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By : Zrina
  • From ANON - Anon on December 25, 2007
    hey, what do you mean by "the tube was empty"? It's for the sequel, a politico-drama romance?
    This fics and your writting is great, please, keep updating the other fics (like Anbu training"
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 21, 2007
    Chapter 20: Nothing wrong with being a smutaholic. ^^
    Man, I hope you fail, Kyoshiro. Or fail to cause too much trouble.
    Okay, that announcement made an interesting point. Sasuke is now a missing-nin for two countries. You’re pushing it, kid. Great fight scene, by the way.
    Alright, we’re back with Tsunade! I was wondering when she and the other Leafs would turn up again. I like the who-needs-what paragraph and then sneaking Shizune. Good touches.
    “What was going to happen would happen in its own time and wishing otherwise would not change it. However annoying it was to wait.” That is so Sai! ^^ Okay, that was mean--I would’ve thought Naruto was very well-endowed!
    I like Tsunade’s assignment to Team 8 and Sai and the way it was worded. But I have a little Editing Tip for some of it: “[. . .] Send me reports any time you move to a new location or find something, verified by the way not rumored, that has happened concerning any of those four.” It’s just some punctuation marks, but I think (you don’t have to take my word for it, it’s just my opinion) that it might work a little nicer if: “Send me reports any time you move to a new location or find something--verified, by the way, not rumored--that has happened concerning any of those four.” And maybe italicizing “verified.” Just a suggestion. ^^'
    I also like the whole paragraph starting with “Sai gave her one of his trademark empty smiles.” ^_^
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 21, 2007
    Chapter 19: Crap, they can’t relax yet, can they? I like the ending line of that first segment.
    (!!) Naruto look out, don’t eat that yet!--Shit.
    Heh, knew that was coming once the scroll worked.--Oh, clever! “The same void that sucked socks into it from the dryer.” XDD Oh man, and the paragraph only gets funnier from there! XDDD
    I like Sasuke’s thoughts, too. X)
    Oh man, another gross moment. I hope they don’t get much worse than this. Normally I don’t like these, but I swear, you have a gift to make almost anything good to read.
    Jeez, another hilarious ending. XD Wow, that chapter was short. o__o
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 21, 2007
    Chapter 18: Rape? Who is involved? That can’t be good. . . .
    (*shiver*) All this talk about his sensei is making me nervous.
    I like the fox’s new look. I’d like to see that drawn sometime.
    Orochimaru: It’s called “karma,” dude. I might be right in thinking that you’ve got a lot of bad karma coming your way.
    . . . Well, I’m glad he’s enjoying it a little--I'm not a total sadist. Oh, just a note: This is the first time I ever read a sex-scene in which one of the players is not Naruto, Sasuke, Sakura or the Kyuubi. Normally, I can’t stand the visualization of anyone else (though I have put ideas away to future references).
    I was going to ask how does Naruto feel to know there’s rape in his mind, but never mind. I like the idea of the effect but not the knowledge.
    WHOA, awesome last thought of the chapter! I never thought of that! I swear, YOU ARE DAMN GOOD AT THIS!!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 21, 2007
    Chapter 17: Ooh boy, smut! Goody! (*rubs hands gleefully*) :D
    HA HA HA!! “Those are my boxers!” XDDDDD And I love the whole dialogue following that. ^^ Mm, great line: “Perhaps Sasuke didn’t realize the power of just touching someone.” Very wise. And good paragraph.
    Great visualization for the initial massage.
    NOTE: “Those wonderful hands [. . .] and drug themselves back down” . . . I don’t think there’s a past tense for “drag” written like “drug.” I think it’s just “dragged.”
    I like how it’s just play . . . STOP. Pause. Continue play . . . STOP. Pause. Continue play . .--Oh, wait. Never mind, I spoke too soon. ^^ I love what Naruto said: “Oh, so I can . . .” Sasuke: “WHAT!?” XDDDDDD Great sudden change.
    I like the symbolism/reality in “But with the addition of that word, he had . . .” Yeah. (I’m trying to actually avoid writing anything, uhm (*cough*cough*) in the reviews; I’m leaving it for the story.)
    Oh boy, and there comes the final ground rule, the big one I was wondering about since yesterday (for you forewarned us that smut was to come).
