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By : Zrina

From ANON - hanyou-elf on September 07, 2007
Chapter 35 today� (and just a little thing I wanted to point out before I continued with my review. Earlier in the story you have changed Arashi to Minato, but in this chapter, it was still Arashi, in case you wanted to change it!)

I�m not much for Sasuke-seme. I don�t enjoy that prospect too much. It doesn�t work on a lot of levels for me. Naruto is far to domineering for me to see him as anything less than a seme, but you did an incredible job of making me believe it would be possible. I liked Sasuke�s hesitation in becoming the seme, in taking Naruto. Not only would he reinforce the bond he�s building with Naruto, he�s going to strengthen it and he�s going to make it damned near impossible for him to leave Naruto behind. I like that for Sasuke, taking Naruto like this is an act that he can�t do it just because he wants to. Its something that is important and it means a lot to him. I like the seriousness that Sasuke has when he approaches having sex with Naruto, when he takes Naruto. It�s a nice touch. Because intimacy is something that is new to both of them, that it means so much to them both. I like that Naruto is willing to do what it takes to reassure Sasuke. That he�s certain. The differences in their approaches to relationships, to sex, it�s nice to read. And you did a very good job characterizing it.

And the lemon was hot too. It was incredibly well done, well thought out and the entire chapter was delicious! I loved it, very much I loved it. I liked the uncertainty in Sasuke�s actions, the way he was much more hesitant to take Naruto like that, but he still wanted to. But I really liked when he gave Naruto head. It was hot. Very, very hot. I love the way you wrote it. It was well done, and very much the way a person would give his first blow job. It was nervous and iffy, he was unsure of how he wanted to do it, but he just wanted to give Naruto pleasure. Very good. It�s a good definition of their relationship. The way they focus on each other, to make sure the other is happier, rather than just on themselves.

Again, I like the focus on them as characters, on their developing relationship. I like how you wrote them growing closer and stronger together. How you made them focus on each other rather than the other, outside influences. You�ve done an awesome job with this. And the more I read it, the more I think, if Sasuke hadn�t of left the village and Naruto had tried to pursue him there, how receptive to that would Sasuke really be? He does have an appearance, a name to keep up. And if he were to allow himself to become engrossed in Naruto and Naruto�s oft havoc inducing behavior, how would his dignity, his honor affect him. Alone with Naruto, without anyone around to keep tabs on Sasuke�s prissiness, his honor are allowed to be loosened, he can be himself around Naruto. He can allow himself to get close to Naruto because he�s not around anyone else. He doesn�t have to maintain any kind of pre-ordained systems or anything, you know? I like that in this story.

I also love the way you wrote Team 8 and Sai. Sai really does like Naruto. Something about Naruto draws Sai in and he can�t help but be there for him. He can�t help but want to do something, to try to protect Sai. It�s nice to see him protecting Naruto from the Council. But at the same time, I can also understand Team 8�s frustration with Sai over everything. They want to go home eventually. They want to see their village, their homes, their families and the friends they had to leave behind. But if Sai is keeping them tracking all over the countryside, they won�t get to go home soon. They have a mission to do, but they are also human, and they want the familiarity of their lives in Konoha. I like the way you portrayed it, the way you wrote it out. It�s good, and it�s subtle, the reader can pick up on it, but poor, oblivious Sai, left out of the loop�

And then Hanazaki and Sasame. Good stuff. I can�t wait to see how they develop in this story. I loved Sasuke�s reaction to Sasame, the jealousy he felt and demonstrated when Naruto hugged her, or the attention she paid to him. That was pretty funny. It amused me. And I love the way you wrote them together. Sasame and Hanazaki are doing everything in their power to take care of their village, trying to keep it afloat even while Orochimaru is doing so much against them. He�s wrecking havoc on everything that they have, and he didn�t care. And now that he�s gone, Hanazaki and Sasame have a real chance at making the village stronger. It�s a good added depth to this story.

I love it!

*off to read more*
~hanyou-elf

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From manicandyshumway on September 06, 2007
Do I need to state how much I love this story? I don't think I could put it into words to save my life. *waits for the next chapter and hopes that it's not the last*
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From ANON - yumemi on September 06, 2007
BLOODY GOD!! Your fic is one of the MOST IN-Character Sasunarusasu fic I've read out of the hundreds!! I love how your fic progressed sasuke and naruto's relationship so perfectly into what it is now...and the fights and orochimaru totally took my breath away!! LOVE YOU!!!

keep up the good work!!
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From hanyou on September 06, 2007
I�m back and on chapter 30 today.

