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Reviews for Temari's Crush

By : lorin
  • From CassandraWalls on December 29, 2007
    I really like it. I normally put Hinata and Kiba together, and Temari and Shikamaru, but this is an interesting fic. Keep it up.
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  • From hahonryuu on December 17, 2007
    awsome story

    one little annoyance

    temari pretime skip was already 15...2 1/2 yrs later shed be 17-18...3-4 years after that in your story shed be 21-22 not 20

    sry,im a fan boy XD

    but really great story

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  • From BookaG on June 27, 2007
    If someone gave you an idea on how to go forward, it wouldn't be you continuing your story. Just think, think, think! That's the way to overcome writer's block. I like the way you've written it so far.
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  • From geeker on April 04, 2007
    well, i suppose dinner is in order...along with "desert". personaly i think tamari and hinata make a great couple. maybe if you were to try to add more detail to the story itd be easier to find more things to extend the length of this read. just an opinion, a comment, and posibly an idea.
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  • From ANON - Yuki on December 09, 2006
    I'm normaly a yaoi girl but I got bet to read a yuri fic and
    I think this might catch on with me.And no I'm stright.
    Up date soon
    Ja ne,
    Yuki
    *dancing*I just got $100,$100
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  • From Mangafreak on December 06, 2006
    if your stuck on the next chapter here is a helpful hint. relax and close your eyes and let your imagination take over. that is what i do when i write a story.

    but if that doesn't work then jsut continue the storyline. temari goes to hinata's for dinner. temari meets hinata's father and sister. they eat. temari and hinata do something to be alone (like go for a walk) they express their love for each other and i think you can get it from there.

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  • From ANON - shattered919 on October 17, 2006
    ok that story was moving way too fast you need to take time with it. theres needs to be more outside interaction and more negative things happening in the story to make it more realistic. -__- this story was boring and too short
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  • From ANON - Neko-Chan on August 11, 2006
    awwwwwwwwwww ^_^ so cute!!! i feel all warm and fuzzy now ^^ Great chapter!!! Hope theres more soon!!!
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  • From ANON - Smile hatred on August 11, 2006
    Good chapter man sorry didn't give you a review on the last chapter
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  • From ANON - Neko-Chan on August 10, 2006
    awwww!!! Hinata is so kawaii!!! Great chapter!!! Cant wait for more!!
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  • From ANON - Kyuubi Fanatic on August 10, 2006
    Thank you, and good job on chapter two. I agree with your decision to build a relationship before having them get physical as I believe it will add more impact and power to your story. I'm not used to chapters being so short, but it is a style in-and-of itself, so do what you feel is right, it's your story. You're doing great, please update soon.
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  • From ANON - ButterflyBones on August 10, 2006
    Oh god, thank you for writing this. It's my favourite yuri pairing and I've been waiting for someone to write something for it. Thankyouthankyouthankyou, and please keep writing!!
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  • From on August 10, 2006
    Yay for chapter two! I've never had anyone reply to my reviews before, thanx! That was really cool, made my day. So, a review about the fic! I always knew Hinata could read people; she's Neji's cousin after all! And her outfit, I can picture it, really lovely. Temari's is more sexy sounding, and it fits her personality! This is a great story so far, please keep it up!

    Seisai
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  • From ANON - randomperson with no life... on August 10, 2006
    Chapter two review-

    this was great...i love the way you did different views...it really set the story right...i never really thought of Temari with Hinata...i usually like Temari with either Shikamaru or Tenten...but i can really see this...ya know the tough girl with the quiet girl...sounds sweet to me...update soon...seeya...^_^...
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  • From ANON - Kyuubi Fanatic on August 09, 2006
    really good. Temari and Hinata, i like that pairing. please continue, for a first time with no one giving u advice u did great.
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