    Yessss, the pet name.
    “He had to admit to himself, quietly since he treasured his life, that the sight of . . .” Pleases me too, Naruto! XD (Sorry, (*cough*cough*).)
    Lol, “Icha, Icha.” “Come again?” “No. Come, Come.” XD And I like the last couple paragraphs of that segment before the break.
    Awww, Naruto has to sleep on the floor? Man, that’s no fair. :(
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 21, 2007
    Grrr, this won’t let me review chapter 15! >:( Oh, well. You can see it on your LiveJournal.

    Chapter 16: Hilarious first paragraph. XDD Huh, I can’t tell if my prediction came true or not; I guess it did partway, but he didn’t bitch as much as I thought he would. . . . I like the paragraph describing Sasuke’s uneasiness about being lighthearted. HA HA!! “I’ve seen that look on Kakashi’s face before.” XDDDDDD
    “Sleek dancer-like muscles” . . . (*thumbs up*) Wow, I love that whole checking-him-out scene. And then the “drooling toothpaste” . . . veeeeery clever. We know what Naruto was imagining, and Sasuke turns and sees that . . . and that probably triggers his imagination! Nice.
    Hee hee, “dobe box.” ^^
    “Besides insulting me, is there a point to this?” I like that line. That’s a great way to say “Get to the point.” . . . “Bind him closer to Sasuke . . .” Interesting. So, Sasuke, you’ve switched from breaking the bond to tightening the bond. Well, you’re probably right on this. But do you know just how right you are? >:D
    Wuh-oh! Naruto, you’re so hilarious. You know that could ruin a mood for this sort of thing? Or give your partner second thoughts?
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 20, 2007
    Chapter 14: Sometimes I think the slower stories are the ones more worth reading. I’m glad it’s not rushed.
    Oooh, listen to the clone, Sasuke, he means it. ^^ I like the effects of the poison on Sasuke. I can picture it very clearly.
    Sasuke’s under arrest? Wow. Didn’t see that coming. That scene was just two paragraphs--good.
    I love the italicized memories.
    Oh, crap, he’s in another country. They could try to find the secret of the Sharingan!
    GrrrRRRRR, that makes me mad, that bitch! >:( Please, Naruto, hurry up!!!
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 20, 2007
    Chapter 13: You bet I’m enjoying myself! . . . Oooh, first line and already it’s good. . . . I’m glad Naruto likes Orochimaru’s bed, but wouldn’t he feel weird about sleeping in it? I mean, he has been since Orochimaru possessed him, but not of his own free will exactly.
    Alright, the banter again. ^^
    Oh, yes, YES, Stage Two!! :D Awesome scene, I always love descriptions of the second stage.
    I like that yelled argument between Naruto and Sasuke while they were freeing the prisoners. I like the clash of their beliefs.
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 20, 2007
    Chapter 12: Oh, okay. That answers my previous question. . . . Boy, that must be unnerving to Sasuke; eesh. (*shivers*) . . . Man, I love their bantering! ^^
    Good part when Sasuke’s buttons were pushed for a moment there at the word “cared.”
    Oh, good, Sasuke saved the frog wallet. Thank you, Sasuke, I owe you one for that! (I’ve got a special soft spot for the frog wallet, eheheheh. ^^’) . . . Wait a minute. Did Naruto yellow his eyes again when the girl came in? And was that girl Karin?
    Avoid Oushi, eh? Somehow I don’t think it’s gonna be that easy. . . . Aw, Sasuke’s keeping Naruto’s jacket!
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 20, 2007
    Chapter 11: You feel like an author, because you are an author! ^^
    I love Jiraiya’s code to Tsunade. . . . Nice scene with Anko.
    Hee hee, Sasuke stuttered on his insult. X) I can sympathize with him, though. I don’t know how some people can just stay warm on freezing nights.
    Yeesh, one hell of a nightmare. Good one, though.
