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By : VRon8899

From ANON - Cucumber Monger on February 02, 2007
Konnichi wa!!!
i luffsess yous story!!!!!!!
I'm in a chibi mood right now, you'll have to excuse me.
i love the thing about Gaaras eyes, i know this is supposed to be a review and i'm not doing too well, but this is my very first time reviewing anything, so please bear with me.T-T....
I also write fanfics, so please except my....wait...i'm not going to give you any critisism...oh, wait, may i? i wish to be as friendly and tolerable as humaly possible....well, without seeming entirely too weird, of course,but still.... anyways.. if you don't mind i'd like to suggest the use of slightly more complicated words, such as...aperture, rather than butt, or ass. not that i'm saying you have to, or would, simply a friendly suggestion, and instead of saying without stopping, perhaps the word incessantly would be more suiting, and so on and so forth. I find your fanfic to be so incredibly plausible that it actualy may not make any difference whether or not you were actually to do so. I also understand that you may be in a tad bit of a predicament as not all english speaking people may be able to comprehend the actual meaning of some of the words you might otherwise replace more simple words with. please pardon me for any possible rudeness that may have been taken from anything i have said. i wish you the best, thank you for your time.
Ja ne!

Sincerely,

~Cucumber monger
P.S. your story is so kawaii!!!!!!!! when you wrote the section of the fic about Sasuke-san telling Naruto-san to wake up, and what not, I almost cried! Good work! omedeto gozaimasu!/congratulations!
bye bye!!!!
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From anapana83 on January 31, 2007
Wow, there is just plot everwhere here! Where is this all coming from! Good job though i must say. Who is this leader, and this guy who appears at the end. Why does he not want Naruto turned in dead? I have my theories but i don't wanna say. Anyway, cant wait till next update!
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From Ukagau on January 31, 2007
...hmmm What is going on and who is the new leader? I would rank this as a good chapter. I'm proud of Naru putting his foot down and not letting the other Kage's tell him what to do. Really, isn't that what Naruto does all the time and how he became Hokagae...fighting people who said he couldn't do it? Neji and the others got one!!!! hahahaha...I had faith. Neji really works hard to protect the Hokage sooo...he should have a 'friend'...-nudge nudge-. Not much to say now so I'm gonna leave you with a cheer to updating!
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From ANON - Mey on January 30, 2007
Hiyaaa, thanks for the reply ^____^
Excelent chapter !!!!! (do you mind if i keep on reviewing, I tend to review each update u__u)
Very nice touch with the "Who us?" xD That was SO cool xD
Hey, want me to beta some?
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From ANON - Bookworm51485 on January 28, 2007
Awwww, Gaara and Naruto.... well maybe mostly Naruto, fighting for their love. Defending their right to be together to the other kages. So romantic..... Okay, I'm sorry. I'm done being stupid now. I'm never going without food again. Half a piece of bacon and a bagel is not a meal that will carry you through a whole day. Anyways moving on...

I'm having some.... thoughts about the story. I'm wondering if maybe Sasuke isn't really dead, if he's the one who's trying to capture Naruto. Or maybe Orochimaru, given the hissiness of the mysterious figure. I can't wait for your next update to find out what they're going to do with this whoever it is and for more GaaNaru and the meetings and Neji and others. Yay
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From ANON - mey on January 26, 2007
OMFGGGG, you absolutely ROCK!!!

You know, I like smutty stories (guess avery girl who enters this site does) but i love above all, smutty stories which have a descent plot, and nice development of characters... and yours is one of the best i read on thin part of anywhere.

Seriously, excelent fic, hope you will update soon, asyou have been doing ^_____^

Also love poor neji in this fic... poor, poor guy, he only got to be the last resourse for a horny angry oh-my-lover-is-gonne-and-I'm-pissed naruto, tsk, tsk...

