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Reviews for Won't Let You Go

By : Reyn

From ANON - Jiro on February 20, 2007
I love drunk Naruto. This is an awesome story. Superbly written, good character development, and a vice like focus on Naruto and Sasuke. I read the flame and my first thought was: "What's up with YOU? YOU suck butt." I have a very intellectually stunted five-year-old sense of humor/fighting. Regardless, whoever sent that obviously didn't read your story. Or is too stupid to leave any meaningful kind of comment. Screw them.
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From ANON - Deidara on February 20, 2007
Wow, I'm really liking this story, it flows so easily within your writing.

Its odd, but I can *see* this happening, and its funny as hell, with Naruto being drunk and all xD

I really hope you update soon, I can't wait to read more!

Even though I hate SasuSaku with a passion, I understand what you did with her here.
Plus it doesn't seem as though Sasuke likes her too much anyways~

Wow, the part I just had to burst out laughing was when Naruto was flexing, and then wanting to take off his pants xDD

At first when I read the beginning chapter, I was reconsidering reading this... at first it seem rushed and squished to me somehow.
But I'm glad I read the second chapter because it was alot better and it explained about the rushed things in the first.

Like I said before, PLEASE update soon!

^^
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From ANON - Saiou-chan on February 20, 2007
Hey, when is the actio between those two going to start up? Is Sasuke going to make the moves or is Naruto?
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From celticfx on February 20, 2007
Great start! I've really enjoyed your story so far and can't wait to read more. You've taken an interesting approach to Sasuke and Naruto's relationship and I really want to see how it develops. At this point I'm guessing there's more to his quitting than Naruto is letting on? How will Sakura react when she finds out about Naruto's lie? I can't wait to see! (:
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From ANON - Trish on February 19, 2007
I love it! I've been waiting forever for this update!
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From ANON - LaiN on February 18, 2007
Well, personally I don't think this sucks; it could use a little bit of structure here and there for the arguments 'cuz they're too vague, bu they, it's 2nd chappie =D just an introduction. So give it your best and continue ^^ Btw I love the ways Sasuke reacts...
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From ANON - Sakiya Mystery on February 18, 2007
I like this story! I was wondering where you have been! I have only one request, please make Naruto the uke, pleeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaasssssseeeeeeee!
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From ANON - Yuri-san on February 18, 2007
I. Love. It.
Like, wide-eyed chibi sparkles love it. ***O3O***
XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD Seriously. If your writing style was a person, I would be down on one knee asking for their hand in marriage.
I would say "let me bear your children" but I've already pledged that service to about ...5 other authors. ^_^;;;;;; heh... ---Thank god they were all women, or I would have to flee the country. O_o Oh, wait... Surogate Mother. Well f*ck...
Just... Geh. Awsomeness! *bows down to you* The way you're writing this makes me want to see SasuNaru things to happen SO BAD!! XD (And that's a good thing, because anticipation is my crack.)
p.s. KibaHinata = *hearts everywhere*

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From BishounenKrazed on February 18, 2007
aw, what was wrong with it? i personally found it charming and humorous. your drunk naruto is a laugh riot. bowing to a post... i'm certainly glad sasuke holds no illusions of marrying sakura. that just wouldn't be right. and i was wondering... you wrote that both sensei are coming to visit. is that because they both had a hand in naruto's life, or are they, ya know, together?

