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By : Zrina

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From ANON - Angel on November 06, 2008
BWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH BWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!

Even though I knew what was coming still bleeping funny LOL, that is just so bleedingly typical Naru/Sasu I LOVE IT LOLLLLLLLLLLLLLL!!!

Oh gosh, still guffawing LOL
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From Wolfrun on July 09, 2008
This was such a crazy story. Loved it. Keep up the good work.
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From Imagy on May 25, 2008
OMG
that was hilarious!!
dear lord, I swear
I was crcking up the whole time
adn then the ending...
pfffft
noice~!
can't wait to read more of your stories, hun~!
'til then, babe! ^o^
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From ANON - mango on May 01, 2008
ahhhh this was too cute
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From on April 25, 2008
I love, love, LOVE this fic! I swear I've read it like 10 times now if not more. You're writing is so funny (Sasuke was a demanding bitch in bed, his cock pouted, etc.) and I always have a huge smile on my face. In this case, I even had to look away from the screen a few times because I was so embarrassed for Sasuke. And then the end, poor, poor boy. Sakura is going to hunt him forever! Love it.
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From digiditz on February 28, 2008
Best. Ending. Ever.
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From riddlestar on February 21, 2008
bwahahaha... hilarious epilogue. :D
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From ANON - Anon on February 19, 2008
Epilogue: Oooh, more?!? :D . . . . Three months and he hasn�t topped yet? Wonder what the issue was. . . . That�s a great way of putting it: �inherited the blonde�s friends.� Perfect! That�s so him! XD . . . . Eheh, chaperone. Love that whole bit about Sakura. ^^ . . . . Uh-oh, he�s trying to multitask and is a little distracted while he�s using his phone! o.o . . . . Oh, please tell me he dialed right!! >.< . . . . (*whimper*) He dialed wrong, didn�t he? �_� . . . . NOOOOOOOO, I WAS RIGHT!!! HOW COULD YOU, ZRINAAAAAA?!? T_T T_T T_T T_T I demand an alternative ending! With lemon! �_�

