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By : oraday
  • From ANON - Lemon Drops on November 12, 2006
    Definitely drop me a line when you update, I wouldn't want to miss it. I really hope that you have good things planned for our little cute side-couple. I really like Neji and Gaara as a pairing, so thanks for putting them together. It did feel a bit rushed how fast they turned around their feelings, but still very fun to read.


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  • From ANON - Anon on November 12, 2006
    naruto got HIS uchiha*knw clue how to spell sasukes last name*

    and neji and gaara are so hot together
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  • From ANON - punkin02 on November 12, 2006
    This story is great! I loved the whole shoving them in a closet deal. And the fact that it actually worked! I never thought of Gaara and Neji as a pair before, but I like it in this story:D Please update soon.
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  • From ANON - Exane on November 11, 2006
    who needs a real plot? it's the smutty love that counts!
    i hope sasuke gets to fuck naruto senseless soon..!!
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  • From ANON - Luthien Wildglen on November 11, 2006
    LOL!!! Alright, I know I said this last time, but there’s really no other way to describe it, so I’m just going to say it: that was HILARIOUS!!! I thoroughly enjoyed that chapter a ton and your author’s notes as well. I love the way you write the authors notes like they are from the end of one of those old TV shows from the 50’s or 60’s. It was getting to the point where I had to stifle my laughter so I wouldn’t wake people up.

    However, as much as I hate to dampen the mood, I have to say that sometimes during Gaara’s and Neji’s little *hot* scene there, it got a little confusing on who was speaking, or thinking, so just watch out for that while writing chapter 4. Alright, that’s all I have to say in the way of constructive criticism. My best wishes for you and your writing.


    Dryad1789@hotmail.com

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  • From ANON - MissMayumi on November 11, 2006
    Hey! I loved chapter 3!...I love the pairing Neji/Gaara!..but I hope this doesn't sound mean, I'm just trying to help you..The sex scene wasn't that great compared to the first chapter sex scenes..Just a suggestion..but maybe you could get it beta'd??..I'm not trying to be mean, I'm just suggesting, it's a great plot, but it needs a little fixing..so thanks though for your freat story!!..pleasee update soon!!..and please don't hate me!..Im only trying to help!!..thanks
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  • From ANON - americanXminority on November 11, 2006
    This fic is friggin' hilarious.
    Kind of rushed and...random, but still funny.
    I wouldn't mind reading more if you post it.
    :]
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  • From ANON - Luthien Wildglen on November 10, 2006
    Oh my God that was hilarious! LOL!!! I absolutely love the way you wrote this. It really has a way of drawing the reader in, and not just because you are actually talking to the reader either. The changing points of view really add to the fic as well, and surprisingly, there isn’t any confusion about whose point of view it is either.
    I must admit that the fic seems to be moving almost at warp speed, but I find myself not even minding that. It’s fitting, and you really have a way of conveying Sasuke’s, and Naruto’s innate sexiness. My only advice to you would be to look over your chapters before posting them so that you don’t miss the grammatical errors in the fic. Other than that, you’re doing great and I look forward to your next chapter. My best wishes for you and your writing.


    Dryad1789@hotmail.com
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  • From ANON - Passing Reader on November 10, 2006
    I love your story!!! The first chapter had me in fts of laughther, my favorite part was when Sasuke said " I swear, that as soon as I find something I'm attracted to, I'm going to jump whatever it is and fuck the living daylights out of it." I nearly fell outta my chair from laughing so hard! You also have a unique writting style, writting in 4 povs must be difficult! Im going to read the 2nd chapter now and look forward to futer chapters! Ja!

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  • From ANON - kawaiicrimsonkitsune on November 10, 2006
    ^^ Poor naru-chan hes going to loose his virginity before the nights over. I think Gaara and Naji might get it on, and ME WANT KYUUBI! So please hurry and update =3
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  • From ANON - Staff Sgt. Swofford on November 10, 2006
    AWESOME FIC!!!!!! keep it up, and pleeeeeeease update soon!!!
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  • From MsKeller on November 10, 2006
    Oh this is sooo great. A nice change of pace from all the angsty serious stuff out there. This could stand to be written out a bit more but sometimes the simplicity really helps add to everything. And I vote for Sasuke and Naruto to get it on! It'd also be funny if Kiba tried something on Hinata in the theater which got Neji all freaked out. Congats on making this really cute and funny and yet sexy at the same time!
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  • From ANON - Mija on November 10, 2006
    lol, ooh I just found this fic and I am totally loving it, its sooo funny..poor poor naru, so dense as to what Neji and gaara wanted, but he sure picked it up from Sasuke pretty fast, lol, nice start, cant wait for more, and I just have to add that the comments you make at the end, the authors notes sort of?? they soo remind me of the old way they used to intice you to watch the next episode of a soap opera, too funny, I love it, ty for sharing, hope to read more soon, huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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  • From ANON - Jane_Lane on November 10, 2006
    Wow dude! YOU ARE SOOOO AWSOME! Creams pants....
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 10, 2006
    good plot and grammar it has a nice pace and yet it hooks the readers almost immediatly
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