    Aw, cuddle scene was cute. And the ending to the whole thing was hilarious again! XD
    “Take care of business.” . . . “He had to piss.” . . . Ah, such is the difference between Sasuke and Naruto. ;) . . . Oh man, I spoke too soon; that was gross but funny--“Mark his territory” and “Yellow spiral.” . . . Oh for God’s sake, not you too, Sasuke! . . . Ah well, I guess boys will be boys (sorry, boys, if there are any reading this). Anyways, this scene is another trait of that favorite novelist of mine that I mentioned earlier. Hee hee, cold snow in the crotch! XD AHAHAHAHAHA “That was cool! Where’d you learn that?” XDDDDD
    Jeezus, this has hilarious lines! XDDDDDDDDDDDDD
    Oh God, what the hell just happened?! How’d Orochimaru get back?!?
    This might be one of my favorite chapters.
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 19, 2007
    Chapter 10: Hee hee, cute. “M’lest me later, m’tired.” XD
    “Kyuubi has a chew toy.” XDDDDDDDDDDDDD lol, that’s hilarious. XDDDDD
    “You try it sometime, teme.” That’s another good one. . . . The end of that scene was good, too.
    Man, this chapter’s got a lot of good lines in it. “I have a lot on my mind.” / “Let me simplify it: there isn’t any ramen here.” And once again, another good ending to that segment.
    Oooh, Naruto’s going to impersonate Orochimaru? This I gotta see. :D
    I loved seeing Sasuke fix Naruto’s hair. So cute. ^^ Oooh, blush. ^^
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 19, 2007
    Chapter 9: “Greetings and salivations?” XD Hell, I think Naruto always looks hot after the timeskip! And it’s totally worth it to proofread so much, I’m not complaining. ^^
    Okay, now I’m mad!! Grrr, that genjutsu was horrible! And DAMN that traitorous Kyuubi!!! >:(
    Oh, please, please, please let Naruto and Sasuke win! >_
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 19, 2007
    Chapter 8: This is your first fanfiction?? . . . You ARE a real writer, I’m sure of it!
    Wow, six months have gone by! Naruto’s hair is longer? Makes sense, but it’s hard to picture. I wonder how much longer. . . . Couldn’t’ve said it better myself, Jiraiya--Naruto is hard to keep down. ^_^ Ooooh, gotcha there, Orochimaru! “Pitiful skills . . .” XD
    And despite all Orochimaru’s efforts, he’s losing more and more control of Naruto. . . . I wonder why he never came close to Kabuto in his fit. . . . Hah! That’s good. Sasuke’s all “. . . whaaaaaa~~~” XD (Then again, after seeing Naruto like that, so am I. ^^’) Hee, “dobe-sexual”. ^^
    You know, I’d love to see a picture of mental-Orochimaru trying to wrestle mental-Naruto back behind the mental wall. ^^
    Alright, we got a deal between Uzumaki and Uchiha. Cool. This should be good.
    Yeek! One hell of a cliffhanger! O.O
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 19, 2007
    Chapter 7: Whoa, hot dream turned suddenly scary! O_O HAHAHA, Orochimaru’s fantasizing about Tsunade! XDDD
    I like how Naruto’s “leaking” into Orochimaru. Whoa, wait, what just happened? Did Naruto take over when Sasuke stunned Orochimaru?
    Oooh, naughty thoughts in the very back of his mind, eh? Heheheh.
    XD “I’m not even going to mention what he has me dreaming about.” XD
    I like Sasuke’s feelings on “no one’s allowed to kill Naruto but me”. Kind of a similar thing he has to his brother maybe?
    I wonder what the deal is? Nice ending to the chapter.

    (By the way, I review as I read. ^^)
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 19, 2007
    Chapter 6: I like Sasuke’s turmoil. Kabuto’s first line was phrased funny (in a good way). And I liked his analysis. And Sasuke--it's all about him, isn’t it? XD I love that.
    Um, okay! That scene where Orochimaru was checking himself out in the mirror and Kabuto was trying not to smile seemed somewhat OOC (Out Of Character and Out Of Context), but it sure was funny. . . . Jeez, Orochimaru brought out the Kyuubi to attack Konoha all those years ago? Eesh. And they say Naruto has a one-track mind! And Sasuke! (Ihn, Icha-Icha. XD) Sasuke, save Naruto’s stuff, especially the wallet!
    I like Orochimaru’s aggravation with Naruto’s body.
    Hee--Sasuke’s attracted to Naruto and he doesn’t even know it.
    !!! What was that??
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