Okay! Next on my list is that oneshot you just wrote. And then on to Blackmail and Betrayal! ^_^
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From ANON - Anon on February 19, 2008
Chapter 4: Yeah, I hope so too, man. I hope so too. . . . Oooh, he looks pretty. (Don�t tell him I said that. And if he heard it, tell him he�s free to beat me up, I probably deserve it.) . . . . Yay, Sasuke�s got a bit of wry humor. ^_^ . . . Interesting. Naruto�s �why didn�t he just ask me out?� Naruto wasn�t too sure what to do about Sakura early on (even though he had asked her out); something similar applies here to Sasuke. . . . Eheheh, love the bit about the word �show.� (Yet again, that story I mentioned earlier.) What are �ice capades?� Oh wait a sec -- is it a pun on �escapades?� . . . I can sympathize with Naruto about the acting. I don�t get jealous over who gets the parts I wanted, but I do try to look at it critically, and sometimes I think, �Why them? �_o� . . . . Nice imagery of what�s going on during the hand-caressing paragraph. . . . Ohhh, please tell me Richards is going to pay for his jerkitude. . . . (*snicker*) Love the �twenty different eating utensils.� I knooooow, I just don�t get it either, Naruto! ^^ . . . . ^_^ �No veggies, got it.� ^_^ . . . Aww, the people here are wine-snobs? That�s mean. . . . (*snort*) Love Naruto�s outburst about the cocktails. XD . . . Oh Gawd, �The damn busboy.� XDD . . . Okay, that�s just rude, Naruto. What if somebody dissed your ramen while you were eating it? God, I�m picky enough as it is. �_� By the way, Zrina, I liked the way Sasuke reacted to that line: very natural. ^^ . . . . Ooh, love the flirting. ^^ . . . . Alright, Sasuke, you show that guy what happens to waiters with bad manners! >:D . . . . Zrina. I just might have to kill Naruto for doing that to Sasuke. o_o . . . . Okay, everything�s okay. You�re going to live, Naruto. Love Sasuke�s line, by the way: �Sometimes I wonder.� . . . . Aww, that�s sad. :(
Not much to say on this scene, except that it was great. Kiba to the rescue!
Love the worst-idea debate. X) . . . . Duh, Sasuke, why didn�t you think of that from the start? �_o . . . . (*giggle*) �Must . . . resist [. . .]� XDDD . . . Love the way Sasuke identifies what he brought. . . . I can�t quite believe Sasuke just said that, but I can�t quite disbelieve it either. . . . Okaaaay, that was blunt. (*blinks*)
Goal #3? =D . . . . Love their questions and answers. . . . The rape-jokes seem a little -- meh to me. But that might just be me. �_o . . . . Love the promise of painful beating. XD . . . . (*BLUUUUUUSH*) *_* . . . . Sexy use of the last name. And I adore the sentence beginning with, �For such a normally quiet [. . .]� ^_^ . . . . Nice imagery with the word �trapped.� . . . . �Spend?� Never heard of it that way. I�m gonna remember that one. =) . . . . Ehh, oopsie: �He looked up as Naruto reentered the room and tossed a tower to him.� (*cough*towel*ahrrrm*) Love the rest of this scene! It�s so sweeeeet! :heart: :heart: :heart:
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From ANON - Anon on February 19, 2008
Chapter 3: To the A/N: Oooh, longer chapters! :D . . . Research? Not scary at all! ^_^ . . . Okay, it�s a moot point now, but I like both either way as well, but I prefer NaruSasu. . . . And thanks for the One Last Note.
First scene is a great set-up for what�s coming.
�He researched it on the Internet.� ^_^ . . . . (*snicker*) �[. . .] and he happened to like his hairstyle the way it was, thank you very much.� XD So do I!! . . . . Love the next paragraph, and then Sasuke�s reaction (the eye-twitch). ^^ . . . Love Sasuke�s resolve, but I have my misgivings. Good luck, man. �_�
Well, yeah, he would be, Sasuke; the poor guy�s embarrassed out of his mind. . . . Great line, Sasuke. Could go either way. . . . Interesting place to leave off for that day.
So Naruto�s distracted. . . . (*snicker*) Naruto�s trying to ignore Sasuke, and then: �He felt a hole slowly being burned into the back of his head.� XDD It�s like: Ignore, ignore, ignore, tension, tension, TENSION . . . XDD . . . . I love this. Sasuke�s trying to be nice, but he�s known to have a default jerkitude, and his ignorance of certain situations makes it look like he�s just being himself. ^^ Maybe he should�ve just gone with his own earlier advice and just be himself. Only, on purpose rather than by accident. ^^
I�m beginning to wonder how Naruto�s going to take it if he ever finds out that Sasuke was actually trying to be nice. o_o . . . . And Sakura puts in an appearance. ^_^ (*snicker*) �His victim, errrr, [. . .]� Love the errrr. ^^ . . . . Nice save, Kiba. . . . Oh jeez, the other bit of advice. XD This oughtta be good; he�s only going to succeed in pissing Naruto off even more! XD Who the hell wrote that article? They obviously don�t know what they�re talking about! (I think.) If anything, that�d just piss someone off; no one wants to know they�re being imitated. . . . Heh heh. �Snooty rich brat.� Love the perspective. I wonder if Sasuke�s going to ever tell him the truth. . . . Oh Gawd, Naruto�s third move! XDD . . . AHAHAHA! Absolutely, frickin� LOVE the �tactical error� reaction! XDDDDDD (Later thought: I wonder if Sasuke thinks Naruto might be coming onto him very subtly or something. Probably not, but it�d be funny anyway.)
What I�m wondering is: Is Sasuke actually thinking how he would react if the object of his desires acted this way towards him? Cuz if he did, it might or might not help. . . . Love this: �I feel so f***ing stupid.� XD (*snicker*) He�s even got a mirror and a brush. Jeez, he�s serious, isn�t he? I realized: slightly disguised, this is a the-things-I-do-for-him story. ^_^ (Or maybe it�s obvious, and I�m just slow. *sweat*) . . . . Love Naruto�s comment.
Sasuke should write to the website, and bitch at them. That�d show �em! . . . . Yeah, I�m totally with him on the, �(well, maybe not kids).� ^^ . . . Oh. My. God. (*blinks*) You sprang that on us as a surprise, didn�t you! (*pointing dramatically to Zrina*) XD . . . Love where this went. This time, Sasuke was the one uber-pissed.
(*Whew* This review is long. Ah well, it�s a long chapter! *devilish smirk*) . . . . Nice move, Naruto. . . . Alright! Now we�re getting somewhere! :D
Interesting. I can tell Sasuke�s switched to the For Guys section. . . . I have a reeeeeaaaaally bad feeling about this. �_�
(*sigh*) My gut was right. -_-
Love how the door opened. XD Oh my God, he just yelled that out loud. O.O
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From ANON - Anon on February 19, 2008
Who the hell stretched the page with their review? Grrr. �_o

