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Reviews for Maid Of The Mist

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From riddlestar on October 05, 2008
one of the best fics ive read so far. i really REAlly enjoyed this. ^_^
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From riddlestar on October 05, 2008
"But really, he was such a stupid idiot� a stupidiot." - one word - brilliant!
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From Golden on March 28, 2007
If I might make a small suggestion, I would seriously consider continuing this story. You might be able to make something very interesting come out of it.

It was a good one-shot (that lasted 3 chapters) but it could turn into a good story as well. I dunno, maybe I'm wrong. But I really did like it, it was good smut, cute plot, good writing. Although now I have read all of your stories (but 1) so now I have stuff to look out for.

I'll check in every so often to look for updates, because you are becoming one of my favorite authors here on AFF.
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From ANON - Izzy on November 25, 2006
continue!!!! write about what naruto says!!!! ohhh man......this is soooooooo awesome!!!
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From ANON - eowyncat on October 02, 2006
when you mentioned earlier that you were going to make this a three shot and expand it, i was like hells yes! i was so waiting for the online convo. *stabs self repeatedly* anyway, it's still very good, and yes, it is better than before. gg.
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From ANON - Nana on October 01, 2006
Dude, that was AWESOME. The last line was just.... *laughs* I loved this whole thing!
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From ANON - Nyuchan on September 30, 2006
The ending screams after an epilogue or the whole conversation between online sasu and naru.. just for fun!.. ^.~

I love the story! :D
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From ANON - Sekre on September 30, 2006
Love it!
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From ANON - ss on September 17, 2006
Woooo Hoooo!!!!! Wow, you found such a wonderful way of stating basically my opinion on the whole seme/uke thing. And I think you did a WONDERFUL job of keeping them in character! I can't wait for the more detail and although I would like reading more, I think I like it more where it ends now. Sometimes some fabulous idea is great in the beginning, but because it was pulled out it wasn't so great in the end. That is why I love several really good one shots (and although this is now a three-shot I still classify it as a one-shot). Plus I really like the idea of the fic in general (did I mention I love your fic yet?). I have never been to Niagara Falls myself, but have seen Wonder Falls so knew what it meant. Yeah... can't wait to read any future fics from you and would love to chat with you anytime (you mentioned the lack of chat...) Keep up the good work and can't wait to read the re-vamped version *^_^*
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From ANON - roxaroni on September 17, 2006
"HAHAHHHA. Was the pun intended?"

Surprisingly, no... it was not. Wow, that made me laugh. Lol!

I talked about not knowing if Sasuke might top Naruto in the next chapter, because I believe in the last part of your A/N you talked about maybe writing a next chapter (and you are! THANK YOU! *loves muchly*). I admit that I enjoy NaruSasu just an ounce more than SasuNaru, but only because sometimes just how much uke!Naruto can be ooc scares me, but I believe that's a result of SasuNaru being more popular than NaruSasu (more room for people to mess up XD), and if NaruSasu was more popular, I'd probably have a problem with uke!Sasuke (or maybe it's only because they always make uke!Sasuke blush like crazy, and I have this weakness for dark haired angsty anime boys blushing).

So I call myself a NaruSasuNaru fan. I don't like to side on making anyone uke or seme, because doing that usually leads to ooc on both factors. And I don't know why ukes have to act a certain way while semes have they're own way. I don't like think taking it up the butt, really means you're submitting to someone, because if you compare that to heterosexual affairs (where I think the whole idea is derived from), that means the woman in the relationship is always submissive. As a female myself, that kind of strikes me as sexist (and I don't like that).

Naruto's sexy on top, Sasuke's sexy on top, THEY'RE ALL sexy on top. Why should anyone care as long as they're having sex?

...Wow, that sounded really, really shallow.

*glomps back*
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From ANON - Inus_Kagome_Forever on September 17, 2006
So, so, so, so, sooo glad I read this story! It was AWESOME! NO GREAT! ... i AM GOING TO HAVE TO READ IT AGAIN LATER WHEN I HAVE TIME. Though I can't believe you haven't ever finished a lemon, considering the scenes you did in your other story, Naruto's Secret, I only asumed (though it was only kissing scenes) that you had well written yaoi lemons before. Either way, you did a good job! That, again I state, was GREAT! Please continue writing Naruto/Sauske/Naruto paired fanfics! (oh and with Shika and Temari on the side!... okay, my fantasy... I have a list of Naruto pairings in my head.) lol

Inus_Kagome_Forever
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From ANON - Bookworm51485 on September 16, 2006
Since there was a whole chapter dedicated to responding to me review, I guess I should also respond back.

