their relationship can still be saved?!?! loved the update!!!
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From RyuDragonhalf on October 04, 2007
Kyaah, oh my goodness. I've just spent the better part of five hours reading and re-reading this fanfiction. It is so different from the traditional Sasu/Naru fanfictions, and I love it! I didn't think I would - I am definitely a fluffy person at heart - but I loved every single paragraph! You wrote everything so well and with such emotion.. It's very rare to find a fic as well written as this. I can empathize so much with the characters - curling up in my chair when Naruto gets anxious, trying to read faster during the tense parts ("What's gonna happen?! What's gonna happen?! XD), and feeling everything that the characters feel. You are an amazing author, Cloudy, and I am positive that this talent you have will take you far. Don't ever, ever give up on it!

Oh, yes. Update soon, chica! I wonder...now that Sasuke has an inkling as to how he feels, will there be more fluffy moments? Ah, the heart of a hopeless-romantic. X3
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From ANON - StillTime on October 04, 2007
I really, seriously am in love with this fanfiction. It is written so well and it amazes me greatly. I honestly wish I could write that well on my own. I mean, I roleplay as a few characters from Naruto, so I know how to write...but I am severely incapable of keeping a topic when I have to write for all characters at the same time. I honestly wish I could write like you. The morbidity of this fic is both disturbing and satisfying. Keep up the good work. Angsty, morbid stories keep my life going. :D I just...for some reason, I don't want Naruto to leave Sasuke. They are an amazing pairing because of how they always were. And I don't think anything works as well. Hope to see the next chapter soon! :D
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From ANON - Gina on October 03, 2007
Mohaha, This is getting better and better with every chapter!
And now for Naruto's death blow! Make him Sasuke suffer... >D
And i do like the shifting of POV:s - It made a really interesting dialog between them.
I didn't know i would love a mad Naruto this much, but I doo! And this story is evil and addicting!

Your doing an awesome work with this story! Keep it up!:D
// Gina

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From ANON - hinata chan on October 02, 2007
Thank you for the reviews answers! I looooooove you tooo!!!!!! lol and besides you gave us some interesting previews in these feed backs like Naruto getting 'some sort of revenge' on sasuke(what can that be?)or naruto learning about his feelings the hard way (i just hope this doesn't include character's death THAT would kill me)or naruto being 'a force' that can 'handle sasuke' ... hmm *ponder* how will sasuke take all this? He was so gentle and caring in this chapter... well as gentle as sasuke can get (while talking about torture over a cup of tea!) but the happiness he felt in the end of the chapter was sooo moving (especially knowing that it will be short lived...) Did he realise he just might be in love with naruto yet? Maybe in next chapter! *happy fangirl looking forward for HOT lemon*
I was surprised naruto and sasuke's discussion didn't broach kankuro at all. It would have kind of ruined naruto's plans for their night together, huh? Well I guess all hell will break loose in the sand village (quite literally, since sasuke has a bad habit of razing villages to the ground �,-)
However, I'm glad sasuke finally understood how much naruto was willing to sacrifice (well really DID sacrifice in the end) to save him from his stupidity... It's really like sasuke to get angry over such an act of love and faith, he could only see what HE could have lost... I hope he fully understands the bitterness naruto felt when he had thought sasuke (of all people) had turned his back on him...
I never saw the craziness in naruto before and it casts a new light on this story. The misunderstandings between naruto and sasuke is the heart of 'breaking apart' and the alternation of PoV is not so easily done,it gives relief to your characters and you really are a gifted writer to do it so easily! your story transmits raw feelings and emotions so naturally it makes my heart clench sometimes... like with this sentence: 'My desire for him to be well, to be happy, to be with me... My love for him.' I don't know why but i almost cried when reading this part.
I wanted naruto to get revenge but i'm not so sure anymore.
It seems like something terrible is about to happen because of another of naruto's reckless plans...he really doesn't know how deeply sasuke feels for him now does he? Well it's not really his fault, sasuke's feelings are not so easily readable... it saddens me to see him throw all the things they lived together out the window because of something as stupid and common as unfaithfullness... even if sasuke really overdid it!
Now I'm so happy you have more time to write, I already can't wait to read more (lemon) but don't rush yourself either, I wouldn't want you to have a writer's block now! Just please try to aim for a happy ending ne? Thank you for this story!
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From ANON - Dicey on October 02, 2007
An Update! YAY!!!! XD See! I knew there was a time discrepancy! Naruto~ AHOU! All that angst and torture for 3 weeks is fun (for us readers) but still! There could've been mpreg?? Now there won't be hot Sasunaru babies running around! Revival of the clan! Was hoping for a lemon but next is a lemon yeah yeah??

I'm really looking forward to the Naruto Gaara meeting! Mainly because I love those two and those two together, friendship or otherwise is good but I can't wait for jealous Sasuke. He's such a possessive freak.

And besides I see massive earth shattering fighting in the future.. Cuz ya know with all these powerhouses running around...
It's kinda funny though, cuz if Hunternin were so powerful, "Razing" entire villages and whatnot, with any potential ambition, they could've all just made their own villages.

I had the sudden image of Gaara, Naruto, Sasuke and Neji wearing Hokage-like robes sitting around a table sipping tea discussing their villages wellbeing and what not.

Updates will be more? YAY!!!!!! Love this fic! Love. It. More!
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From ANON - via on October 01, 2007
amazing story and creative cant wait for the next chp.
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From ForgottenPrincess on October 01, 2007
oh god i love this story! Now that Sasuke realizes how he feels for Naruto, Naruto plans on leaving him...ah so good and fucked up. You know i am still rooting for a happy ending. Preceded by a whole lot of messed up depressing stuff.
Hope you really do have more time to update. I can�t wait to see what will happen next

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From Gwyllion on September 27, 2007
GAH!! Thank you thank YOU for the lovely update!! I as hoping that Naruto wouldn't forgive Sasuke that easily though....but I was glad about this talk from Sasuke. At least he told the truth and expressed his anger and care for naruto in how he killed off Orochimaru. I can't wait to read what happens next. Thanks again and please keep up the wonderful work!
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From ANON - Kalariona (Just cant be bothered to log in!) on September 27, 2007
In all honesty, I was slightly warey of reading this fic. I dont really like dark fics with practically unfeeling characters, but I decided to give this one a chance. I'm actually glad I did. Sasuke is slightly overboard but I do like the way you have wrote him since I love reading obsessed Sasuke stories. I was worrying about how weak you had begun to write Naruto, but after getting this far, I see that he isn't. I like.

Please update when you can. I'll be on the lookout.

Rie
xx
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From ANON - Bk on September 27, 2007
OMG! I loved that chapter! The ending where Sasuke realizes he really loves Naruto was the freaking best. >< I absolutely love the scene where they're both laughing. It was so cute! I feel like drawing it omfg. *_* I hope you won't mind if I did? xD Gahhh Naruto is gonna hurt poor Sasuke. I hope they have a happy ending. D:
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