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Reviews for Creatures of the Wind

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From ANON - Kitakana on May 23, 2015
So cute!! I love seeing their interactions. Thanks for writing!
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From ANON - puppydog on November 04, 2008
Nice. Do more!
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From XFactor on April 14, 2008
I was only giving you a hard time. Both chapters are really well done, you did a very very nice job.
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From XFactor on April 14, 2008
First chapter: Not too bad.. definitely not bad, nor great. It was average, perhaps slightly above.
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From Saitochan on October 14, 2007

Oh, I forgot to include this on my review!

Maybe it's the fact that Ten-Ten is my favorite character, or that the series doesn't focus enough on her, which opens up a great variety of fanfiction possibilities, but, opposite to what everyone else says, I think Ten-Ten and Gaara make a nice couple (not as nice as Ten-Ten and Neji, but nice enough), and as I read the story, I pictured Ten-Ten "acting" it all the time.
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From Saitochan on October 14, 2007

Hey! That was such a nice story! I still have to read the second chapter, but I've loved it so far. Averyone has probably told you this already, but you're great at writing, you know?

I really hope you continue to write more chapters to this story, or more fics, for that matter. Thanks for sharing your writing with the world!
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From wrmcghee on September 09, 2007
i really like this fic. ^_^ not too many of SakuGaa it seems. looking forward to next one!
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From OlhaiLirios on August 26, 2007
Jesus, I can't believe I actually went through the trouble of creating an account just so I could review this story. I guess it's the very least I could do since it's the best I've ever read, and you'll just have to trust me when I say I've read quite a few, and trust me even more when I say I'm picky. Well, I'm aware mostly everyone says that, but I really am horribly, terribly, annoyingly picky. But your story really made quite the impression on me. I had to read it a few times to make sure that I wasn't hallucinating, no, the writing really is that good, the characters really are that endearing. Needless to say you're quite talented, so I won't dwell on the topic. And even though there are only two chapters (now is the time where I do a little begging. Please, oh please, write more chapters!) it's clear there are a lot more issues to tap into. You've made the characters' humanity shine through in a way that there was a feeling of possibility left lingering. I can't pinpoint one aspect that makes this story amazing in my eyes. Maybe it's the dialogs, maybe it's the sensitivity with which feelings are dealt, maybe it's the fact that "Wild is the Wind" is a beautiful, beautiful song. Maybe it's the fact that I sighed after I was done, a little with content, a little out of disappointment because I guess we all wish for an emotionally charged relationship. Not that my current living arrangement with the boy currently sprawled on my bed isn't lovely (he is, even if he makes fun of me for reading stories which he labels "habits for 14 year-old girls to indulge in after they've done their homework." which makes me feel very old at 21). But sometimes a cushy European lifestyle complete with a 9 to 5's, bills to pay and etc just doesn't seem to cut it. And you can't help but feel stupid for wishing to be saved, or being a savior, or something to that extent. I guess I'm just not making any sense with all of this rambling, I really apologize for it. I never intended to make this so long, or confusing for that matter. The story just had that effect on me, I believe. In any case, if the project doesn't go ahead (hopefully it's not the case) you should be really proud for writing such a beautiful piece. I never know how to end reviews, so I'll just end with a smiley face, hope that does it. =)
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From elaynabrooks on February 08, 2007
Hey there.....again, I plague you. This review will be a little long, so bear with me. I feel I gotta let you know some stuff since you're so interested.

I absolutely appreciate your review. I don't get many of them, and it makes me wonder if people actually take the time to read it at all....but, perhaps no news is good news, right? I'm glad that you think it's alright for me to want to describe stuff. My imagination is rather large, and there are things that happen in the story that you would have never known that happened if I didn't describe it in detail, like when the mean little boy 'looked up, and his eyes flashed' before he left Sakura alone. It was because he saw Shino, and they generally were afraid of/disgusted with him, so it made him move in haste.

I love the first chapter with the scenery...I wish people could see what I do in my head....I'm an artist, but I don't think there is enough talent in me to draw and recreate what is so plain and clear in my head. I literally did a little bit of research on trees for that bit, because I didn't know the names of the trees (most of the ones listed are my favorites, especially aromatic sumac, red oak and japanese maple). Maybe I should give you a little taste of what the third chapter will be like...a summary of sorts, since I still haven't recieved the call, and it's practically been a week. (of agony, i assure you...)

There is a brief time skip to the day that Shino returns, where they are all thirteen (The official handbook says that Sakura and the rest of the rookies are in fact thirteen, not twelve when they become genin, except for Gaara, who WAS twelve, Kankuro was either 13 or 14, and Temari was 15) Shino walks past Sakura and Ino as they fought. Neither Sakura nor Shino really remember, but the feelings that they shared remained, and it confused the two of them. Then the whole kiss with sasuke and naruto is incorporated (I try to stick to the main storyline a bit) and the time skips again, for nothing really important happened between them unitl the initial time skip in the story.

