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Reviews for Rise of a Kage

By : russianrocket
  • From ANON - Dierdra on November 23, 2006
    Oh my God! Continue! This story is so good!!!
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  • From ANON - Aeris on November 21, 2006
    Err...I kind of like this. But only kind of. I'm a big Gaara fan and thus a Gaara/Hinata fan, but...
    I'm sorry, but he's just too OOC unless he went to sleep. He'd only do this if he was sleeping. Hinata is not the kind to give up so quickly. I do wish for you to keep going, though, it's not too bad, I've definitely seen worse on AFF. So....update soon please? And fix Gaara and Hinata a little? I would like to see this again...
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  • From ANON - Bakuma on November 17, 2006
    Normally I don't read so much het.
    But since this was a bdsm story, I had to try it out ^^
    Yeah the characters are a little ooc but you wrote great bondage sex, which
    is very rare. Most bdsm stories are too soft but yours was pretty realistic.
    So keep the good work up ^____^
    Bakuma (excuse my bad english, I'm a poor (^.^) german girl, who needs more of your great sex scenes *begs*)
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  • From ANON - frizzy197 on November 16, 2006
    WHAT!?!? THAT'S IT. one hell of a short chapter
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  • From ANON - crazy...slightly insane on November 16, 2006
    Even though i feel bad for Hinata....this is still going to be a Hina/Gaara story...right? Wow...this is good!! You have to keep writing...(.^_^.)
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  • From ANON - James on November 15, 2006
    How old is every one in this fic because passing the tittle of hokage to 12-15 year old is weird
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  • From ANON - protogirl on November 08, 2006
    the fuck

    ...........

    .......... >_>;;;; hmmmm...interesting....

    continue? I would love to see more naruto girls in this >
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 05, 2006
    This story is very good...

    Although I have no idea if its even possible, this should definitely be finished!
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  • From ANON - Geda on October 30, 2006
    This could be interesting...
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  • From MeganekkoMint on October 29, 2006
    Wow, haha "Bark for me!" That was great, I don't know why I mean it's rape you would think it would make you turn away but it's really really entertaining and interesting. Ha, I bet I sound a little pervy now, whatever.
    This gives me a looottt of ideas...Gaara does seem like a pretty good rapist. Hinata knows she likes it! XDD

    {Yay for dominatrix-like Gaara!
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  • From ANON - I HATE YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! on October 28, 2006
    Shit sorry my bad but you got the piont right??????????????
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  • From ANON - I HATE YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! on October 28, 2006
    THIS STORY SUCKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!RAPE,RAPE.RAPE GOOD GOD I FEEL SO SOSOSOSOSSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOSOS SORRY FOR HER I MEAN GAARA SCARS THE CHIT OUT OF ME I WOULD HATE TO BE IN THAT SITUATION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!YOU ASS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - L.D's on October 27, 2006
    I think that you really should practice writing a bit more, maybe get a beta to help you. It's always a good thing to have another person look over your work before you publish it. The second chapter was by far much better than the first, but still really rough. If you want to write a rape fic there is nothing stopping you, but you might want to consider that Hinata probably wouldn't be begging for it when being beaten. The dog barking part was just odd to put it nicely.

    I won't probably read or review again, because I really do abhor rape fics...when you have a friend who was gang raped in college and you hear what rape is really like then you don't exactly like reading stories that are not only about rape but very off the mark. I have half a mind to write one just to show people how utterly horrid the experience actually is, not this happy little fantasy that some make it out to be...but that would require me to think far too long about something that really disgusts me.

    Try doing writing exercises, even journaling will help you become a better author. Take the time to formulate your ideas and draw them out. I hope to see some other fic from you in the future...something that isn't about rape. This is your only fic right now, so it's really hard for me to judge your overall skill by one fic on a topic that I don't like. Don't give up on writing, just practice. It will help you in the long run
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  • From ANON - frizzy197 on October 27, 2006
    love it!!! write more..like now
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 27, 2006
    everyone's lying to you... this sucks. it's WAY TOO ooc to be good. and the dialogue just makes it worse
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