Wow. First I obviously have to start with the full on lemon (both of them!) and boy, oh boy were they delicious. I love that Naruto is willing to be gentle and slow and loving with Sasuke. He�s taking into consideration the fact that Sasuke is new to everything, he is uncertain, and confused, and Naruto is more than willing to slowly introduce him to everything. Which is nice, considering the fact that Naruto needs to take it slow with him. I love the way you wrote this, I really do. It is realistic, it�s human. Its fascinating to me and I really enjoy reading it because of the way it is done. The lemons were both really very hot. The first one, their first time, was absolutely incredibly hot. I like the delicacy Naruto treated Sasuke with, the way he made him not only enjoy the entire thing, but that he made him want to beg for it, that he made him scream.

One of the things I really liked about it was Sasuke�s hesitancy. The way he wanted to prove that he wasn�t submissive, that he wasn�t weak. I like that he didn�t want to admit to wanting to suck Naruto off. He doesn�t want to be the perceived submissive, because it would just throw him off of his game. And Naruto�s reaction to his being afraid was perfect. It was a good reaction, something I could see happening. And when they did it, your description was very well done. You had me wondering if you were really a girl, it was absolutely astounding. I love the description. I love your work. Beautiful job darling.

And then the second one, in the shower. Yeah. Definitely enjoyable. I love the way you wrote it, but it brings me to the next thing I want to talk about. Orochimaru�s influence and Kyuubi�s influence on Naruto. I like that you haven�t forced Orochimaru and Kyuubi into the complete background. You�ve given them a role, a force to play and they are going to do it magnificently, ne? I really like how Orochimaru is still maintaining that arrogant, dangerous side that he has, while still being forced to bow to the Kyuubi. It�s rather rare, hot pairing that you�ve integrated into this story. I love the way you�re writing. Kyuubi�s ruthlessness is fun to read. I really like that you kept Kyuubi as a bastard. He�s self-serving and arrogant. And he does what he wants, regardless of everything else around him.

Moving on to the newest characters you�ve put into the story, Sai, Shino, Kiba (with Akamaru), and Hinata. This is awesome. I love the way you wrote them, and Sai�s humor, social misfit that he is, is absolutely great! Sai�s comments are just observations and he doesn�t think anything about them, but it�s absolutely great. I love the way you wrote him, his humor is dry and perfectly him. Its fun to read. And his interaction with Team 8 is fun as well. I love the way he talks to them, straight and to the point, and humiliating to them. It�s quite amusing. I love it. I can�t stop laughing at Sai.

And the plot progression in this is great. I love the way you developed it, you moved it along so that the reader maintains an interest in the story and still can pay attention and know what�s going on. I like the way you�ve done it. It�s a fascinating story, and I love it. Great job with the introduction of Sasame, and the country�s leaders. I�m looking forward to more.

Till next time!

*loves*
~hanyou-elf

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From hanyou on September 05, 2007

Another group of great chapters. (I just finished chapter 24)

I love the interaction between Sasuke and Naruto. I love the way you�re building them up. You�ve made them into fascinatingly three dimensional characters and should be incredibly proud of yourself. The way you wrote them growing closer and closer, the relationship developing between them, it�s really quite well done. I like the way you made them so realistic.

Another thing I really liked about this set of chapters was the fact that Sasuke�s emotions were starting to show just a bit more. He�s so insanely caught up in Naruto that he doesn�t recognize what he�s feeling; he just knows it�s something. I love the portrayal of his jealousy, how deeply needy he is of Naruto. To possess, to own, to love, to dictate. He wants to keep Naruto as his own and its fascinating the lengths he�ll go through to accomplish his goal. I love that Naruto is willing to be patient enough in this, to allow Sasuke his fits of jealousy and need when he has them. It�s cute, and it�s nice. It fits in their relationship.

These chapters have impressed me simply because of the progression of plot. I like the fact that the past few chapters have been incredible active and exciting and these have been a welcome reprieve that. You�re giving us a change of pace, letting us see how the boys are growing together. How external circumstances are helping to draw them closer, how Naruto is able to worm his way into Sasuke�s heart and all.

These are a fun set of chapters because of Sasuke. Simply because of Sasuke. Because he�s so jealous and he doesn�t know how to handle his jealousy and he doesn�t know what to do with it. He doesn�t know how to express it. Yet another wonderful facet for the ever innocent Sasuke.

Brilliant thus far darling. Absolutely, stunningly brilliant. (I�ll review more tomorrow!)

*loves*
~hanyou-elf

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From hanyou on September 05, 2007

Another group of great chapters. (I just finished 17)

I liked the way you wrote their getting away from Orochimaru�s lair, and making progress towards accomplishing Sasuke�s goals. It�s not simple and easy. It�s a complicated task, something that requires them to be able to do what they have to do, to be smart and alert. On edge and always prepared. It�s a clever way to use how you moved Orochimaru around, it fascinates me, and I can�t help but wonder what�s going to happen next?

