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Reviews for Hinata Comes of Age

By : Hestia
  • From promise2003 on October 02, 2006
    don't wimp out...cause just Naruto would be boring. Adorably cute, but boring. The reason your fic has apeal is because you take that chance to allow Hinata to be with more than one man. I'm mad about Kakashi though...maybe because I like him too much. I would slow a bit on the sex/action scenes, they seem to rush by really quickly and I get confused to what's happening. Just make sure we as your audience know what's happening. I only say this because I love your fic and want it to be a good as humanly possible. Really, I do think its excellent and I will definitely read the next chapter when you post (I'm actually really excited for it). Oh, and find a way to have Gaara in there please? You could have her be dispatched to a mission on sand.
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  • From ANON - QJD on October 02, 2006
    I love this story but i have one request.

    PLZ FOR THE LOVE OF GOD, KEEP ROCK LEE ON THE FRIGGIN LIST1
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  • From ANON - Vl on October 02, 2006
    Sadly, I figured that. I just kind of expected her to be a little more honorable, and not want to be with someone who just seems to travel from one girl to the next, not in the relationships for the true feelings, and just for the action.
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  • From ANON - Josh on October 02, 2006
    Hey I like the story.. I wouldlike to seeHinata just staywith Naruto and forget Kiba cuz she trulywants and needsis one.. Naruto is her truelove andthat was interesting about Hinata being quite endowed on the top but usually a good c-cup would do... But double D's is more than ahandful.. I hope to seeyour story progressandlet Naruto be with Hinata andthat will be that unless she cheats on him...
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  • From LdyMoon on October 01, 2006
    I can't wait to read chapter two. I love Hinta and Naruto as a pair. Down with Sakura let her have Saske. (I mean I like them too, but I just don't like her with Naruto.) Anyway, if she's going to have to marry Neji (which I hope that she doesn't, because Naruto's dreams are going to be realized and than she can marry him) I hope that she can at least taste Naruto's flesh at least a couple of dozen times. (I know I'm greedy like that.) And I've always pictured Kiba being a bit nasty in a deliciously good way. Looking forward to reading chapter two.
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  • From ANON - mel on September 30, 2006
    I really like what you have written so far. You really seem to have captured Hinata's character to a T. I can't wait til the next chapter. Good job.
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  • From ANON - VL again on September 30, 2006
    Something I forgot, but it would be VERY funny to see, and has to do with my hatred of the dreaded Kiba/Hina pairing (why people like this I will never know).

    Since you seem to have Kiba sleeping around with all sorts of girls, and Shizune would be able to pull up any medical files, what would happen if Kiba was shown to have a history of STDs..

    But yeah yeah, it seems like I might be the minority here. Heres hoping this will be one of the few naru/hina stories on this site.
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  • From ANON - kyubi_teaser on September 30, 2006
    Ok...so you took Neji out...but you left Gai on? What about Gaara!!! Gaara needs more love people! Give our Smexykage a chance!
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  • From promise2003 on September 30, 2006
    I really like this fic from you. It is definitely one of your best and its only one chapter so far. I can't wait for the update. But did you have to leave it hanging, without letting us know who made the final cut. You and your affinity for cliffhangers, argh. I just hope that your chapters come out as fast for this fic as they have for your others. :) I love Hinata, and how you portray her in the story. I'm dying to know if she gets Naruto or starts with Kiba (he better stay on the list...darn it).
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  • From ANON - VL on September 30, 2006
    I like the start to the story, but I am a little worried...

    I have nothing against Kiba, but I just can't see hinata ever going beyond friendship with him. Add to the fact that Kiba makes me think of a bang and go type of person, just looking for a good lay, I always tend to avoid any Kiba Hinata pairings. Sadly there are too many of those here... I would prefer seeing Hinata with someone like Shino or Lee before I saw her with Kiba, that is just how much is disgusts me, since they seem more her type or person.

    I would actually like to see this go Naru/Hina, as there are a shortage of here on this site, and few if any completed ones. Hope you didn't mind the mild rant, but This place has way too many Yaoi, naru/sasu, or some other crazy pairing to make me venture too deep into the archives.
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  • From ANON - Saico on September 30, 2006
    I like this beginning. I hope in the end Hinata doesn't end forced to marry by her clan.

    If you took off Neji because it was gross, couldn't you take off Gai too? It's even more gross! Couldn't you replace him by the cool Genma?
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  • From ANON - solar phoenix on September 30, 2006
    A fascinating concept, but can you pull it off?
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  • From FoxyBlue on September 30, 2006
    Whoa...it looks like Hinata's got her work cut out for her seducing wise. It is rather OOC but I actaully like this kind of OOC-ness since Hianta needs more lemon lovin! Great start and please update soon kay? ^ ^
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  • From ANON - kyubi_teaser on September 30, 2006
    I love Hinata fics! There should be more out there!

    And with that said...

    Please hurry with the next chapter! Such a good start (though I think 30 names is pushing it for Hina, that's quite ambitious if you ask me), will be awaiting your updates

    ~Teaser
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  • From ANON - Angst on September 29, 2006
    Hmm, this looks interesting.Just one thing, warn me when the Neji/Hina chapter comes up, if it does. The pairing kind of squicks me. So if you could just put in a little warning in the chapter, I can avoid it and read all the other well written smut. Keke, you're an excellent sensual writer, you really know how to write erotica in a language that is realistic but not to crass or cliched. That's why I like The Traveling Pussy, and that's why I'm certain I will like this as well.
    Oh, oh, is this the one that will include the Hina/Sai?
    Just curious, you mentioned it one in TP and I've been very eager ever since to see one (it's jsut a very rare pairing).
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