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Reviews for 'When life gives you Emails'

By : SamaSurreal

From ANON - animehead on January 14, 2007
LOL this was a great chapter. It had me laughing! I actually have a beta, as a matter of fact I have two...but if I start to write another story, which I probably will, and if you are busy I will ask you to beta when the time comes. For now, I want to read more of this story. I love the email conversations are great!
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From ANON - Psylocke on January 11, 2007
I found the first two parts amusing.
The Naruto ones....not so much. Ended up scrolling past the last part to click the review button.

hmm, and why is every AU fic set in USA??! >.
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From ANON - SharinganEyes on January 10, 2007
Best of luck dear, I pray you're able to sort through your problems and things turn up for the better. I'm sorry to hear about this, I enjoyed your story and will happily await your return.
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From ANON - madd envy freak on January 09, 2007
man, that sucks... well, *scratches head awkwardly* if it makes you feel better, your reviewers love you. n_n and if you ever need to vent, you can vent to me... God knows my other friends do enough. n_n
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From perfect_blue_rogue on January 06, 2007
-laughing- see? that's y sasuke's such a closet pervert! because naruto's so innocently ukelicious! i mean come on! no wonder everybody woiuld kill to have a chance to "jump" naruto. they prolly so freakin jealous that sasuke gets such a cute sparring partner too. -sigh- i tried to capture them but sasuke escaped my clutches and took naruto with him. i'ma try to lure him back by using itachi as bait. -holds pic of itachi bondage chained to wall and her posing with "v" sign- see! can't wait for next chappie! chao! -poof-
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From ANON - Ty on January 06, 2007
Ahem... I have a penis... and now that that's out of the way, I think I'm going to read this story from the beginning, and probably decide that I'm too tired to review after that.

But at least we're clear that calling me girly, while not offensive enough to gain my spite, makes me feel odd and somewhat uncomfortable.
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From ANON - Chishio on January 06, 2007
This is really good! Update soon!
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From ANON - animehead on January 06, 2007
LOL why does that sound SO much like my life? Oh...except I don't have a sexy Sasuke to chat with *sigh* I liked this chapter a lot, because it reminded me of...well...me. Naruto's is so adorable. I want to kiss him, so I think I will *kisses tattoo of Naruto* You rock Sama! Love ya lots!

Oh...I know I am suppose to be updating, but I'm in my lazy mode. Hmmm...I guess after I do this one shot of Naruto and Kiba, I'll work on updating JOTIH or maybe I'll work on that other story...hmmm I don't know. Gotta go, brain overload...you're doing great! Keep it up! Oraday is awesome, too!
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From ANON - Anon on January 06, 2007
~ROFLMAO~ Dammit continue! Curious to know tho....whered the plushy idea come from??
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From ANON - oraday on January 06, 2007
Hee, I'm blushing from all your compliments^.^ Oh, man. I've got a serious Naruto grin on my face. I seriously love being your beta!

Wah, I don't think I mentioned how much I liked the chapter. Like I said, you make the whole thing humoruous and then, at the end, you throw in a little sadness and that just rounds out the whole chapter. It's awesome!

Oh, I'm working on my fics. Gay Day is kinda on a back-burner right now since I left Fraternity at such a cliffie (I didn't even notice 'til people complained, I'm so oblivious.)

Well, I'm definitely anticipating your next chapter as well and any future stories to beta and enjoy^.^
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From perfect_blue_rogue on January 04, 2007
-giggles- too cute! those two, i swear i just wanna gobble them bothe up and chain them to my bedroom wall along with neji (cause he is just the cutest hyuuga in the series), kakashi, and gaara! wanna help? i'll let u use them as a muse!! it's also trippy that u got sasuke looking thru aff.net (i love go get em' tiger and i love the one i hate) it's just too funny. this would be the first story i read where they actually look at this type of website (and no i not dissin it cause i love it!) can u say closet perv? lol keep up the good work! wow that was long..... -poof-
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From ANON - oraday on January 04, 2007
I've been meaning to do this for awhile, but I'm a procrastinative slowpoke who lacks motivation in general...

Anyways, I have to say, I LOVE YOUR FIC! Heh, Naru sent Sasuke a picture of his butt and he thinks the teme is going to get angry?! Boy, Naruto's denial of being dimwitted sure highlighted that little moment of blondness. Hee the whole thing makes me giggle.