And I love how possessive and demanding of Sasuke Naruto really is. He�s laid claim to his friend, and Sasuke just doesn�t understand the depth of that claim just yet. I like the way this is progressing, and I like the simple innocence in Sasuke. It is a refreshing change to see a Sasuke who�s more unsure about what�s going to happen rather than a walking sexual handbook that he�s usually portrayed as. I like that he doesn�t know what to do, that he�s not perfect, that he falls short in this aspect and that it�s going to be Naruto that teaches him much more refined techniques. It�s a realistic aspect for the characters. And it�s a very well received technique.

I like the fights, they are interesting, fast paced and engaging. They excite and attract, they are enjoyable to read, the adrenaline the characters feel is obvious in the story. Its fun and I really like that aspect of the story. I am engaged in the fights, I can see them happening in my mind, I know what�s going on, and that makes me happy, simply because few authors can write an action scene as well as you do.

And then chapter seventeen. I loved that Naruto was so certain, so assured of himself, the way he carried himself, the way he hit on Sasuke, brought it up. It shows that he�s confident and that he wants nothing more than to spend time with Sasuke. It is a realistic display of affection, of attraction between the characters. I love the way you wrote Naruto in this, the way touching and just being gentle with Sasuke, much more than actually having sex, was so meaningful. It was a sweet display of Naruto�s dedication to his friends and his partners, it was a meaningful portrayal of Naruto�s attraction to Sasuke. It was simple and beautiful, and I really liked reading that.

But more than that, the actual smutting, that was delicious. I love that Sasuke depended on Naruto to bring him that satisfaction he needed. I love his uncertainty, how he�s unsure what to do to make Naruto feel good. It shows that he�s scared, but at the same time, with the kiss he gave Naruto, that he�s more than just a little willing to learn what the blond dobe has to teach him. It was nice to see that, to know that Naruto was so influential on Sasuke that he�s willing to risk building bonds because of Naruto. Very good.

I have more chapters to read� so until next time�

*loves*
~hanyou-elf

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From hanyou on September 05, 2007
So I�m on chapter 10, and I have to say this is an incredible start. There aren�t a lot of authors out there who would be able to pull together something so incredible as this story, and you�ve done it magnificently. You should be seriously proud of the work you�ve done on this story, because it�s an amazing story, thus far, and I�m completely engrossed in enjoying it.

I want to talk about your Naruto though. It�s incredible the way you wrote him. I feel so much for him, his attitude, his dedication to things, his determination. You�ve managed to capture him from the manga and the anime almost perfectly, and I love the additional growth you�ve given him. He�s matured into a powerful shinobi, although he still manages to maintain that bit of innocence that makes him Naruto. It�s a difficult balance and you�ve done an amazing job balancing it. I love the way you�ve aged him in these chapters, the progression of his character, of his strength, letting us watch him grow with Orochimaru and Kabuto guiding him. I really liked, by the way, the added notes of his malnutrition and deficiencies. Being so disliked by the village, it�s kind of obvious that he would be so, but so few people actually pick up and run with that idea, you did a really good job, creative and original.

I like that Naruto�s so focused on helping Sasuke, that he refuses to react to the news that he�s to be restricted to the village without being allowed to leave. I like that he�s determined to bring Sasuke home first, before that happens. Because in all honesty, Naruto would want to save his friend before he couldn�t do anything anymore. If he wasn�t allowed to, if he was confined to the village, he would probably take off, missing nin style. And that would just be completely heartbreaking to Tsunade and the rest of Naruto�s friends. I like the way you wrote him going after Sasuke; because you�ve done something in describing his level of power that�s really good. You make it easy for the reader to know just how far Naruto has come, to know just what Naruto has been through, and what he�s pushing himself through. And you didn�t skimp out on his level of emotions, the deep little power that he has that makes him so much stronger.

And then, countering Naruto is Sasuke. I love that you wrote Sasuke, so cold. Bastard-ish. It�s a really good way to describe him and you�ve done really well keeping him like that. The fact that he�s so confused about the reappearance of Naruto with Orochimaru�s mind, the fact that his dreams have become something disturbingly pleasing to him, and the way he deals with the new Naruto. I love the way you wrote him out. He�s cold, he�s arrogant, and aloof and still so very deeply affected by Naruto�s being there. He doesn�t want to admit that it bothers him, but he really has no choice, because he�s thrown off of his game all the time by Naruto, and that�s something else I really enjoyed in this, the way you managed to keep Naruto forcing Sasuke to be on his toes.

