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Reviews for This can't be happening!

By : nekochannya
  • From ANON - Neko-Chan on September 18, 2006
    Wow, nice start!
    Cant wait for more!!!
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  • From ANON - Bookworm51485 on September 18, 2006
    The first thing that immediately comes to mind, the format. I had trouble telling if the story was truly good because I had such trouble reading it all blocked together. So that's my immediate suggestiong, space out the lines to make it easier to read. Moving on to the story, from what I did get it does seem well-written. No obvious spelling or grammar problems, which puts you leagues above many other fanfic writers. I definitely like the mpreg, though from your A/N at the end, I'm a bit worried that Sasuke might be the pregnant one. Anyways, I wish the story wasn't SasuNaru, but that's just part of a kick I'm on now. Of all the Naruto mpregs written, I can only think of maybe 2 that aren't SasuNaru and both of those are unfinished (one hasn't been updated in quite a long time and seems to be on permanent hiatus). But oh well, you already have the pairing decided for the story and it doesn't seem like it's one of those supremely irritating triangle stories where the author enjoys making either Neji, Gaara, or both look like idiots for chasing after Naruto when he's obviously meant to be with Sasuke. Anyways, I'm definitely interested in what you have so far and I can't wait until your next update, hopefully with a slightly easier to read format.
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  • From ANON - lo on September 17, 2006
    This is very good. That whole chase and survival scenes was great!! Very nice!!
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  • From ANON - Shosuro on September 17, 2006
    Hey that is not fair!!
    Why did you have to leave it in a cliff hanger?!?
    Damn cliff hangers!!!
    Can't wait to read the next one!!

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