great second chapter! i look forward to the next!!
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From ANON - Allys on February 18, 2007
Lol, you're funny ;D. Anyway I like the chapter, mostly because of your writing style. It's very engaging, makes you wanna keep reading even the characters aren't doing much. I also like that they're grown ups, that's rare but a welcome change. You did well with a drunken Naruto, he's definitely drunk not high. High is more spacy, like 'yeah man that's soo cool', think Shaggy from Scooby Doo. Where as drunk is more dopey like the elevator and steps scenarios *smirks* which I totally enjoyed. If you're looking for a dopey high, check the people on X, they're all 'I love you', 'That feels nice' touchy and gropey and happy. Not that I'm a drunk or a stoner, I just know a lot of them, they amuse me :). Anyway, well done, write on XD.
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From ANON - lo on February 18, 2007
This is a wonderfully written story. I can tell that you put a lot of effort in this. I can't wait to see what happens next.
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From on February 18, 2007
I think it is a splendid second chapter, though I'm still not quite following why Naruto feels so much pressure to look good to Iruka and Kakashi. I think that needs a little more development. I love the scene where they first arrive at Kitsune Towers. The car door opening dragging Naruto out and then Naruto crashing into the glass door was brilliant. I like the backstory that's coming through so far, but I want more! Currently, I'm getting the impression that neither party (Sasuke nor Naruto) really have admitted to having any sort of feelings for each other. Sasuke is starting to become foggily aware of an at least physical attraction, and Naruto wishes to know that Sasuke doesn't hate him, but beyond that, we don't have much yet.

You had a really good hook in the first chapter with Sasuke's "hurricane level 7" temper, and that was enough to keep me reading. The part where you tell us that Naruto was calling during Sakura's date, (with all the "on one's birthday dinner" and "said boyfriend") was incredibly confusing and I had to reread it three times before I got it--I actually gave up on the paragraph the second time and didn't get it until later in the chapter when Sasuke, wondering about why Naruto resigned so suddenly, remembers the unanswered phonecalls from Naruto the night before. After that line, I was able to figure the paragraph out. It could just be me but you might one to take another look at it.

I huggle your charaterization of Kiba so far. The bar scene and everything following was just a lot of fun to read. I would agree that the elevator scene seemed more high than drunk though, but the stripping to prove his manliness was spot on (plus it didn't feel like you were just throwing it in there to start the gears turning on the Boy Love XD); I could see Naruto doing that.

I was wondering if Shikamaru really is smoking something because when Sasuke mentions it (and the possibility of him sharing it with Tsunade), the way Sasuke thought about it made me think it was one of those "rumors" that everyone knows is true but nobody ever talks about, like--well, like if you've ever had a friend that smoked something illegal.

I was interested by Naruto being borderline homophobic, and when it came up, coupled with the fact that he was feeling some sort of pressure from Kakashi and Iruka, this is what went through my head: Kakashi and Iruka. Hmm. Popular side pairing. Gasp! Maybe they are a couple and they are both of the opinion that Naruto likes guys...an idea that perhaps springs from long phone calls filled with rants about Sasuke! After so many "Sasuke this's" and "Sasuke that's", perhaps Kakashi said something crude like "just jump him already." Completely shocked (and in full denial of any possibility of romantic feeling towards "that *teme*", Naruto proceeds to concoct a lie about having a girlfriend and in fact he's thinking of proposing! Pressed for details, he *steals* Sakura, and in later phone calls, pressed for updates, he informs his senseis that he has proposed!

...well, some of that didn't go through my head until I read the entirety of Naruto's reasons for quitting as presented in his inebriated state to Sasuke. But yeah. That's why I thought more or less. Maybe that's just really weird though. >_O

I really like this story, and I appreciate the way your developing things. I don't mind that the boys haven't jumped head first into lust or something, and that attraction is developing slowly. That doesn't mean I want it to stay slow--I fully expect a series of events that will throw the relationship into motion, but this pace is nice, and your writing is nice, so I'm going to trust you to know when to go slow and when to heat things up! XD

I hope to see another chapter sometime soon.

Sincerely

mydarkerside
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From ktaztrofee on February 18, 2007
hey
Wow...I'm pretty impressed with this story. It's down right freakin' hilarious!! ^O^!! The witty comments leave me falling off my chair lol. I'm very interested in seeing where this is going especially seeing as how Naruto was obviously not thinking too clearly with his supposed "elaborate lie" lmao. I truly am enjoying this story. Can't wait to see what's to come!!
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From pasc55 on February 18, 2007
okay lol this story is so good!! udapted fast pleasE
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From kaururyu on February 18, 2007
this is why i started reading AU fics. :D love how this is going. i dunno how the two would develop into an item but i'm willing to read through the development. :D keep it up!
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