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Reviews for Tangled up in Lace

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From ANON - Uchiha-Weasel on October 13, 2006
I really enjoyed this story. I think you did a great job using Asuka's Saki.
I like your writing style and attention to detail. I think this story was well written, at least compared to some of the stuff I've been known to put down. bah.
I think the addition of the Epilogue was brilliant. It made the story feel a lot more complete.
I thoroughly enjoyed Tangled up in Lace.
There is one particular scene that is vivid in my mind. In chapter/part five when Sasuke is sitting on the bathroom floor disheveled, in Saki�s clothing and jewelry all over the floor. I think it would be an interesting picture, beautiful, and I want- intend on drawing it though I can�t say it will come out as beautiful as I imagine it too.
Anyway, I thought it was a wonderful story and the ending Epilogue was a nice add.

~Uchiha-Weasel

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From ANON - sharingan.swirl on October 13, 2006
I WANNA CRY!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Dear lord you're good. i love how you can just call up emotions in your readers... True i wanna cry cuz it's the end of the story, but i really wanna cry cuz of Jiraiya's monologue (if that's the right way to describe it). You really did end this piece perfectly. I'm afraid to write anything now! :P lol I'm very much looking forward to other works!

Take care!
sharingan.swirl
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From ANON - eowyncat on October 13, 2006
okay...wow. so i almost cried. the only reason i didn't was because i held back. fanfictions rarely ever have this effect on me. you write so beautifully - i look forward to more from you in the future. and i should let you know that i don't think i've ever reviewed a fanfiction twice, either. so, *hugs* thanks so much!
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From ANON - zetsuai2005 on October 13, 2006
I have been fascinated by the Saki arc since I discovered Asuka's first one. The concept was a stroke of genius. I've read all of them, even the ones written by other authors. Yours took Saki a league beyond what has been written so far. At several points you had me fearful that Sasuke and Naruto were not going to make it together, but the way you worked out the passage of Saki was brilliant, and a much healthier union resulted. I feel you've written the definitive Saki saga. Though I surely don't want to see the end of all Saki stories, I can't imagine what could be left to say beyond what you have written. Bravo!!
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From ANON - Hellagoddess on October 13, 2006
Brilliant. Just brilliant. With all my heart i wish i could write like this...
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From ANON - Shosuro on October 12, 2006
That has got to be the best ending I have ever read on Adult Fanfiction!!!
I think you should all kinds of win any award that is out there!!!
That was beautifully done.
I will keep an eye out for your next project!!!
Thanks for the wonderful story!!!
**hugs and kisses***

~Shosuro~
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From ANON - KinOfDragons on October 12, 2006
I'm so inspired now. Thanks for writing this amazing story, it really made me think about the future. I might not accomplish what I dream of doing now (there's a lot of things =p) but there's nothing wrong with changing your goals. Beautiful. It's the most vivid lesson I've gotten out of any fanfiction I've ever read. So, congratulations on a story well-done. Well, more than well but you catch my drift.
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From on October 12, 2006
basically

I finally signed onto my account to comment you.

you're a simply fabulous writer, I can't wait to read more of your stories, fics, writings, antics, rantings and of course, smut o.o

I Love you

I love this story

I love how you played the characters. You're wonderful.
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From ANON - ursan-canine on October 12, 2006
very very very very nice. epilogue sums it all up through jiraiya's eyes. loved it.
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From ANON - emdog on October 12, 2006
Great ending. I like that you told it from an outside perspective. It gave the story closure without having to rehash any issues between Naruto and Sasuke. Not that those moments didn't have their place, but as the reader, it's easier to identify with Jiraiya who is outside of the situation. It's also comforting to know that someone else looks at Naruto and Sasuke the way we do and appreciates their story just as much.

Overall, the story was very well written and kept a good pace throughout. I think you kept the characters true to themselves. One of my favorite parts is when Naruto realizes that Sasuke had wanted to be executed. Other authors may have gotten impatient and poured that part into one paragraph and had Naruto give some big speech about how he feels, blah blah blah. But you had the patience to really work through his thought process and still leave some for the reader to figure out. It's fun to psychoanalize Sasuke and figure him out and we were able to do that along with Naruto without having the "answers" just given to us.

Another of my favorite parts is the during Sasuke's trial when he and Naruto find out that the reason he gets to live is because Naruto would lose himself to the Kyuubi if he were executed. I think that put them in an interesting situation. Naruto was relieved and hurt at the same time that Tsunade would think that he would go against the village, but for him to be happy that Sasuke's alive means that he has to accept that he would have indeed lost control. Sasuke on the other hand is angry that he's alive, and insulted that the decision was based on Naruto and had nothing to do with himself.

So, in conclusion, I enjoyed the story very much. I encourage you to continue writing and I look forward to reading more of your work.

Thank you,
Emdog
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From ANON - Redcloudangel on October 12, 2006
The chasing has come to an end. (Chap. 8) I�m glad that they are finally together. I take that Sasuke remained to be Saki because he thought Naruto loved and wanted Saki. It was interesting to see that Naruto was willing to accept Saki if Sasuke wanted to be Saki. I�m really happy Sasuke finally came to terms with himself and be himself again. It warms my heart. No promises, just enjoy the today, this moment. Nice. Really nice!

Congladuation for Tangle�s nomination for TONFA. (I don�t actually know what it is) I'm excited for you. You deserve The chasing has come to an end. (Chap. 8) I�m glad that they are finally together. I take that Sasuke remained to be Saki because he thought Naruto loved and wanted Saki. It was interesting to see that Naruto was willing to accept Saki if Sasuke wanted to be Saki. I�m really happy Sasuke finally came to terms with himself and be himself again. It warms my heart. No promises, just enjoy the today, this moment. Nice. Really nice!

Congladuation for Tangle�s nomination for TONFA (I don�t actually know what it is)! I'm excited for you. You deserve the recognition and acknowledgment.

- VTY, Redcloudangel
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- VTY, Redcloudangel

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From ANON - Adrienne on October 12, 2006
Wow.

I wish I could say more. It is really very hard to explain how beautiful, well thought out, and emotional this story was. Probably one of the best in the entire fandom. Wonderful job. I'm sorry to see it finished. Please continue writing fics as I'll be awfully depressed not to seee your sn on the list of updated fiction here!
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From ANON - Kiara on October 12, 2006
Wonderful fic! I loved it totally! I think the ending was brilliant and heart warming in the way Jiraiya narrated it. It went with his personality. Most of all the ending was natural and smooth without being sweet enough to decay your teeth and still have a happy ending. I hope you'll continue to write such great stories because even though I loved the story I am kind of sad it ended. I really looked forward to the next update! So I will certainly be waiting to read more of Naruto fics by you! Thanks for writing it and sharing! Bye!
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From promise2003 on October 12, 2006
Absolutely adored the epilogue. It was so well written and left the story on such a high note. My favorite thing about it was how you put it in Jiraiya's point of view...very nice. I cannot wait for your next project, and thank you so very much for sharing this with us. I think that those of us that found our way wondering how you were going to weave your way out of the twister of a plot you started with have been very pleasantly surprised. Kudos to you, and well wishes. :)
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From ANON - Spawn of Hell on October 12, 2006
ADORED IT.
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