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By : mirandler43

From Fyra on January 19, 2007
Awesome story, started reading it today and I couldn't look away ^^ haha Aww Kiba leaving :( well if he's leaving you should bring back Neji, Shika has too much time on his hands...lol oh wait if Kiba leaves Lee would be without a play buddy... and they are funny together... wow... that sad... well Im happy Kiba gets to leave but that means leaving everyone....hmmm.... well anyways before my thoughts decide to run away on me, I really like your fanfic. Very unique, the only one I've read thats like this. Good work!
Take Care!
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From Briryan on January 18, 2007
That was a great chapter!) Sadly the only way to review your new chapter, was to get an account here. So as you can see I did. I myself have really no problem with the fact that this chapter was Naru/Sasu. You are right, one has to find ways around problems and they did. I am sure Sasuke didn't like it but he did it for Naruto. And that is all that counts, right? I can't wait to read the Sasu/Naru one now. Cause this one was very good. Is Kiba really going to be leaving them? I hope he doesn't, but at the same time I hope he does. Looking forward to reading the next chapter.
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From on January 18, 2007
phew! that was hot. and yet again, though there was a long delay... *pouting* it was well worth the wait. you two are amazing writers. you never fail to amaze, you never fail to interest the reader with the way you create the characters and have them behave with one another. you two are wonderful writers and i really hope you keep it up. and i must say that i'm thrilled that you two did get this updated.

the wait, though long, was well worth it. you two did an amazing job with the story, progressing the plot and moving the characters to where you want them to be (and what a cliffhanger!). and the lemon- yeah. you two totally suceeded with your goal. hot and awkward at the same time. and yay for uke sasuke! you two are amazing. great job. keep up the great quality of work you both continue to produce. i look forward to the next update and am more than willing to wait patiently for the next update.

great job!
~hanyou-elf
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From Mija on January 18, 2007
omg I found this fic just tonight and I know I got on this comp at around 11:30pm and its now 7:21am...and I have not read ANYTHING else but mail, which I dont have much of...I was glued..riveted to the spot by this fic..part of me wants to jump for joy, I mean why wouldnt someone want to adopt a big lovable lug like Kiba..but then the hearbreak of being with out Naruto and the others, and the heartbreak Naruto would feel as well...and how about Lee??? oooh man angst galore, and is Naruto truelly getting better?? Shizune wouldn't give him false hope would she?? and I was wondering when Shikamaru's earlier statement about being able to tell when Naruto's next attack might come, would come into play in this fic...and I just have to say one3 thing..from the moment you introduced Lee to the group I couldnt stop laughing my ever loving butt off I mean the whole scene with Sasuke runing to get away from lee then Naruto seeing why Sasuke was so into the race and ran to the Kiba screaming and omg that had me laughing sooo hard, it was a piece of art I tell ya, all of the story is, love the long chapters and I just love the over all interaction, and truthfully this is the first ShikaNeji story or by pairing Ive ever read and I think they are sooo cute together, love em...anyhow cant wait for more but I know you have RL to lead so I shall wait patiently, if you still have that email alert it would be ever so nice of you two to let me know when an update occurs, if not soo k I shall defenitly check back, again ty for the excellent read, huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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From ANON - Anon on January 18, 2007
Duuude. I actually had to stop after the lemon to e-mail LG and squee and say how good it was. OMG. I am soooo proud of you, and it was AMAZING. Like beyond meeting my expectations, and to top it off, you surprised the hell out of me by making it NaruSasu by definition. Though, I think, Sasuke's attitude pushes it in the realm of ambiguous, you know. Not entirely equal, and LOL still somehow bordering on more SasuNaru, which is kind of fascinating.