First to roxaroni, if you think personality doesn't matter in terms of sex then I'm not sure what world you're living in. Personality plays a part in EVERYTHING in life. Second, on how I knew they wouldn't switch positions. She labeled it as a two-part story and the 2nd part was over. That's how I knew and unless she decided to continue it, it would only be a NaruSasu story. I'm not black and white with the whole seme-uke issue, but I do try to take into consideration the personality of each character.

And to the author, I agree I hate the extremes. Though I can take a feminized (I don't even know if that's a word:D) Naruto better than Sasuke, because for me personally fem-Naruto is funny but fem-Sasuke is just ridiculous. On the issue of their issues, I agree that Naruto has issues. I do know that, but his issues are different from Sasuke's. The issues I was talking about for Sasuke are his obsessive need to be better than Naruto. That in the end was what lead to him leaving and going to Orochimaru, the fact that Naruto was surpassing him. Now I'm basing what I know about men on my brothers mainly, but for men the seme would be the one who came out "on top":P, if you get my drift. And unless Sasuke's personality changes, I don't see him being okay with letting Naruto come out on top. And that's based off of certain reactions he had to certain situations, but mainly on the rooftop fight and then what that lead to and how angry he got because of what happened to the different water towers.

Your story being an AU, I do agree that we couldn't really say who would do what to who. But because it was short and there wasn't a whole lot of information given on the character's personal histories, I just applied my perception of the characters within the canon story. But despite this, I really didn't mind the NaruSasu in your story I just prefer to go into a story somewhat knowing what to expect.

If you do want to discuss the issue, you can go to the forums here. They're really not that dead anymore. They're actually more active than many other forums I've been on.
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From ANON - DismalBismuth on September 16, 2006
Haha! Arguing over Starcraft!

I loved this fic so much! It's kinda been a dry period for these short sexy fics. Everybody seems to be writing all these looooooong stories that don't have any sex for like 15 chapters! I can't wait that long!

Anyways, I don't like NaruSasu. At all. I don't read them, because I don't like how people write Naruto as a seme, and Sasuke always comes off as the tragic scarred uke role that I hate so much, even if he isn't girly. But that's just the characterization. I totally agree with you about the whole sex thing, I don't care who's sticking it in who! As long as it's hot! I just don't want them to be OOC, and everything beyond that, as long as it the two of them is fine.

Anywho, write on!
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From ANON - SPKathrine on September 16, 2006
I'm in love with this fic.

I'm so tired of sterotypical fics with Naruto as this either rather 'innocent/naive' uke and Sasuke as the horny dog who spends half the day getting into his pants, or the 'weak/wimpy' Sasuke's who is way too uke for his own good and Naruto is the big, 'gorgeous' over-protective seme. There were nice for a while, and some of them are wonderful fics, but the characters themselves as they are just don't fit the profiles. You have to take them out of context and I miss them being IN context, what with the lack of Sasuke in the manga and anime at the moment.

While I think Naruto is a cutie (and if his dad is a link, he'll grow up to be GORGEOUS) and Sasuke is sexy (AND GETTING MORE SO AS TIME GOES ON), I like how you kept them so well in-character. It doesn't matter who was 'bottom', because technically Sasuke was on top. I've always seen their relationship as interchangeable and the over abundance of 'either/or' rather than 'both' kinda upsets me. I see both characters as too dominant to stay on the uke-side of the spectrum...unless there is a logical preference with lots of explanation, where they usually have to be in complete control of the situation anyway. I don't know, maybe I'm just picky.

But you did wonderfully with this. Sasuke was being 'taken' but he had no problem taking control of the situation. And how it happened was plausible enough to see how the end result came about. I loved the whole chat-buddies twist because it's funny how many people don't know who their talking to on-line. They could go to school with together everyday and not even realize it, depending on their conversations. And the last line was HILARIOUS! I kept imagining Sasuke passing out or something else to that effect, maybe a heart attack?

Sorry! I just realized I did a lot of babbling. The chat-conversation was a little confusing, but with what was going on, I believe it was probably meant to be that way? It throws off the reader and I was like 'Wha?' until everything fit together and I was like 'Oh!!' So bravo on a wonderful and rather 'hot' fic that I will probably be coming back to read again later. And if you have anymore...I'll be looking. ^_^
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From ANON - Anon on September 16, 2006
wahhhh NaruSasu?? But I love SasuNaru tooo much *snifflesniffle* I dislike NaruSasu soooo much, I don't know why....maybe because I'm so use to Sasuke being top that if it's Naruto I'll be like "ew ew ew ew omg noooo!!!" well anyways your story was interesting, I just skipped through the NaruSasu part lol and pictured it was SasuNaru hehehe. Well anyways the ending to chapter 2 was funny, lol, if they only knew *sigh*
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