Sakura is angry with Tsunade for shirking her duties when she sees that Tsunade looked dead serious. Sakura was then told about Suika, her aunt, who left a pink scroll with a pink ruby cord. The letter explains a lot of things to Sakura. That was as far as I got, but I have what else happened in my head. That's a little of the summary, so I hope it gives you a bit of an idea of what the next chapter is.

Another thing is that I have theme songs for both of them. if you get the chance to look them up, i hope you do. The songs just sort of fit with them, and it'd be a crime if I didn't properly administer them. Shino's song to Sakura is called 'Rendezvous' by Craig David....who has an amazing voice, btw......and I like Sakura's song to Shino even more. It's called 'By Your Side' by Sade. If you get a chance also, go to youtube and watch the music video for that song. It's given me a lot of inspiration whenever I write or draw, and I think you might like it.

Okay, seriously. I need to shut the hell up now. But it's sort of exciting, this is my first Naru-fic. i think i need to email you instead....but this was the first thing i could think of. oo!oooohh! write some other stuff, if you chance it!

*~*Kiyasume*~*
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From elaynabrooks on February 07, 2007
Oh!! And by the way! Read my Naruto story! Please? I'd love you forever and a day if you did! I know it's a rather unpopular pairing (Shino/Sakura) but I think you'd like it! It's only got a couple of chapters right now because im at the university student center....and all of my work is on my laptop, which is currently getting fixed....*sniff* I wuv my shiny silver little pookie! I miss her. and there is at least one person that is angry that the next chapter ain't up yet. Sorry! I know it's good, but I can't really do anything til I get meh laptop back! But Do read what I've got and tell me if you like it! I like your story because it was good....and i sort of have the same writing style you do, except i describe stuff in painstaking detail...it's meh downfall, i know.....but please? Cookies? Shiny puppy dog eyes?

*~*Kiyasume*~*
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From elaynabrooks on February 07, 2007
Konban Wa!

Heh...I'm a japanese major in college right now....'Genkotsu no Sakura is quite right.....but if you wanted a little more edge to it, you could have used 'Kobushi no Sakura' which means the exact same thing, but 'kobushi' also means 'warrior' or 'samurai' just to give it a bit more kick.

Hmm. I wonder if Sabaku is really his last name....does Kankuro-kun and Temari-chan have a last name? I don't know. Whatever. But (as a side note) I do love his japanese actor's voice.....whenever he makes Gaara say 'Sabaku no Sousou' (Desert Funeral/Burial) I melt into a puddle of happy.

If you notice, Sakura already has a pun in her name. Her last name 'Haruno' could also be 'Haru no Sakura' which unsurprisingly means 'Sakura of the Spring'. Heh, I'm good....*touches herself, a hissing noise emitting from her lips* :)

I love your story. It makes me feel all fuzzy and warm inside. And that's damn good too, I live in Michigan, and it's ass-cold outside!!!lol

*~*Kiyasume*~*
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From elaynabrooks on January 18, 2007
I don't care what anyone says, It's definitely Sakura-chan. Firstly, she was there when he died (sure Ten Ten was there, but I'm sure she's much more like Temari, because she's a weapons user) Secondly, she was pissed when he hadn't been recieving proper medical treatment, and Sakura is a bona fide medic-nin....thirdly, that whole thing with Tsunade being able to take him in a fight? who else wouls know that but Sakura, since Tsunade is her shishou? Definitely NOT Ten Ten...and the way she defended the Hokage (Tsunade) makes it all a dead givaway too. I actually knew it was Sakura when it said she was there when he died. Besides, all the other girls just don't seem right for Gaara-kun...my opinion may be a little biased, because I'm a raving fan of SakuGaa fanfiction >.
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From ANON - sonnie on January 08, 2007
I honestly have no clue who the girl is. I wish you'd say, but as the author, it is your choice. Whoever she is, she's free of the normal female character/Gaara pitfalls, so thanks for making this different from nearly every other Gaara romance I've read. I really enjoyed this.
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From promise2003 on January 06, 2007
Truly cruel of you not to tell us who it is. Really. Not happy with you at all, despite the fact that this is one of the best one-shots I have ever read. Ever! (and I read a lot of Naruto fanfiction). Also, damn you for not having any other stories for me to read in your archive. Are you trying to torture me here? Do you have more stories elsewhere? (Please, please, please say you do.)

Thank you for writing this, I was getting discouraged by the lack of good fiction here at AFF, but you made me very happy (and very irked at the same time since you were so vague) with this delightful little story. You make me feel completely inept as an author (way to go you).
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From ANON - Weeble on January 05, 2007
There aren't enough Gaara stories, so thank you for your wonderful but sadly too short story about Gaara!
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