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Reviews for Machi Yoko Naruto

By : antilogicgirl
  • From MsKeller on August 09, 2006
    this is by far one of the best AU's I think I've ever seen. Your wording is insightful and well ordered. Moving from dialogue to action is flawless and maintains interest. You have a real talent with words. I especially love the situation you have put the characters into and how you have made them fit the mold of their roles. The descriptions of them and their roles are so excellent that I can get vivid imagry of how they appear in your AU. Keep up the excellent work on this one, I can't wait to see where you take it.
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  • From ANON - blisblop on July 27, 2006
    You have a very athorative voice here.The detail was pleasing.Naruto is interesting,Sasuke seems emotional.The action was amazing ,thats rare so thats cool.All in all a go I'd say.I like it.
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  • From ANON - akai amaterasu on July 24, 2006
    Very intersting, and also definitely original, I think you just got me hooked to your story. I can see that you did thorough research. Makes it that much more interesting to read how you going to continue. Keep the martial arts comin and the writing level up to whwt I've read, you'll have one very happy reviewing reader. I think I'll enjoy reading this very much.
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  • From ANON - liza on July 24, 2006
    Its a really well written out story. The story really got my attention at first glance. I absolutely loved the plot! What I would recommend you to use, seperators between each scene that changes, like the time skip between when Sasuke and Naruto fell asleep and then woke up in the morning, because it gets a bit confusing when the scenes changes all of a sudden without warning. And in some parts the action goes by too fast so you kind of miss parts of the story. I like how well you wrote in the Japanese terms into the story, without making it sound too japfangirl-ish.(ha) But overall, its a well done job! Cant wait until the next chapter! Also if you want to receive more feedback you could post your story in the naruxsasu or sasuxnaru community at livejournal.
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  • From ANON - Devious Lil Devil on July 23, 2006
    this is damned good! i love your writing style and usage of the japanese language and customs. i eagerly await your update. but just to let you know, you might not get that many reviews here. most of the people check out the yaoi section before going anywhere else in this fandom. i've seen a lot of good AU's get ignored because it was placed over here instead of the male/male section. anyway, see ya next time.

    ~Devious
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  • From Reyn on July 22, 2006
    Well, this story certainly has captured my interest. I'm assuming the reason you didn't really delve into Ibiki's character was because you intended to kill him off right away...which is sort of a shame, because the impression I got before his death was someone of little respect, but then suddenly Sasuke was revealing deeper feelings for the man.

    That aside, I eagerly await the next chapter ^_^
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