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Reviews for Dealing with Love (Complete)

By : Midnightstorm

From ANON - Dravius on July 13, 2014
Third time i've read this n.n still love it :)
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From NarutoVixin on December 17, 2009
i for one loved the whole thing and am thinking of trying some of your other stuff just to see if i would like it
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From Calcifer on January 29, 2009
*is devastated*

Aw, you killed Iruka! (and several other people, but they aren't as cool)

Wonderful writing dear.

Keep up the good work!

~Angel
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From RyuuOokami on April 10, 2008
Hi I like your story already hehe. I'm reading and reviewing at the same time; that's why I say some weird stuff sometimes and maybe asking questions that getting answers later in the fic. And I tend to ramble a lot. *rub back of neck* Just ignore that or something.

Chap1 - A slave-shop. That is so weird. *laugh* I kind of like it, I mean; why not?
And I totally loved the way you made Naruto speak with a exclamation mark after every single sentence when he was speaking with Oro. Hehe.
And I think you do Sasuke pretty well for him being a slave. Should be hard to keep him in character for that one but you're doing just fine.

Chap2 - Sasuke starts up the lovers-bickering already in the car? Hahaha. That was great. And Naruto's remark: "You be my slave right now!� *snicker*
Intersting thing with Kyuubi, I guess we get to know more about that later in the story.
I loved Sasuke's first boyfriend-act in front of Tsunade. He's was so great! That was just so entertaining.

Chap3 - I feel kind of sorry for Naruto already with him not liking people to touch him, and I don't even know that much yet about what happened to him.
And Sasuke letting Jiraiya of all people tell him things about Naruto? Hehe.
Will be interesting to see who the creep (yeah the one who wants Naruto I mean) is.
Ino was Naruto's secretary in the first chapter, but know she's an old friend to Kyuubi as well?I guess that you just made a small mistake there...? *small smile*
I was impressed when Sasuke could tell Arashi all those stuff about Naruto, but then of course; h is a genius isn't he? Hehe. But still impressing.
I just can't believe Sasuke called Naruto Naru-usagi. Mwahaha.

Chap4 - Hmm... They ruffled his feathers a little. Kakashi and Sasuke to Naruto that is. I think he needed that.
But ah; they're start-over-lines was so funny! And they are finally getting somewhere, I mean they respect each other right? That's a pretty good start if you ask me. Hehe.
I think you're very considering to mark where lemon starts and stops.

Chap5 - Well it was good to see what happened to Arashi. But it was sad of course.

Chap6 - *dramatic music* And Arashi encounters Sasuke. Sasuke handled that pretty well I think. Sometimes the Uchiha-pride is a good thing. *wink*
I had so much fun when Sasuke was enjoying his food. When I eat something I really really like, and maybe haven't eat in a long time, I call that Oral Orgasm. Hehe. Sasuke calls it almost the same thing, so I found that funny. *wink*
His thoughts about the plushie was really nice written.
And about your coca cola-comment; Me myself doesn't drink that stuff (too much sugar *grimace*) but some of my friends react like that too. Makes me wonder what's in that stuff.

Chap7 - Poor Sasuke, everything happens to him at once. Must be confusing.
Naruto's jealousy on the plushie was so amusing. *snicker*

Chap8 - Sasuke has a hard time with all those feelings for the dobe. *nod* (and I just want to tell you that you double-used Haku (like you did to Ino before) he was both the guy Naruto was fighting at the festival and Sasuke's first crush?).
At least Naruto says they are friends with benefits. Sure, those are great, but I think it's even more hurtful to actually love your friend with benefits than loving your friend without benefits (did that even make sense? *rubs back of neck). Poor Sasuke.

Chap9 - I like that you putted Sai in the story. It's kind of cool that you let him meet up with Sasuke first, of all people. *smile*
It was good that Naruto finally found out that Sasuke likes him. But it was so funny when Sasuke was talking about it to Sai. "Naruto's acting weird." Hahaha. Guess that's one way to put it.
Arashi is such an evil man! Hehe.

Chap10 - Naruto is sooo in denial! Of course he's jealous. A lot. Who wouldn't be with someone like Sasuke around? Hehe.
If Naruto asked me to stay in the way he asked Sasuke... I wouldn't be able to leave either. But now they got problems. *shakes head* Ehm... Not that they already had problems. *sweatdrop*
I liked the lemon, it was well written. And it was light bondage *licks lips* I kind of have a fetisch for that. *rubs back of neck*
And the awaited encounter between Arashi and Sasuke is done. *dramatic music* It was pretty low to use Kabuto. *wrinkles nose*

Chap11 - Now the plot is all over the place... ehrm fic. Naruto knows! But what happened with Sasuke. He can't really be dead can he? That would be pretty sad. *nods* Naruto would never ever be able to love again.
Your author's note in the end of this chapter made me laugh. I was thinking of exactly these questions in a very dramatic way (just add: all your answers are coming next week, same time, same channel) and then there they were! *snicker* I guess that Sasuke is the one with Iruka and Kakashi (because it feels like the two 'mysterious mens' at the two different places are Sasuke and Naruto), it feels more logical that Sasuke is with Kakashi. So then Naruto should be the one on Haku's doorstep.