O, I also saw your devart (I'm dragonpunchi over there), very nice juicy gallery ^^

Er, sorry for being such a bother, but i've got a small requesty, just a situation I would die to read written by you here... could it ever happen a situation where Naruto has to comfort a sad Gaara... just a thaught I had, it's OK if it doesn't fit, but well... i think it's worth asking ^__^

Thanks so much for the effort, and this great piece of writting
Mey

P.S.: Your smut is glorious >___
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From Ukagau on January 24, 2007
Ohh my! Someone found out about those two kages snoggin in the shower. I wonder how the other kages react to this juicy news ehh? I must say that a jealous Gaara would quite well do it for me...I think. Neji does need someone to love...so he dosn't mess with Narutos' and Gaaras' thing. You keep bringing up situations that are sooo exciting...mmm....Naru and Gaara caught in the act. It was only a matter of time though till someone outside of the leaf and sand village found out about them right? I hope it works out between the two because Naruto in the beginning of the story was no fun (being depressed and not taking care of himself). The scene was hot...thankyou so much for it. Gambatte with your beta!!! I know your stories will get even better because of it!! -Waves and gives more cookies and coffe- Ja ne!
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From ANON - Shinza on January 24, 2007
Ep! That was so amazing! I'm really glad you finished it! i can't wait for the next part! Yay! Hope you update soon! ^_^! Great story!
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From ANON - Zetsumi on January 24, 2007
No, you never did e-mail me. And it shows; I found a multitude of spelling errors, misplaced or missing punctuation marks and a boat load of other stuff. But...I gotta say, this...was...HOT!!! I'm still on fire from reading it!
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From ANON - Shinza on January 23, 2007
Ep! That was soooo awesome! I love the way you write and you should totally finish this! I mean... you can't leave us hanging! Please! Well, great story! and i hope you update soon!
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From ANON - Seul on January 23, 2007
I read this all in one go. I love the story! But PLEASE go into more detail with the intimacy scenes! Update soon. :)
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From anapana83 on January 22, 2007
That was AWESOME. Finish it, finish it, finish it! Leave that boring meeting for later. As for Neji...yea, i do feel bad...i'd be open to whatever you might have planned. Him with Shika, Kiba, Naru/Gaara, i don't care, as long as its good lol. Ah, btw i noticed something, there's a part there where you say that Naruto grabs the soap, you made a lil error and put soup, and at the very end when Gaara says "Uzumaki", you put "Uzamaki" or something like that. Thought i'd just point it out so you can fix it later. Other than that, it was an awesome chapter.
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From Ukagau on January 22, 2007
AHHH!!! Poor Neji! I feel so bad for him. -gives him cookie- I does care for Naruto a lot and that�s sweet. I'm glad Naruto talked to him about it, making it clear that it was over and done with. I hope that they will remain friends (but I'm sure they will cause your not mean like that =D). Gaara knows what�s going on? I think you made it clear that he did, I don't want Gaara jealous though�.a jealous Gaara might be very very sexy...-cough- anyways!!! Mmmmmmmmm�...lemons�..nice. Poor Gaara losing control, Naruto isn�t very nice�or�is he? One thing I do have to comment on that I think I haven�t before is the fact that your smut scenes don�t break up the plot that goes on around the characters. Smut is good yes, but a great plot that weaves it together is even better and I think that you managed to make a good equilibrium between the two. I have to congratulate you. I usually don�t find one with both. Most have just smut without purpose and others have plot with no yummies. =D �gives a trillion everlasting fresh cookies- I absolutely love your other stories�but I never comment�I�m bad at it yes I know.

To sum it all up: I loved this chapter and can�t wait for your next installment and I�m sooo happy the chapter was long (I�ve read it three times now) I also love you writing style, its good and not to stuffy or not dumbed down with youthonisims(sp?) that scream immaturity. AND, I love your other stories as well so keep up the good work and I will cheer you on with cookies and coffee (if you like it) while you work!!!!!!!!!!!!

愛してる！！！
うかがうーちゃん。

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From ANON - MeLaiya on January 22, 2007
Ok, 1. YOU HAD BETTER FINISH THAT SHOWER SCENE OR I SWEAR ILL HATE YOU FOREVER UNTIL TOMARROW. And 2. I feel bad for poor Neiji too. What'ya think about having him and kiba or shikamaru hook up? Anyhoo, loving this per usual and please finish the shower scene. I love an inexperienced, uke, Naruto-seme, scene. Escpecially when its well written.
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From ANON - Zetsumi on January 21, 2007
Ahhh, why can't I throttle Neji? He was mean to Naruto! Grrr you, Neji Hyuuga! Well, anyways, my e-mail address is addoedeb_fox@yahoo.com. Send me an e-mail and let's see what you've got. Although, if this lemon is a sample of it, then I say we can make this work just fine!

...I love lemons between these two! Hot!!!
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