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Reviews for The Top Floor

By : mirandler43

From ANON - TimeFlys on April 20, 2007
OMG!!! I had to leave my computer twice to get tissues I was crying so hard!!!! Is sasuke really going to leave? Because if he is I'm not sure I can bare it, and if I can't then theres no way in hell that naruto will be able to. He'll off himself as soon as sasuke walks out the door. A theres still so much smex to be had!!!! (also my eye's can't read with all the salt water in them!lol) Hope you update soon!!!!

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From crazychemgeek on April 19, 2007
Hey guys - just wanted to say you're both doing an awesome job. I've really enjoyed the story so far. The lemon in this chapter was fantastic, I laugh and awwed. Sasuke & Naruto were just so cute and awkward. I think people need to just accept that fiction (hello its in the website name) means that things don't have to be real. And aside from that, people with psychological conditions vary and don't fit into stereotypes (like all people). There are plenty of people out there who suffer from conditions that don't fit into any of the standard psychiatric disorders. I've been learning this is psychology, which I started studying this year. Anyway keep up the awesome writing, I can't wait to see what happens to the boys next.
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From ANON - seraphym on March 20, 2007
I love this fic and have come back to reread my favourite chapters many times. I just wanted to say that I'm sorry for all the flames you've been getting. Don't take it too hard because there are people out there who sincerely enjoy your work! And even though I'm terribly impatient for the next chapter I understand how difficult writing can be, especially when you want to do it well. You've never let me down before, so I'll just have to be patient! I await the rest of the story with eager anticipation!
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From ANON - Missteya on March 01, 2007
Totally totally amazing. I'd been looking forward to this update for so long. I'm glad that this story is in my bookmarks, and I remember to check it periodically. The lemon was extremely well done, and I can't wait to read your next chapter.
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From ANON - LemonsLuver on February 22, 2007
OMG I have been so busy....T__T I haven't checked my mail in a LONG TIME (over a month?)
There really isn't much about this chapter that I DIDN"T LIKE!!!!
I Loved it.... esp. the LEMON *DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
I kinda figured thats what those two people where there for XD
Lee is sooooo weird, but I love him...poor Kiba T_T
But he is going to live with a family.....It would be so good for him!
Poor Naru-chan, and his illness...
>O NEXT TIME SASUKE IS SEME!!!!!
>:3
Great chapter guys, can't wait for the next chapter...and take your time on them....goodness not like we're going to die if the next chapter doesn't come out like That!!!
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From esquisitepetal on February 10, 2007
I love your story, chapter 10 was great. The sex was just right loving, awkward, sensual.
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From ladygizarme on February 07, 2007
aahwaaaah kiba's leavingggg waaaaaah!! ah but this was a great chap, loved how both sasuke and naruto went to shika, the "expert", for help lol; and both had the same idea about 'topping' XD i really love how their first real smut came out, it was a good combination of first time awkwardness while still being really hot--i love that sasuke agreed to 'take it' for the sake of naruto, and the way they ended up having to do it for the safety of naru's leg, omg that was hot too; sasuke impaling himself is always hot >.> waaaah i can't believe it's almost all over, i don't want it to end
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From ANON - MiniMew on February 01, 2007
Angry... Emails? Over the story? Oh. My. Gawd. I mean, come on people! It's FANFICTION. Read the Disclaimer, 'kay?
Nevermind those kind of people, think positively. -I- adore this story, and I know that there's many others that do. *Stares*. Yeah, it's YOU I'm talking about!
Well, I've got to admit, I don't like SasUKE (aka bottom-Sasuke) in most stories, so at first I was like "Nawww...". But after reading it.. well, let's just say that I'm going to read a lot of other SasUKE stories in the future. *Grins*. And I loved Shika's scheming in this chapther. But...Somebody's going to adopt Kiba. B-but, no! He can't, can he? *Whimpers*.

