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Reviews for Machi Yoko Naruto

By : antilogicgirl

From ANON - blisblop on September 21, 2006
" Could care less" means it is still bothersome,that one still cares and could(probably should) care less but for some reason gives a s--t/is disracted/ is unfocused.That is why the saying is "Couldn't care less" meaning that it isn't possible to be more indifferent.What is the bizzare trend on this site to misuse this term? I should care less but its driving me nuts.The swimmng pool scene where Naruto is ignoreing the salt water burn to his eyes but he couldn't care less about the pain cause all his attention is on pranking Sasuke.I am rereading this fic and will give proper review at the end.Just had to relieve that spazzam.
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From ANON - Anna on September 21, 2006
Well... I think that my nose won't stop bleeding for a while, and I'm alerghic to strawberries! LOL, awesome chapter, I hope that Naruto kill the bastard that attached the Tea House!
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From ANON - Nomme de Plume on September 19, 2006
omg, what a wonderful story! you must continue, and soon. btw, i would have said this at an earlier chapter, but i had to read through what you had first: ahem,

I LOVE KAKASHI, TOO! (enthusiastically, if you couldn't tell ^_~)

keep up the excellent; i look forward to your next update. (btw, i love AUs; they give a writer so much freedom)
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From ANON - Anna on September 16, 2006
*gulps* Gaara called Naruto... what would he tell him! Ahhh the wait is going to kill me.
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From ANON - silver-eyed on August 28, 2006
yay, an update! hmm, it's obvious that the ero-sannin would prefer women, but i guess i never thought about what he had to say about same sex relations. interesting. and i like hinata, she's got backbone, she merely has to be pushed until she snaps. and neji is quite a pushover if you think about it, which you obviously did. okay, enough of my babbling, keep it up!
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From ANON - silver-eyed on August 22, 2006
great story! i love it! i like how you're incorporating a lot of the characters into your plot and how you are writing them. speaking of your plot, what the heck is going on? gaara and naruto are brothers? what's sasuke planning to do? (oh yeah, what does machi yoko mean?) and there was a heck of a lot more questions that i wanted to ask but forgot what they were. oh yeah, who is kurenai working for really? itachi or sasuke? yeah, you've got a lot to answer for but i like it. keep it up cause i'm looking forward for more soon!
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From ANON - Devious Lil Devil on August 20, 2006
hey you moved it! now, hopefully you can get all the attention you rightfully deserve. just look at your other story and the attention it's starting to get. the scene with gaara and ino was kinda cute. i loved the way gaara practically moved her in. hopefully naruto will accept him as family when he's finally told. i wonder what's going on with iruka? anyway, looking foward to your next update.
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From ANON - meow on August 17, 2006
Interesting story and well-written too. Please, continue! Meow wants to know what's next.
Thought, there was one thing that left meow a little confused - a bodygard can't sleep with his "body" - cos relationships of that kind could and will distract him from his duties, but well, Naruto is not professional bodygard (to be a good fighter and a good bodygard is two really different things), and in Japan there is a tradishion of bodygards for life - like samurai and daime, so may be for sasuke and Naruto it's normal.
And enother thing - Sasuke must give naruto holidays, when the 2 of them protected by someone else. Naruto still only human - he can't stay alert 724. It could be good for their relationships. If Sasuke will let naruto go, beliving that naruto wont leave him - it's the ultimate trust. Let someone go and wait for him to return, not because of the debt, but because he wants it.
Well, you're the author anyway (meow worships you) so that's for you to decide!
Update soon!!!
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From ANON - Devious Lil Devil on August 16, 2006
wow, i finally got back to this and i'm totally in awe of all the great things you've done so far. this is exceptional writing here. we're getting total insight on everybody's life, their motivations... everything. it been some time since i've read something so thorough. i absolutely love the fact that you don't just focus on the main characters and just throw other characters in just because you can and never mention them again. just beautiful work. looking foward to your next update. i'm eager to see what anko finds and what itachi's next move is.
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From Trollmia on August 16, 2006
Again a very good chapter. I enjoy the little moment between Naruto and Sasuke. So cute... :) You have many emotions going on and you can feel each and everyone of them in your heart. I like that. I admire that gift of yours.
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From ANON - Anon on August 16, 2006
The fifth is another beautiful chapter. I am absolutely falling in love with this story. I am so glad you're letting them out night by night. You know what I realized about the first paragraph in? This is the first story I've ever read where I didn't kind of skip through the parts/characters that weren't Naruto and Sasuke. You've built up such a beautiful world around them that it's just as interesting to read about Kakashi and Anko as it is Itachi and Hinata (and yay, she's the one with the beautiful tattoo). I wonder if she'll ever meet Naruto.

