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From ANON - dancingkitsune on August 21, 2006
that would be awesome- to get a notice in the email. I actually had to try to read three chapters in one sitting because I had missed their updates, but couldn't and had to spread them accross two days because I've had bandcamp for the last few days (leaves me like two hours for free time and then just enough time for sleep ~,~;;) So yeah, emails would be lovely~! ^.^
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From ANON - Ari on August 20, 2006
I love your story!!! Please send me an email when the next chapter come out. My adress is heytwoyoutoo@yahoo.com
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From ANON - Fatkat on August 20, 2006
This chapter was funny. Though sad. >> I was all "Lol" then "Boo-hoo,"

Um. xD Yeah.
Loved it, Rock Lee was all coolness and Sasuke was all greiveness. So. Yeah, great chapter can't wait for the next one! ^^
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From ANON - Anon on August 20, 2006
Yes, you updated! Yeah, you did get kicked off the front rather fast. Annoying, but I check too often for your story that I wouldn't miss it. Ok, wow, your chapters are enjoyably long. I'll get to the end of a scene and I'm like ok it's the end, and then wham it goes on. So, you finally did it, eh? I'm sensing maybe it's tough. Or you're just incredibly talented. But Naruto and Sasuke's friendship is progressing, isn't it? The scene with the race was EXCEPTIONALLY good. I like how Sasuke wasn't thinking "Oh I like Naruto-like that." He just kind of fell into the moment. I hope you continue to write it like that, it makes it so, I don't know, deep but sort of suspenseful/meaningful. I guess I'm stuck on the relationship aspect, because even from the beginning of your story I was wondering how it would evolve because Sasuke's Sasuke (can he even talk about his feelings?) And Naruto sometimes, despite his perky, somewhat nosey (or bossy?) attitude, he also seems hard to read at times. Just from what Sasuke sees anyway. And I think that gives Naruto that sort of off balance thing, which I'm still loving.

Gah. Yes, you asked about Lee, didn't you. I was kind of iffy about this, though I applaud you for choosing an unusual character. I was so super impressed. He makes things lighters and instigates lovely things (like Kiba's attention), and we see Naruto's patience isn't perfect. Gosh within the first five paragraphs I'd laughed out loud twice. Just little things are really funny in this chapter. I love a Sasuke with a sense of humor. Yack, and the scene with Sasuke in Shizune's office, wow, that was like perfect. Although I was so picturing Good Will Hunting and I could see this sidefic worthy moment where Naruto and Sasuke are watching that movie from inside the psychiatric ward and then they make fun of the scene and they hug, and Naruto's like "It's not your fault man," and Sasuke's like "Don't fuck with me." And so on. It made me giggle. Sorry, I know that was a serious scene. It was really good. Crap, why do I leave long reviews. So obviously I liked what was happening with Naruto/Sasuke, I love Lee, I like that Shika came out to watch the arm wrestling, maybe he'll get over everything soon. Unless Neji visits or something. OMG and that final scene, why would Obito do that? I mean was that supposed to make him feel better? Did Sasuke ask him to send it? Sheesh, that's like the last thing I'd want if I was in there solely because my family had been massacred. Oh but I could feel that when Sasuke said he couldn't stop crying. And Naruto didn't even know what to do... I almost thought it was going to be like a severed head from Itachi, did I mention that? I was all like "What's in the box?" I just want to go on and on, I just loved it. It was great. You ladies do good work, it was angsty and light all at once, well writen, yada yada. I have to go gush to myself about the scene where they were lying in bed and Naruto really wanted Sasuke to talk to him about his issues. I don't think I can take waiting another week! Right, I'm done. Sorry. Can't help it.
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From ANON - Artemis on August 20, 2006
Oh my god! XD I love Lee! *glomps him* At first I thought he was just manic, but then you went and made him bipolar which is just plain awesome!! You've got me thinking about all the things each character could have. I have a feeling though what you said about Sasuke patching up. Don't tell me he'll get better, and they'll remove him from the ward. *pouts* That would suck! *glomps Naruto and Sasuke*
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From ANON - Halloween on August 19, 2006
O.O holy... Rocklee your nutz! But i;m loving Kiba! i must hug him! THE CUTENESS! Y.Y will Neji come back?!