~Kind-of worried, MiniMew
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From ANON - shinshin on January 23, 2007
I couldn't read the lemon 'cause sasUKE part ;______; and i'm really hoping there will be hot naru UKE lemon.... i'm been hanging with this story from the start, don't let me down.... but if we forgetabout that sasUKe part i'd say this story is one os greatiest story that i have read ^___________^
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From ANON - mikoto on January 20, 2007
i love the fic, so funny. but poor shika and neji, but at least they got nookie!!
please let me know when you update!
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From ANON - Yuri-san on January 20, 2007
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I'd say you hit the nail on the head with that lemon. ;D But, was it just me, or did the lube go from a "small retangular container" to a "bottle" after Naruto was done stretching Sasuke? (I'm surprised I noticed, quite frankly.)
Anyway, the actual lemon was really good! I was entranced (and I feel weird saying that, but I was) by the things Naruto was doing to Sasuke the whole time -but mainly the hand jobs. XD;;; The positions they took were *tries to think of the right word*...Good? Great? Awsome? Totally freakin' HOT? Yeah, that last one. XD Totally freakin' HOT!!!
Bored Shika is so evil. XD *huggles him for it*
omg. What's going to happen to Kiba! O_O
Another great chapter! (but with a special lemon! XD)
Way to go, ladies!!! =D
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From americanxminority on January 19, 2007
I love you.
That's...all I can say right now, haha.
Hmm, as for the whole ZOMG UKE SASUKE issue...
I'm not particularly a fan of UKE!Sasuke, but I
wouldn't chew you guys out or BITCH about it for
writing what you wrote. It turned out soooooooo well.
I loved it, and for me that's saying alot since
I usually[like 98% of the time] HATE when Sasuke's an uke.
So, fucking KUDOS to you. Forget all those jerks who just
have to find SOMETHING to bitch about. Immature little
FF.net-ers!
I...can't wait for some SEME!Sauke though. So please have
that for me soon *smirk*.
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From ArtemisSensei on January 19, 2007
I can't believe it! People are mad at you for making Sasuke uke? SASUKE UKE IS HOT! I mean, I love when authors remember that life isn't as black and white as uke and seme. It's two boys/guys/males/testosterone factories, I doubt in real life that gay guys always stick to bottom or top their whole life. I'm sure they enjoy trying both. And I was so happy you made Sasuke uke with Naruto! *hugs you tightly*

I loved this chapter and envy you so much. When Sasuke and Naruto start having sex in my story, I want it to feel new and awkward but hot, to. And I have no idea how I'm going to manage that. XD Maybe I could use you as beta then? To read and tell me what you think? That and I'm still a little inexperienced when it comes to writing lemon scenes. *fidgets nervously*

But boy I had a laugh. Shikamaru is SOOOO evil and he SOOOO did what I would have done. XD The Lee and Kiba lightening fear thing was cute as hell, to. But...what did that german word Scheibe or whatever mean? I know it was probably something naughty. XD *waves semuke flag above both Sasuke and Naruto's heads* Don't let those wussies at FF.net get to you! ^_^
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From on January 19, 2007
O_O

So...I thought I had read this ficcy, like the first few chapters, and not really *really* liked it, but so long as there was an update it didn't hurt to take a peek. Then I scanned over the first few sentences, and then I scrolled drown and read a paragraph here and there, and I realized, "I have never read this fic."

So i start reading...and I keep reading...and I make my lunch...and I keep reading...and i make my dinner...and I keep reading (damn I love winter break XD)...and stinking WOW!

This is a really, really awesome fic you have going here. There's definitely quite a few asylum fics out there, but this one is such more different and unique and original and the text just *breathes*. There's so much going on, and yet it's written well with a controlled, nicely-paced flow. There are so many hysterical parts that I just loved, and parts that I just wanted to hug, and during the incident with the knife? So much tension and suspense!

As for the lemon...very possibly the best first time NaruSasu lemon ever written XD loved it, loved it, loved it.

"Well I don't want to..."

"Me either."

Priceless. Absolutely priceless. Your use of detail is fantastic, your descriptions are not too much, not too little, and like I said the text just *breathes*. Absolutely riveting.

One question, though, because some scenes have confused me: How old exactly is Kiba?

with that I will say...

UPDATE :3

(though I've gathered from your a/n's that may take awhile T_T but that's a-okay because quality and length make up for it.)
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From Llevelios on January 19, 2007
ugh, now i havta log in, in order to review. Honestly its so....troublesome since my lazy butt is so used to typing in some random name then reviewing, if this wasnt such an awesome story i wouldnt even bother reviewing at all...

...so...consider yourself no less than a God for having THE Mizukage review your talented piece of literature...gawd i sound conceited....anywho...

another fantastic chapter (and FINALLY a freakin' lemon) i honestly adore this fic. almost to the point of obsession, i also loved the totally unsuspected Sas-UKE, *sigh* but i have to say im upset about our Kiba having to leave-i mean he keeps everything so light and...non-serious, you know? but he has to in order for the story to have a happy ending....right? 'cause in the end EVERYONE leaves and its a happily ever after ending......RIIIIGHT?!?!

one more thing!...if u could so kindly answer this question in an email....is...Itachi going to make an appearance???

ok, ive said all i needed to say, keep up the good work!!! and please try to update sooner, please.

-Yuffie
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