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By : MoiyaHatake
  • From dizzydani on January 30, 2010
    Beyond Xcellent.arigato
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  • From dizzydani on January 30, 2010
    Xcellent.arigato.
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  • From ANON - euridyce on July 23, 2007
    i don t usually review,but i felt like I had to, for 2 reason.
    1-I read your fic yesterday night and got too tired bucause i read it in one shot. I found your story amazing!!
    I m looking right now on google if I could find more fic that you wrote. cause honestly, you re now my favorite author.
    2-i ve checked through ff.net for more of your fic. do you have any more hidden? could you write more please? I loved your view of the character and loved moiya.so if you have more fic, please, PLEASE!! send them to me or tell me where to find more!!

    i think i ll go to bed very late again tonight because of you..:)

    and if you ever release a novel, tell me, i ll go buy it right away. loved your work

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  • From NanaTsunade on July 15, 2007
    Okay, I'm at a loss for words.........That was so sad!!!!*tears falling* Sweetie, you've got some talent there. The way you wrote that last chapter left me, and I'm sure, everyone else who's read it, wondering if Kakashi knew that mission would be his last. Revealing to Sakura and Naruto the fact that he had once been married, and widowed, and finally pulling down his mask, showing his face to them, and the message he left for Naruto. The timeskip was genuis! The entire story was great, showing the emotions, the sadness, the happiness..The best story I've ever read.
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  • From ANON - NJ on July 13, 2007
    Well, thanks for the link!! It was awesome!! I started reading and just couldn't stop! I like the Moiya character, it sucks you killed her off. lol! I know that was more to go with Kakashi's character though. I would have loved for it to have been longer. Maybe more about them getting married or even her having a kid. That would have been cool. And the sex was fucking hot! That's always a plus! As you say us AFF people can't get enough sex! Anyway, keep it up! Great stuff!

    See you on the Forum
    NarutoJunkie
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  • From roxnroll on July 13, 2007
    That was really good. Very sad though. I loved this fic. I think it could have gone on longer, but you are the writer. I enjoyed the Moiya character, even if some people don't like the OC's. I think it brings depth to the story. So they got married-and she died? I think a sequel could come from this and mayber detail on the marriage and her death. Just a thought. Keep up the good writing. I'll keep reading.
    Rox
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  • From roxnroll on May 08, 2007
    i read this all in 1 shot. You are a very good story teller. I am very into this story. I would like to see a little more dialog between them though. Keep up the good work.

    Rox
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  • From ANON - taishorin on April 14, 2007
    Excellent, simply excellent. You have brough to life the Kakashi we have all wanted and hoped to see. You are an excellent writer, getting into the heads of your characters and bring out the deep feelings. You have shown Kakashi's difficult live, his difficult choices and his redeeming choice in staying with his friend.

    Keep writing, you have talent.

    Taishorin
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  • From ANON - Hillary on April 12, 2007
    I love this story! I started reading it a couple of hours ago and I couldn't stop! I can't wait for your next update!!
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  • From ANON - I don't mean to flame on March 24, 2007
    Sorry, but OC's are lame IMO. Especially for Naruto fanfics. It's not like there is a lack of characters to chose from. It's a shame. The story is actually well written. It would just be so much better if you used one of the many females that already exist.
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  • From ANON - electraX on February 25, 2007
    i ablsolutely love this story!! the plot is so in depth and...beautiful. really, bravo bravo. so you must definitely update, please update!!!
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  • From ANON - BlackDragonPhoenix on February 18, 2007
    I really hope that chapter 8 is not the end. I have to say this is a really good story. I love how she is the only person he has the strength to go to. I also like the fact that Moiya isn't a genius or what I consider a Mary-sue (I don't think my definition is the same as everyone else's).
    As for constructive criticism, I really don't see anything wrong. I mean you have a few spelling mistakes, but they aren't so bad that I can't tell what they were suppose to be. As for grammar and punctuation, I was only good at it so I could pass High School and College English, and now with Microsoft Word, I'm even more lazy. So, I don't see a real problem that stops me from reading.
    I do have a question though. How old is Kakashi in your story? There was a part in one of the chapters saying he had spent twenty years trying to regain his emotions or become human again and that Yondaime and Moiya were his teachers(thats not quit it, but I think it was in chapter 3 or 4) and then it said he had met Moiya after Obito had died. I think what I am trying to figure out is if its suppose to fit in the same timeline as the anime and manga.
    So, to tell the truth, I love this story. I also find it awesome that you, a single mother, wrote a Naruto story. Don't get me wrong, there is nothing wrong with being a single mother. I just think its great. I don't think I could say anything with out it sounding wrong, so I won't. I wouldn't have found this story if I hadn't started reading "Precious Gift" on fanfiction.net, which I love too. So I say keep it up; and if people have a problem with the contents of your story, they don't need to read it or feel the need to review.
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  • From ANON - Xenobia on February 07, 2007
    This is an excellent story. However, my only criticism is regarding the mechanics of your writing style. When you have overly long paragraphs, with no obvious breaks, it becomes rather difficult to read. Punctuation is another issue...you need shorter sentences and correct punctuation. Finally, tense agreement...needs some work. When writing from the third person POV, you tenses need to indicate past tense (he saw, he had seen, etc.)for the story to flow better. I saw some minor errors regarding past tense POV but I have to admit, I was distracted by the paragraph lengths.

    Please don't misunderstand the intent of my review. I assume that you know what "flaming" is in regards to fan-fiction writing. I am not a flamer...I like to share constructive criticism; especially when a piece has the potential to be a work of art. I would enjoy reading more of this piece. If you like, you may respond to the email address I have provided if you woul like for me to look over the chapter for errors prior to posting it for others to read.

    Keep up the good work and I hope to hear from you soon.

    Xenobia
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  • From ANON - shihiko on February 06, 2007
    excellent! can't wait for more. I really love the way that u emphasize how the deaths of his colleagues and friends have affedcted him to the point where he can't or has trouble forming close ties. Very good start. Please update soon.
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