Chap12 - I really like the way you brought Zabuza, Haku and Iruka into the story so far. And I was right about who was with who (Sasuke with Kakashi&Iruka, Naruto with Haku&Zabuza). *pumps fist in air* Yosh! I'm getting better of this!
It's kind of scary that Arashi has the Akatsuki as bodyguards. *small smile*
And the angst. Naruto thinks Sasuke is dead and Sasuke don't know wnything about what Naruto's doing. Hehehe. Angst, I'm telling you! Mwahahaha.

Chap13 - The way Sai found Naruto was so great. *laugh* Totally random which make so great. Haha. He didn't expect that did he? *laugh even more*
And we get to know how Sasuke's alive, even if I kind of knew bfore hand. That was really the only way I could think of that he was being saved. *nods*
And Naruto is found, Sai has told him that Sasuke is alive. And he has been training for three months just to avenge him. Hehe. But now he can kick daddy's ass anyhow! *laugh*

Chap14 - The plot really thickens now. Everyone is on the move. Really everyone. Will be really interesting to see how everything turns out in the end. How many characters you will kill off. *maniac laughter* (I'm rambling again, just ignore me)
You killed Sai! Damnit woman! How could you? (Okay I'm fine with it, really hehe. Just trying to add to the drama. *wink*)

Chap15 - Arashi's dead was so dramatic. *smile* Really.
It was so sad that they went separate ways, Sasuke and Naruto. But I can understand that it just had to be done.

Cha16 - I loved that Sasuke actually got a bar after all. Haha. Humour!
In the scene when Naruto's talking to his dad by the grave and says that thing about he didn't want anything for two years but now he wants Sasuke to show up, that was really touching I think.
I also think it was nice that Sasuke showed up. After all; those two really belongs together. *smile*

I really liked your story overall. I'm sorry if my ramblings was disturbing or something. *scratch back of neck* I think it was good that you let them work things out over two years, but as I said; I'm happy that you brought them together once more. Everyone deserves a second chance right? *wink*

Anyway. Thankyou for the entertainment. It was appreciated. And of course: good luck with future writing.
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From blueh on July 27, 2007
*sniff* *sniff* such a sweet ending. I'll definitely remember this story. I'll probably read it again and again. ^^, You're a great writer! Here are tons and tons of cookies and chocolates for you!

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From Gwyllion on June 12, 2007
OMG...this fic is friggin amazing!!!!! And the ending! *dies* Whyyyyyyyyy?! *grovels on floor and worships you* Oh please please do think of writing an ending. I would to read more on their relationship after the incident. You have such an amazing ability to catch hold of your readers. Beautiful job in this and such originality!! I do look forward in seeing more of your stuff. Keep it up!

You're devoted fan,

Gwyllion
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From hisoka on May 26, 2007
well at least it's a sweet ending left to your imagination
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From Belovedlovex2 on May 26, 2007
I am sorry that I went all crazy in the last review but I thought there should be a happy ending because they want through such hardships. Sorry if it seem like I did not like you writing. But I love the second ending. Thank Yous for weiting such a great story.
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From Lore on May 26, 2007
Nice ending!! I really enjoyed this story.
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From Lihrah on May 26, 2007
Wow. That was good. A perfect end and a great place to stop. But I think you should have had a little bit more interraction at the end, you know, they say hi and stuff then cut it. Same thing for the last chapter, you should have written about Sasuke's feelings and his departure instead of just saying he left. The leaving is a BIG deal and should have some more time spent on it. I'm not saying make it all detailed and angsty; quite to the contrary, you should leave it with questions in the air. Just...yeah...make it longer without really answering questions...Okay I'm confusing myself with this. I hope you understand though.

As for the sequal...maybe a one or two shot companion fic? Becuase the end is perfect, and I'd just like to see them living together or whatever they are going to be doing. You know, an average day in a gay couple's life?

Love you, deary! Write more!
~Lihrah
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From sh0rtstr4w on May 26, 2007
I'm sad that other people had a hard time with last chapter. I'm a huge fan of your work... all of it. Just the other day on TONFA I actually NOTICED how many of my favorite fics you write (sorry I don't review as often as I should, but I never have much to say other than I love it... which I guess I should still say... so I am saying it now I LOVE THEM! LOVE LOVE LOVE them!!!!!!!!!!) Hopefully, life outside writing will get better too. Good luck!
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From yaoilover07 on May 26, 2007
I agree with you on the way you had the chapter where Naturo's father dies. I loved this whole story. I liked how you wrote the whole thing and I liked how you had them not jump back into a relationship after they meet again. I would love to read the sequal if you write one if not I will happily use my imagination to create how things will work out for them.
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From emp78 on May 26, 2007
Excellent ending! That was just the right touch to make it perfect. Thank you for a wonderful fic!
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From MurakiXTsuzuki on May 25, 2007
Awesome! That was so awesome! GREAT JOB! I really liked this ending! I REALLY REALLY REALLY hope you make a sequel! Plez do! Welll anyways amazing story!
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From aliakenobi on May 22, 2007
OMG OMG OMG, i want to just cry. but i guess not every story can have a happy ending.
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