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Reviews for Ramen Seductions

By : yf17
  • From ANON - Anon on March 19, 2007
    u ever gonna update?
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  • From ANON - canthinkofaname on September 28, 2006
    you're very good at literature aren't you. you describe everything really well, i like your story
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  • From boyarina on September 24, 2006
    when are you going to update this? :)
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  • From ANON - Bekah on September 19, 2006
    Yippie! They kissed! x.x how old was that ramen anyhow? Update soon!
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  • From ANON - Tsukashi on September 04, 2006
    Oh very nice! The humor had my literally laughing out loud a few times! The angst towards the end was well played too! - Maybe it could have been drawn out a little more. Make Sakura's panic a little more palpable, her fear a little more real. As the realization of the fact that she actually has hurt him sets, in allow her to feel some hurt before the fear. But honestly it is not necessary. - Write more!
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  • From ANON - Nowhere Man on September 01, 2006
    I agree totally with TerraChrono. Using some phrases like Baka or Gomen, general terms that everyone knows is fine. But when you string out other phrases its is an eyesore. Besides that fact, I extremely like the first chapter, any Naru/Saku goodness is great for the economy and it lowers gas prices.^^
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  • From ANON - Josh on August 31, 2006
    Hey nice story. I like the whole setup but I didn't know in the later paragraphs what was going on. Other than that it was pretty good
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  • From ANON - Hestia on August 31, 2006
    Very cute! I don't really get the Princess F. stuff, but I thought the bit about the Medical Miracle show was funny. I also liked the reference to the Sasuke/Sakura bench scene. Since I don't watch much anime beyond Naruto, I didn't get the reference that was supposed to clarify what Sakura looked like. I like the bit where Sakura is in the kitchen thinking about how Naruto would get the ramen from the high shelf, too.
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  • From ANON - solar phoenix on August 31, 2006
    Good writing, lame ending.
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  • From ANON - Mu on August 31, 2006
    Nicely written, like the idea and well, I enjoyed it ;)
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  • From ANON - logophobia on August 31, 2006
    by the way, TerraChrono is wrong, japanise can and is often used in fanfiction and sometimes even english translations of jap-anime. and is also used to create a solid visual (like when you use Gomen to meke Sakura cute). besides when you use japanese you are commemorating the source of the fiction you are taking from.
    PS. if terraChrono reads this, its nothing personal, i just dissagree with you
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  • From ANON - logophobia on August 31, 2006
    very nice. it to soon to decide for sure but if you keep this uo you will have a grade A fic
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  • From ANON - TerraChrono on August 31, 2006
    First off, quit with the interspersed Japanese. It makes me want to puke when I see a writer of English interjecting Japanese into their textr for the sole reason of showing that they can do it. It.s an eyesore and makes you look like an unhealthily-obsessed otaku (in this case, the usage of the term otaku is valid because it is a word with no English equivalent. Gomen, short for gomenasai, however, does have an English equivalent, 'sorry'). As you can likely infer from the parenthesis, using a word of Japanese word that has no English equivalent (kunai, nin, etc.) is an acceptable practice because it's much more conducive for the story than using a string of English words in its place. In short, either write all dialogue in Japanese, or stick to English. Don't meander in both. Meanwhile, the rest of your first chapter is well-written, laying a good foundation for the rest of your story. Take this review into consideration.
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  • From ANON - kristin on August 30, 2006
    I really like the first chapter. You are going to add more right? So far it's not really an Nc17 rating, more PG.
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