Sasuke�s character in this story interests me. He�s torn between renewing his bonds with Naruto and completely pushing him away, using him and letting him go. I like that he�s so confused about what to do, but at the same time, he�s not letting it stop him. And I really like that he�s taken on an almost uke-ish role in this story thus far, in regards to Naruto. And it could be because of the fact that Naruto is just so domineering and that Sasuke was poisoned that he didn�t want to� didn�t dare to challenge Naruto like that� but I still like it. Naruto should always dominate Sasuke, it�s the natural order of things�

And of course the Snaky Sannin himself. You did a really good job of getting his impatience, his demanding attitude, and his need to be in absolute control down. I liked that you made him so impatient as he was struggling to get used to being in control of Naruto and his demon inhabitant. The throwing of furniture made me happy because he strikes me as somebody would throw a huge fit when things didn�t go his way. He is really good, really well written and you�ve done a great job with him. I really like that. And then again he�s way demanding, which is just the pot calling the kettle black. Orochimaru demands respect. Orochimaru demands power. Orochimaru demands whatever he wants. And when he doesn�t get it, he throws a fit. You did a really good job of finding that balance and walking that line carefully.

And Kabuto, bastard that he is. I like how subservient he is to Orochimaru while managing to maintain his own independence. He�s still quite capable of doing what he wants, but every choice he makes, he prefers to defer to what he thinks Orochimaru would like. It�s another interesting characteristic that you�ve managed to exploit very well. I like the fact that although he�s beneath Orochimaru, you have the snake depending on him so heavily. Very nice. You keep it in character from the original series, and that�s a difficult task to do.

Thus far, this story is very intriguing. It�s fast paced and well written. The description is absolutely beautiful, the characters are engaging. The scenes are written with such attention to the details that it makes them realistic, visible. You�ve taken the characters and you�ve made them your own. You own these characters, and you make them play your game. The interactions you have them engaging in, the parts they are forced to play, it�s all very well thought out and absolutely beautiful. I love that this story is so involved, so well details and thought out that it�s almost as though the reader could step in and interact themselves, if they really wanted to.

Great job with this story darling. I absolutely love it!

*onto the next chapters!*

*loves*
~hanyou-elf

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From crazychemgeek on September 05, 2007
Once again I love you. God I had a dream last night about this story and it was awesome. I basically dreamed that it was the anime and when I woke up I was all sad :( (only that it wasn't). I wanna see Sasuke & Naruto in action (and I don't mean in bed, although I wouldn't object if Kishimoto decided to throw it in there). Hooray for updates and I give you skittles as a reward(I never understood the whole cookies thing, skittles are the greatest thing ever invented, aside from yaoi)
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From bluegenjutsu on September 04, 2007
Hiroki is just so cute!!! I love how he understands things! The part with him playing with Naruto's tails and then Naruto swatting him with one of them was very funny. I loved the part where Sasuke let Sakura know that she had no chance with him and that he had really chosen Naruto. I also love how Sasuke couldn't say no to Hiroki after Naruto told the kid to cry. :D
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From ANON - fangirl on September 04, 2007
I never want it to end. All plot, no smut, and still so good. And now the long wait till next Tuesday starts. Thanks for being so good about updating though, it's really awesome of you. I wonder what Sakura said to get Sasuke to leave her so abruptly. And I wonder if Naruto was aware of their conversation at all. I can't wait till they face the council.
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From ChaoticSpecter on September 04, 2007
I really LOVE your story. I enjoy everything about it: characterization, character development, PLOT, action....just everything. It's very well written and a very easy read. I adore you for writing this. I eagerly await your next chapter. See you next time.
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From ANON - DevilLived on September 04, 2007
Aww, I can't get over how cute Hiroki is- especially when he gets all cuddly with Sasuke. (squees)

This was a great chapter, I loved reading it. Sakura and Sasuke's conversation was really well done- they were very in character and Sasuke's responses were short yet definitely left no doubts behind what he wanted.

Aw, someone really needs to draw a picture of Sasuke with Hiroki on his lap. XD

Wonderful work. Keep it up!
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From roro237 on September 04, 2007
Zrina this was a soft and warm chapter to me. So nice with Hiroki loving Chichi and Nii-san. I was alittle worrie when Sakura call Sasuke to set with her,but he maded Hiroki and I feel better:)
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From ANON - kms on September 04, 2007
Great chapter! I love this story! I was so looking forward to Tuesday so I could read this story, but every time I do I always read through the chapter really fast, and I can't wait for the next one again....a vicious cycle...What will I do when its over?! I can;t wait 'til they face teh coucil, its sure to be exciting!
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From llyoung on September 04, 2007
I thought this chapter (70) was really sweet. I like the Sasuke and Hiroke interaction.
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