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Reviews for Betrayal and Love (Finished)

By : DemonicTenshi
  • From ANON - feisu on December 07, 2006
    yo.. interesting story, though i would punch the guy/girl in the face if he/she would've slept with my ex crush imagining me while she/he is fucking her/him lol, but hey thats me :D i would have imagine naru-chan giving him hard time and maybe then accept his apology. anyways update soon
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  • From ANON - reisha on December 07, 2006
    I think you should get a beta for your beta cause the errors are just too much to count, especially the punctuations (what's with all the question marks?).

    Other than that, great chapter, though a tad predictable.
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  • From ANON - Christina on November 20, 2006
    It's great!! Please write more !!!
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  • From ANON - kloud on November 18, 2006
    Keep writing... I am enjoying the story. I love betrayal fics!
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  • From ANON - Soulanubious on November 17, 2006
    wow! this story is great, poor poor Naruto why must he always suffer like this, I hope you Up-date soon.
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  • From ANON - FallingStAr10487 on November 17, 2006
    dude this story rocks I can't wait for more!
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  • From ANON - vixenia on November 16, 2006
    ^^ hiya. i really love the story idea you have going. and if you are still in need of a beta then i'd love to help you out. well i have to go. ja ne
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  • From ANON - Tara (Nurse Tenshi-Lee) on November 16, 2006
    Nani? (regarding your Note to all)
    I didn't find a poblem with your grammar. *raises an eyebrow in confusion* Who's been complaining? Anywayz, I've been meaning to ask. What the HELL is a beta??

    And also, great chapter by the way, can't wait till they confront each other. Keep in mind, a jealous Sasuke, is the best Sasuke.
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    Well...not really...a jealous/stalker-potential/cut-throat/maniac is the best Sasuke, lol! I'm such a crazy mofo, forgive me! Sumimasen!
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  • From ANON - Ai on November 16, 2006
    omg make Sakura pregnant!!make Sakura pregnant!!make Sakura pregnant!!Make Sasuke SUFFER Make Sasuke SUFFER Make Sasuke SUFFER and die in pain, but not really but enough to get it through his F****** head!!!muahahahahahah (and btw I also agree dont make Naruto wimpy make him and cry and forgive Sasuke just like that LET HIM HAVE SOME FUN FOR A FUCKING CHANCE lol sorry didn't mean to get angry there lol.

    and the whole grammar spelling thing, don't worry about, I have grammar problem they have grammar problem we all have it along with spelling (>_
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  • From ANON - The Warumono on November 16, 2006
    I don't care about the gramar!XDDDD
    I LOVED you story!XDD *LOVE,LOVE,LOVE*
    Make Naruto strong(I don't really want to se him all "Ah, I forgive you sasuke!" like...to many storys for thet here already.)Make Sasuke suffer - It's time that man got to fight for what he really wants. And please for the love of God, DON'T make Sakura pragnent!
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  • From ANON - redtatsu on November 16, 2006
    Hey! You know what? I am enjoying your story so far. And if they think your grammer is bad... Lets just say I don't do alot of writing without bugging people on how to spell words. People expect perfection when reading fanfiction and sometimes don't realize that nobody is perfect. Keep writing your stories. If people can't get over grammer mistakes, then they should read something else. Well. With that aside. Whatcha got next?
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 16, 2006
    Couple of errors here and there, but other then that I loved it!

    I really hope Sasuke gets sick while waiting in the rain and I also hope some one (Neji or KIBA!!!!!!^_^) comes along and try to woo Naruto lol infront of Sasuke and Sasuke gest all jealous (because he deserves it) and we all love Jealous Sasuke, neh neh?

    well update soon however it will be in the next chapter I know i will love it (unless it's some Sasuke and Sakura lemon crap thing, I might then throw up!!>_
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  • From ANON - serendepity37 on November 16, 2006
    that last sentance was so cute! but your grammer isnt that good overall good though! :)
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  • From ANON - AyanaxChan on November 16, 2006
    You know what's weird? I was thinking about this story in class and here it is updated!!!! heheh I'm so happy you finally updated!!! I feel so sorry for Naruto argh I wish Sakura just suddenly dies....reeeeaaaalll painful, you know what i mean. As for Sasuke, hmph he can get hurt real bad for all I care.

    anyways I hope you get th next chapter up soon, so good luck!!!
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  • From TakiTenshi on November 15, 2006
    Wow. Mama likes! lol.
    This is my opinion, feel free to shun it or even spit on it because I have no right to tell/ask you what to do on your story.

    Naruto shouldn't be such a pansie! I hate it when he's like that. He should hold in his feelings for Sasuke and play hard to get! Until Sasuke begs! And he should act like nothing happened but make it perfectly clear that he is slightly unhappy....also I love a jealous Sasuke. Make that happen, won't you? (With Neji or Gaara?) Pleeease!

    Don' mind if you don't take this on but I think it'd make it more intriguing than it already is.

    Update SOOOONN!!
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