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By : Sapphirexkat2
  • From ANON - hey2you2 on November 12, 2006
    This is the best Itachi/Sasuke story I have ever read!!! Please I'm begging you don't make this a one shot, please please please please please please make this into a story!
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  • From ANON - Mirror-chan on November 12, 2006
    Sasuke is by far the sluttiest nine year old in inexistance.

    There are a few words missing and grammatical errors, but other than that it was pretty good. Keep up the lovely work. I adore your stories.
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  • From ANON - kittycat on November 12, 2006
    thats not the end RIGHT?!?!?!?!?!?! YOU WILL UP DATE RIGHT?!?!?!?!?!?!? I LOVE YOUR STORY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Anamymous on November 12, 2006
    Dude, that was awesome. Love the ending of the first chapter "Itachi""Hello, mother"LOL. Well, can't wait to see how you carry on the story.
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  • From ANON - Lit on November 12, 2006
    Ahhh!! I wish this wasn't a one-shot! It'd be an awesome fanfic with chapters. I know that it was OOC, but I it moved really fast. Hehe, I like the idea that Orochimaru wanted Sasuke too. Great job!
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  • From ANON - Dragon on November 12, 2006
    I fucking love this story grate lemon I love the part when Sasuke was pleading for Itachi to fuck him. I hope that this is just the begining and not the end of this story if so UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - KakashiSanzo5790 on November 12, 2006
    liked it?!
    i absolutely LOVED IT!
    i love all of your itachixsasuke stories!
    this one was extremely hot! ^.^
    im still desperately waiting for an update to welcome to the mile high club!
    (im such a pain in the ass....this i know ^.^)
    anyway....loved it terribly...love you for writing it and many other itachixsasuke fics!

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  • From ANON - Lisa on November 12, 2006
    Oh Em Gee.
    Sasuke is the biggest little slut ever.
    I must say, I LOVED the ending.
    Awesome story, keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - Hellagoddess on November 12, 2006
    Oh man...that was awesome! But i feel so dirty for liking it! Keep up the excellent work!
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  • From ANON - aria on November 12, 2006
    OMG! it's so hot, i love it.
    please continue this. i want more shota ItaSasu!
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  • From ANON - Sekre on November 12, 2006
    -jaw drop- Wow ... that was one of the best shoutas I've ever read o.o The ending was fantastic ... left me wanting more :) ItaSasu goodness ^^
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  • From ANON - Rho on November 12, 2006
    Holy cow, hotness. Yeah...>> I mean...Sex with little kids is bad. Anyways, awesome work and for some reason the end had me laughing rather loudly, earning the attention of everyone on my floor. They all liked the story too. WOnderful job. ^^
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  • From ANON - MissMayumi on November 12, 2006
    OHH! That was..HEAVENLY..I loved how Itachi told Sasuke to *ride it*..can you make some more Itachi/Sasuke smut!..especially shota!
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  • From ANON - KeairaxSeiaa on November 12, 2006
    Ack! One more thing you might want to fix... (I feel really bad for not catching this the first time around. But, if it makes you feel any better, the fact that I caught it now means that I liked this story enough that I wanted to read it all over again XD). In the beginning, when you talk about the things Orochimaru has done to Sasuke, you mention that he's made Sasuke orgasm before. Then later, when Itachi and Sasuke are alone and Sasuke has become aroused, he says basically that he's never experienced an erection before. But he would have had to, for Orochimaru to have done what you say he has in the beginning. Really, from what I've noticed, it seems like you wrote the first part of this a while ago, and then later wrote the second part, maybe forgetting some of the things you'd written before. XD I've made that mistake myself. I hope this helps you improve you story, and I'm still enjoying it a lot. Keep writing!
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  • From ANON - KeairaxSeiaa on November 12, 2006
    I really like this, and ItaSasu (I'm a HUGE Uchihacest fan), which is why I'm going to give you a really critical review. XD; I hope you don't mind, I just think that with a few corrections, this could be a really good story.

    First of all, you have a few tense issues. Those are really no big deal, though, because they can easily be fixed by a good beta. I'd suggest getting one just to give the story a read-over, if you haven't already. If you have, maybe ask them to look specifically for tense errors.

    Next, in the beginning, you go into detail about how Sasuke has problems with customers hitting on him. Then, later, you talk about how he longs to have someone 'finally' be attracted to him. That's a bit of a contradiction, and it really sort of took away from the story. I'd suggest finding some way to balance those two concepts, maybe by explaining that he longs for someone to have REAL feelings for him, instead of just lust?

    Finally, when Sasuke and Itachi first meet, Itachi refers to Sasuke by his name. Then, later, Itachi asks Sasuke what his name is. This could be explained by Itachi simply having forgotten Sasuke's name, but it's a bit awkward unless you actually STATE that Itachi has apparently forgotten it. Besides that, Itachi doesn't seem the type to forget much, anyway. I don't know, the easiest way to fix it would probably be to take out the part where Itachi calls Sasuke by his name, and simply have him call Sasuke by something else.

    Other than those things, however... I REALLY liked this. The idea was fairly original, and I liked the way both characters were portrayed. The sex scene was HOT, and my only complaint there is that a boy as young as Sasuke would actually have a dry orgasm. But I LOVED the ending. I was worried that they weren't actually brothers in this, but then the ending was just... wow. I'd really love the see this continued. I can't wait to see how their mother handles things, what happens with Sasuke and Itachi, etc. Please continue, I'll be looking forward to more!
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