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From ANON - hanyou-elf on August 19, 2006
wow. i love this story. you both have an amazing control of what you want to happen and what you want the characters to do and it's obvious in teh way you piece this story together, the way you created the characters (in such a different universe but still completely in character for themselves and what their situations are). the prose of this story is lyrical and poetic in its simplicity and continuded complexity. you both have an amazing talent, and to think that it's two of you, piecing this story together. i've read some combined efforts that haven't come out anywhere near as beautifully as this has been done.

now... lee? gods, i haven't laughed so much because of a fanfic in a long time. lee is absolutely hilarious. i love him. not to mention how cute sasuke and naruto are in this story. (hearts them!) keep up the wonderful work you've done with this story and i look forward to more.

please, continue to write and if wouldn't be too much trouble, email me when you've updated this story once more? i would appreciate it greatly.
~hanyou-elf
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From ANON - Burning Desires on August 19, 2006
Wow, this is a really cool Fanfic. I've NEVER read anything like it. To be honest, at first, i thought it was going to be rubbish, but when i starting reading it, i couldnt stop, its so so so awesome XD. Please update A.S.A.P!!
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From ANON - Mystaira on August 19, 2006
Oh good goddess!! Noo!! Anything but Lee!!! *snickers* lol Scariest thing ever, and here I thought it wasn't horror. ^_- lol Very amusing. Can't wait for the next chapter. I keep eagerly anticipating chapters. Its so fun to read. ^^
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From ANON - Shadow Walker on August 19, 2006
Hi again! How long are you planning on making this fic, cause it seems like Sasuke would be declared well enough to leave soon(go to another setting instead of super isolation). Anyway different way of protraying Lee, bi-polar, but it works. :) Hope to see more soon!
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From ANON - Zombie_Girl on August 19, 2006
LMFAO i loved it!!! Plz update soon!!! *Huggles* YOU ROX
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From ANON - kel on August 19, 2006
i have very much enjoyed your story thus far. i'm a little suprised that you made lee bipolar. i'm glad you read up some on it, just know that it's not usually as extreme as that-in fact most people with bipolar disorder (be it bipolar I. II, NOS, or rapid-cycle) are very normal. um yeah. i really love your story, tho. *hugs*
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From ladygizarme on August 19, 2006
yet another awesome chapter! wow, lee's bipolar.. yeah, yknow, it makes sense lol.. and yeah, him being in there for a bit of comic relief is good, but also doesn't take away from the serious matters either, which is also good if not better; it all fits together really well.. and lmao his reaction to finding naruto and sasuke lying on sasuke's bed.. and then what he said to kiba and the ensuing awkwardness.. just.. lmao nicely done. it was sweet when sasuke worried that it would change how naruto treated him, and then his relief at naruto's real reaction.. it's good he can admit to himself he needs naruto.. ahh more fluff *dopey grin* ah, let's not forget the kiba/lee factor in here, too! with kiba seeing lee as both a rival in play, and a rival for naruto's attention! the bit with kiba, sasuke, nar-nar and garfield while naruto taught lee the origami cranes was cute.. and poor nar-nar in traction! (lol) last but not least, the scene at the end with the pictures and sasuke finally being able to cry.. *sigh* it was heartbreaking and heartwarming at the same time.. i can't wait for the next chapter! and.. i think i usually catch it right away when you update, but just in case one of these days i miss it, please do add me to your list of people to notify for updates! email: ladygizarme@yahoo.com
thx!

~ lg
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From ANON - punkin02 on August 19, 2006
Great Chapter! Is Lee the last 'patient' we're going to meet, or will there be others? Can't wait for the next chapter:)
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From ANON - Disgraceful_Soul on August 19, 2006
Hey!! Nice story!! Love it! ^^ Omg, I can't believe Lee is taking Neji's place. How sad T-T I don't think Shika is going to like this ^^ Please update soon!!
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