But oh man, can I have permission to gush like a fangirl? I love an angry Naruto, SO MUCH. So that scene where he said those things to Sasuke. Oh and I don't blame Naruto for being angry one bit. I almost wanted it to carry on more though. That was his vow of honor, right? To take care of Shikamaru? And here comes Sasuke, pampered Sasuke, who in one word (or two) ends the blood feud. Oh and then Naruto and his angsty/mean-spirited things he says to Sasuke. I just loved that, because you know he's just asking for a punch in the face. I loved what he said about being a guard dog. It's interesting that he seems to be so "together." And yet, he also seems young enough (though sometimes he doesn't act around 20) that he can be sort of selfish and pouty. It would be awfully hard to live with a cold bastard like Sasuke who is sometimes warm and open and sometimes not. And as, well, open Naruto is emotionally, I can see how he would want it to just be there all the time. Like "Why, Sasuke, why, why can't you just say you love me?" And Sasuke is like, "Why can't you just know, Naruto?" I can't wait for them go get away from the compound and be alone together so I can figure out how their relationship has progressed besides hot sex and passionate words! Can't wait for the next chapter! I love this story so much!
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From ANON - Trollmia on August 14, 2006
Iruka is married to Kurenai?? Now that was a very original pairing. I like those... And Hinata married to Itachi... a little bit of this and that in this chapter. I'm glad I saved it to my morning coffee, now I have something to think about while at work... Until next time... Thumbs up :)
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From ANON - akasha on August 13, 2006
i think that this is the best sasuke/naruto fic i've read as of yet, although i am just now getting into the yaoi fics. it never occured to me that i might actually like this genre... anyway, i think your fic is awesome and i can't wait for an update!!!
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From ANON - Anon on August 12, 2006
Ok, I did something dumb. That was to read the first two chapters and not read the third because it was probably late and then I went to work, blah, etc... Wow, what a freaking mistake, I am such a dumbass. At first, the authenticity of the whole backstory and your authoritative voice were almost too intimidating, if you can imagine. But this is beautifully written and interesting. And I am, indeed, interested to know why Naruto "got the finger." Literally.

That third chapter was incredibly hot and intense and just wonderful. And if you wouldn't have sort of made mention of the predatory glances than I wouldn't have really anticipated Sasuke's tremendous desire for Naruto. Maybe that's because a good majority of the story is in Naruto's POV, and he obviously didn't realize it either. And you did admit that Sasuke was having "girl" thoughts. Yes, he is, and it sort of works because I'm seeing him as a kind of spoiled child (but what about the tattoos, what does that mean...), pampered and wealthy. Used to getting what he wants and acting on impulse if he does want it. So why shouldn't he have Naruto since he practically owns him anyway? And you handle Naruto beautifully. Just like Sasuke feels, Naruto does seem so innocent (yet not) but yeah, untainted is a good word. I wonder if even though Naruto said he didn't regret it, will Sasuke still feel a little guilty? I guess he shouldn't, but it makes him more human and vulnerable. I just love the situation though, where they have to be so close to each other all the time, what else could happen. And I'd like to know more about why Sasuke chose Naruto. I wasn't even expecting them to get so close so soon, so I wonder what will happen between them next? What a tough position when you're involved with someone but still responsible for their life. That's a lot of pressure on Naruto. Oi, great job. Oh, and at the first POV switch, Naruto's name is spelled wrong, I think that's where it was. Eep, it was a little distracting. Thought I'd point it out in case you didn't see it.
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From ANON - Trollmia on August 11, 2006
Wow.... that's the only word that comes to mind after reading this. First of all, this is the first time I read a story with this angle. Gang-stories have been done before, but this was a bit new to me. Very descriptive and telling and I have no trouble at all imagine the whole thing... Very good, thumbs up!! I will be looking forward to read more of this story.
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