Shall I delve deeper into the greatness of your fic... Well, I'm think I shall. The whole 'lonely' back-drop really brings the fic to whole new level. I really don't think many writers emphasize that link between Sasuke and Naruto enough... That they're both lonely. It's great that you use it. Also, I love how you've consistently emphasized it at the chapters' endings. It's like you give the reader a light-hearted, humorous moment with interspersed mentionings of the loneliness Sasuke and Naruto are experiencing and then you drive it home at the very end. Yeah, I think that's pretty genius right there.

I also love your characterizations of both Sasuke and Naruto. 'Sasuke in-denial' is right up there with 'ero-Sasuke' and 'OCD-Sasuke', mostly because it just suits the bastard so well. And Naruto's moments of dimwittedness and absolute adorable (mild) stupidity remind me of why I love the little dobe. All in all, I have to say you did a wonderful job at keeping them in-character, which is a very rare thing amongst SasuNaru fics.

Okay, now for my criticisms. I read the flamer's note, and while I can tell you that person is assuredly an idiot, he/she had a point about mispelling Uchiha. Not that he/she had a point about it being bad, just the fact that you have, really mispelled Uchiha. I don't care and I doubt anyone else cares either, but I doubt Sasuke would appreciate it so you might wanna fix it. So spell it like this: U-c-h-i-h-a. Two 'h's, no 'n'

Next up, the format. No criticism here... Well, not really. When first reading this fic, the thought, 'why the hell would anyone write like this?!' went through my mind. Not because it's bad, but because it reminded me of one of my own hellish fics that is written in, what I think to be, a crappy format. Yours isn't exactly the same, but it's kinda close (not saying your format's crappy, I just hate mine). Considering the tough time I have writing that fic (because no matter how much I hate the format, my readers do enjoy it and the plot) I have to give you a big, fat kudos. I know it's tough to work in a restrictive format. Not only does the POV you're writting in make the grammar rules even more complicated, but it's hard to really convey what's going on outside of the character's mind. So, did I mention? You're doing a very good job considering the goddamn complexity of the style of writing you've chosen to undertake. Give yourself a pat on the back, you deserve it^.^

Now, in return for this lengthy review--really, you don't owe me anything, I'm j/k(ooh chat-speak, goes with the fic)--you can 1)update and 2)let me be your beta. I am a grammar/spelling Nazi, though a little less uptight. I believe I mentioned I have experience writing in strange POV formats (9 chapters and counting) and I really would like to help you out. I can beta quickly since you keep your chapters short and I really do love what you're doing here. So, if you wanna take me up on the beta offer, just e-mail me. You might wanna skim through my fics to make sure that my grammar is up to your standards for a beta and if you want to, you can go ahead and check out the wacky fic I've been talking about. It's called Fraternity and the format is infinity times harder to understand than yours (so idiots who complain about your fic not making any sense are infinity times more idiotic than my readers, who are all as nice as pie). All my fics are SasuNaru and my author name is Oraday.

Yup, I hope you like long reviews and congratulations for making it to this sentence. :P
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From ANON - Ty on January 03, 2007
Ah, honesty... First off, I only 'skimmed' the first chapter, and second off, if you get mad at my hopefully constructive criticism, and call it a flame, youm can kiss my skinny white arse. -heart-

From what I see, you switch tenses a bit. Something along the lines of 'he doesn't (whatever), and hit (blah blah blah)'. While not a big deal, it can be hard to follow a story that switches back and forth between tenses without warning.

Okay, so I'm actually too tired to write anyhting much more than that, but I will say that the idea behind the story seems nice, and that with some work and a good beta reader, this could probably collect a fandom.

If I ever stop being lazy (and stop working long, sporadic hours), maybe I'll send you an e-mail full of practical advice. Either that or you'll never hear from me again. -heart-

Either way, keep up the work. It might not be good in everyone's eyes, but I see nothing in the opinions of those who have not tried. And I have tried, and failed miserably at writing (damn procrastination is what it is). So hopefully, with that in mind, you'll take my sad bit of advice to heart.
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From ANON - animehead on January 03, 2007
I still think it cute! Sasuke is a bastard, you don't have to apologize for it, BUT he's a sexy bastard!

Anyway, the chapter was good. I thought I left cliff hangers! Okay, well I do leave them, because it's fun! I like to torture my readers. *insert evil laugh*

Keep going, I am waiting to see what happens next, since I am too lazy to update my next chapter, and get back to writing the other ton of stories that I am working on.

Love ya *snuggles*
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From ANON - Ertz on January 03, 2007
No you must keep writeing the suspense will kill me and i like the way you write!!
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