Chapter 2: To the A/N: Ah, come on, you just gave a summary of everything to expect! Leave some surprises, damn it! T_T . . . You bet I love you. You�re one of the awesomest writers I�ve ever read! ^_^
Ahahaha! �[. . .] as a quantum physics thesis.� I don�t get it, but it�s funny! ^^ . . . . Love his first spoken words. . . . Nice description about Sasuke�s recent past (Favorite Author Alert ^_^). . . . Cool description of his brother. (*shudder*) . . . . (*snicker*) �He had never stuck around [. . .]� XD . . . . O.O Such language, I love it! XD . . . . Love how his body expresses his thoughts. Clever. XDD . . . . Nice ending sentence to this scene.
Nice situation for this next scene. (By the way, ever read Chasing Naruto by AkaiTsume? Probably have, just thought I�d mention it.) . . . . Ohhhhhh crap. Sasuke just heard Naruto yelling at Kiba. O_O . . . . Okay, Sasuke, if you�re mad, take it out on Kiba, not Naruto. You know Naruto was a victim too, so it was KIBA�S (*points very exaggeratedly at Kiba*) fault. O_O (I love it when Sasuke gets mad.) . . . . Love this sentence: �There was something going on here besides a prank call.� I can so picture his expression and stance as he�s listening. . . . Nice question, Kiba. . . . Love the way you did Sasuke�s perspective on all this. . . . How the hell did Kiba know Sasuke was there? . . . . Interesting ending. Again, I mention that story I mentioned up there. 9_9
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From ANON - Anon on February 19, 2008
(Hi. You know me. I review as I read. >:D)
Chapter 1: Whoa, whoa, Hinata wild in bed?! @_@ (*dizzy*). . . . (*snicker*) Kiba sounds like a jock, but I might like him in this story. ^^ . . . Naruto as a drama major? Interesting. . . . Clever idea about the red paint on Kiba�s face. ^^ . . . Nice description of Sakura. . . . Nice description of Sasuke too. . . . I like Kiba�s attitude, but if he thinks girls are like that . . . well . . . well. 9_9 . . . . I wonder what Sasuke�s majoring in. . . . Clever. He immediately starts with �Don�t say anything.� So he doesn�t know who�s on the line. Nice. . . . Oh man, this is wild! What Naruto�s saying! O_O . . . . Nice short description about what he�s hearing on the other end, just before he continues. . . . Wait a minute. �Strong hands gripping [. . .] Muscular legs [. . .]� Is that Sakura he�s thinking about? I mean, I know she�s like that in the manga now, but is she like that in this world as well? . . . �Dark eyes?� Guess not. �_o . . . . Nice ending line. It kinda makes the reader go �. . . Uh-oh.� XD
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From mls on February 15, 2008
loved it!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - SakuraKissy on February 04, 2008
OH MY GWAD! I LOVED IT! >>
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