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Reviews for Snow-white dishonour.

By : PurpleKitten
  • From ANON - TonTon on December 28, 2006
    The story id good and well written, even though you have some spelling mistakes.
    Please continue it as I am starting to like it. ^^
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  • From Hestia on December 27, 2006
    Hi! I'm glad you weren't upset about my Gemna/Neji backstory. I've been off aff for a while for Xmas, so it was a nice to return to TWO chapters!!! I like the love bite on Genma. The Kakashi/Shika bonding is going great--I love how Shika shivers when Kakashi says his name. The sharing of the Icha Icha books was a good touch too. I love the white fang on the chain--and the suicide of the dad--almost no one ever talks about that in Kakashi stories. This is really going well--with the good amount of time that has passed, it should also stop anyone from being freaked out about underage thing--you've made it clear this is a romance not a perv thing. I'm looking forward to more--great two chapters!!!
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  • From ANON - Cindy on December 27, 2006
    Great, interesting story~! Can reviews make you write longer too? ;)
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  • From ANON - Pam on December 21, 2006
    Yes! You're making a Neji/Genma pre-fic, limey! Yaaay ! I love you. -giggle-
    Good fic so far! Update soon!
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  • From Hestia on December 16, 2006
    Hi--thanks for the thanks--you're very welcome. I felt inspired by that to note down a few little grammar things. But first--yea!!! I love it--I have to confess I sort of stole a page from your book and suddenly added a backstory to my Neji/Gaara romance, making Neji's first love Genma--please don't be mad! Anyway I made Genma a jerk unlike your Genma. I like the friendship between Shika and Neji here--I'm a little curious about the comment about Lee--is there some past event involving Lee, Neji, and Shika that will surface, or is it just Shika doesn't like Lee because he is the antithesis of laziness. I love the explanation for Shika's mom--great stuff! Well I hope we get a little bit of lemon in the next chapter--even if its just a little verticle dry humping and ass gripping--please!!! Neji--sneaking over to see Genma--well he's no coward. Great stuff! Oh, and here's the little grammar notes I promised. Thanks for the update!

    1. line 2—mother’s concerns
    2. Quotes inside quotes usually become single quotes: “Yeah `Oh’… That’s him… What should I do Shikamaru?
    3. in same paragraph it’s easier to read if you say cloud-white eyes
    4. “so wired answers”?? “such weird answers”?
    5. “to much” should be “too much”

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  • From ANON - Hestia on December 15, 2006
    Well I only saw a few typos (west for vest is the only one I remember at the moment). I really love these unique pairings--I like the chuunin rule--nice touch. Well I love all four characters, and they seem like they could be very happy pairs--I looking forward to seeing how this works out. Great start!
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