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Reviews for The Ties that Bind

By : Twylight
  • From ANON - Anna on September 28, 2006
    Ohhh come on you're fucking kidding me right?? Leaving it like that!! After that hot and rough sex session!! You left me at the edge of my chair and wanting to read more! Please update ASAP!!
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  • From ANON - Anna on September 27, 2006
    Quote "Sasuke was easier to turn on than a light switch" unquote.
    That was hilarious!!! I looved this chapter, even with the "lack of sex" you mentioned. A threesome for the next chapter sounds awesome. It took you a long time to update this, but since it was an awesome chapter I'll forgive you, but please update as soon as you can!
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  • From ANON - Twylight on September 27, 2006
    Rather than putting this in my A/N, I thought I would put it here.

    To "snow_angel"

    Thank you for your...critique, I guess. However, my definitions of the words were perfectly fine.

    Teme, actually, is a vulgar form of "you" used by young males. Thus, "Bastard", "asshole", "jerk" is perfectly fine for the definition.

    And well, as for your explanation of "Usuratonkachi", it can mean "Moron of all Morons" or "dumbass" (as I said) if you want to put it briefly, however, it really is a made up word by Sasuke. "Usura" is a derogatory term used in many insulting phrases like "Usurabaka" (dimwit) meaning "dim" . Tonkachi is the word for "Hammer", commonly used in phrases like "you swim like a hammer" . So, really, there is no 100% correct English translation. Unless you would like to say "Dim Hammer" but I doubt that is what Sasuke was going for. I would have put this explanation in my footnotes had I felt it needed such an explanation, but it didn't.

    And as for "Dobe", I never even used the word in my fanfiction, and I know the translation to it. No need to point it out to me if I didn't even use it or define it incorrectly.

    Not to sound arrogant or mean but next time, if you are going to correct someone, please make sure that they need correcting first.

    ~ Twylight

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  • From ANON - snow_angel on September 27, 2006
    Usuratonkachi - moron of morons
    teme - bastard
    dobe - dead last

    you want to define the words for your readers you should know the correct definitions.
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  • From ANON - meeksins on September 08, 2006
    HELL HOT!
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  • From yuraasakura on August 13, 2006
    Hey there! I just remembered my password... lol I was reviewing before as Anna, anyway! Are you updating this one soon? I don't think it's a one-shot, and it is way to cool to leave it as one! Please update as soon as you can!
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  • From ANON - Cesia on August 10, 2006
    Nice. I just love Naruto/Sasuke pairings.^^ I think Naruto makes a much better seme than Sasuke. hehe^^ That was a hot chapter and I can't wait to see how mind blowing the rest will be. ^o^
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  • From ANON - losthimagain on August 08, 2006
    O.O Wow. I dub thee fic Best FanFic I have Ever Read and I've only read the first chapter. Good job and I love you. I really do. O.O Wow.
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  • From ANON - kaesaku on August 05, 2006
    wah~
    that was hot!
    loves it!
    ..and was that a TBC at the bottom of the page?
    T..B..C..?
    you mean there's more?!
    wai~
    *dies happily*
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  • From ANON - dancingkitsune on August 04, 2006
    that was uberly hot.....I await the next chapter!! =D
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  • From ANON - Ann-chan on August 03, 2006
    Huzzah! That's a wonderful first chapter, Catesan. You contribute wonderfully to the pitiful few good NaruSasu fanfics out there. *cheers*

    The lemon was delicious and well-written. It ended abruptly, and so I am eagerly anticipating what follows between them after their little screw session. Do continue, and great job!
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  • From ANON - chibi-puffchan on August 03, 2006
    Yes, I agree with you 100 percent, there should be more Naruto/Sasuke stories out there.
    I really enjoyed reading your story so far. I also like how you put the footnotes throughtout the story, instead of at the bottom.
    All in all, I think you didn't a great job so far, and I really hope you continue this.
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  • From ANON - Chris Jackson on August 02, 2006
    I liked your story, I like how you have depicted the characters in a more realistic fashion to there original designs. Naruto as a top is insanely hot, I think it would be great if you had the story continue and have Sasuke deal with everything and have Naruto help him and use sexual healing ^_^ I hope you know that song. The love scene was short and sweet and yeah I enjoyed it.


    Peace

    Chris
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  • From ANON - uLtIM8 FlAmEr on August 01, 2006
    Oh yeah. I forgot to add, ellipses are used to pause in speech, too. Using an ellipsis for ommission is used in quotes, like in research papers or whatever.
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  • From ANON - uLtIM8 FlAmEr on August 01, 2006
    this story was pretty good. you were right about most stories leaving out chracterizations and stuff. This led nicely to the lemon, if a little cliche.

    Two things though:

    Did you get a beta? There were some spelling errors and grammatical errors. Might want to fix those. No offense, but when I read your A/N, you came off as arrogant. I was hoping for a superb read.

    There is such a thing as unnecessary details. It's like you really try to describe every action and give a reason behind them, most notably in the first section. Length is always a good thing in a story, but you can cut out some irrelevant details. The story loses intensity and gets too boring. I know "..." is popular when a character has nothing to say, but its unprofessional (its OK in manga, not stories). It's not like Sasuke says "ellipsis." Ellipses are only used in a middle of a quotation when parts of the phrase are ommitted either in the middle or at the end.

    Nice idea, but try re-writing it. Even the stories that had little to no characterization had better structure than this. I hope you take this as criticism, but that's what all flamers say. Anyway (anyway does NOT have an 's' at the end), continue this soon. I'm eager to see where it goes.
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