Oh, it was just right, Mirandler, just perfect. It's amazing how realistic it felt *with them*. Like the sort of awkwardness, and especially how they actually talked during the scene. I mean... in real life *cough* you kind of have to communicate what goes where or if something's not working, so I loved that they just sort of did that, and it made it feel natural. It was brilliant really. The details were incredible without making it feel, you know, cardboard sex scene. I would actually say that's one of the best lemons I've ever read. It was a great blend of physical and internal description while also being thoughtful and innocent, but still really really hot. Like Sasuke throughout was just so... Sasuke. And before you said how they were going to do it, I was like... what doggystyle the first time? LOL I was as clueless as Naruto. I was like hm, I guess Naruto could just stand there and Sasuke could back up like a truck? haha. oh it was good, but good forshadowing not only with Naruto and false hope but with whatever's going on with Kiba. That makes my heart hurt and wonder how it will affect Naruto. He could downward spiral, and then he'll freak out because people are leaving, and if Sasuke has doubts, then how will he be able to really comfort Naruto? Aaah. This is so depressing to think about. Hn. I think I detected your like of ShikaSasu in there though or maybe not. I was like, they sure are talkative with one another. Not like really, but I was sorta thinking about it. Anyway, I said I'd do a long review as per usual, so I'll shut the hell up, but dude, it was AWESOME. I'm glad you put so much thought and time into it because it's really really good.

I hope the next chapters come out somewhat easier so you can work on other things if that's what you want XD plus I wanna know what happens to Kiba and if anything gets awkward between Naruto and Sasuke!
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From ANON - animehead on January 17, 2007
AWESOME! Everything turned out beautifully! I loved it. I simply loved it. I am pretty speechless right now, but this chapter was worth the wait trust me. The two of you did great!!!
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From BishounenKrazed on January 17, 2007
that... was wonderful. it was so... like you said, real. i really wish my vocab was bigger so i could tell you how much i really liked this chapter. i laughed, i 'whoa-ed', i was even suspenseful. this chapter was great. and, with kiba, i think it's both great and sad. i mean, yeah he finally gets out, but he'll be leaving his 'family' behind. unless of course, they want him for some sinister reason...

anyway, i can't wait until you update next, i love this story so much!!
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From ANON - Disgraceful_soul on January 06, 2007
OMG! It's been awhile since I checked up on this story. Gotta say, I bloody hell love this story. I missed it while I was gone, the NejixShika part was smexy. Never actually thought about that pairing before, I was actually disturbed by it. But you completly make it seem like it's meant to be. Few authors are able to do that, nice going ^^ Love the story, hope things work out! Hope to read more soon! Ja ne
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From ANON - Carolyn on January 06, 2007
I really hope you continue this story. It's amazing. I really like the plot and your characterizations. It's different from any other SasuNaru story I've read. ^_^ Keep up the excellent work.
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From ANON - Me Love You on January 05, 2007
OMG OMG! Another Chapter that my stupid self missed like twenty times. lol. Anyway, As usual it was pretty damn awesome and I completely love it more then words. I love the writing, long chapter and the over all Fic together so I just want you to know, I.Love.It.

Thank you soooooo much for writing this! It makes my day!
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From ANON - VK on January 05, 2007
I almost cried! That was really awesome. I forgot around this story for a few months then I remembered. Because it's that effin' awesome.

I �� you. XD UPDATE...please? :3
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From ANON - j on December 30, 2006
omg!

plzzzz update soon

i think my eyes watered a wee bit at the end

but i dont know if that was because of the seperation

or because that was the last chapter =(

but this story is REALLY good

its a break from the typical stories

not too fast

not too slow

and very creative

keep it up

and plzz update soon

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From ANON - Minen on December 30, 2006
have been waiting for another chapter for years now.. sight.. at least it feels like it:P I absolutly love *LOVE* love this story.. will an update be possible.. soon.. pretty plz? me want me want^^ anyhow.. uhm.. yeah.. have a nice evening^^

nu har vi v�ntat l�nge nog:P
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From ANON - americanXminority on December 30, 2006
*Sobs uncontrollably* Why...WHY ISN'T THERE MORE?!?!
Waaaah!!!
P.S.: I can't really recall if we were ever told what Shikamaru was in for...?
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From ANON - Ayame on December 25, 2006
OMFG that was halarious omg I absolutely love this fanfiction it rocks! and you do to because you wrote it*eyes glimmer*

Guess what!

*you say*what?

YOU'VE GOT A FRIEND IN ME! :D XD
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