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Reviews for How Neji Acquired Fan boys

By : nekogirl1
  • From ANON - Tsukiko on August 22, 2006
    haha! nice
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  • From ANON - kitten53 on August 22, 2006
    Why would Sasuke have a sleepover party?
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  • From MercuryChaos on August 22, 2006
    There are a few things you could do that would make this a lot better. First, don't use the "yaoisexy" things as linebreaks. True though it may be, it draws attention away from the story. Just use something simple like three centered asteriks (***).
    Second, don't put author's notes anywhere within the story. Putting an author's note in the middle of a paragraph interrupts the flow of the writing... it's annoying when you're following along with the story and then you suddenly come across a randon "A/N". They should be either at the begining or at the end, and keep them short. If there's something in the story that you feel needs to be explained (like the definition of a word) then just put an asterik next to the word, and then another at the end with an explanatory note.
    Third, when you're introducing a scene, writing out what is happening looks a lot better than just putting "***An Hour Later***…..still playing Truth or Dare". It takes more time but the end result is worth it. Making small changes like this will improve the story greatly.
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  • From ANON - Mija on August 22, 2006
    ooh I like this ALOT, you have to write more soon, this is funny and totally interesting, Neji is sooo funny, gotta love them emo boys lol, please update soon ifn you can, Im intrigued and totally looking foward to more, ty for the wonderful read, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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  • From ANON - kitty on August 22, 2006
    ohhh i'm hooked and i can't wait for the next chapter to see what happens next. oh yah and a drunk naruto i can totally picture in my head.
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  • From ANON - mel on August 22, 2006
    Sounds good so far. Keep it up!
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