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Reviews for The Top Floor

By : mirandler43

From ANON - Artemis on September 02, 2006
Weee! I loved this chapter so much! And you had Chouji with his food problem. Hee hee. ^^ Poor Sasuke got molested by Sakura. XD

But yea, I loved all the Naruto and Sasuke. So cute! I was glad you didn't make them do anything XXX'y because if you had I think that would have ruined the current moment. But you didn't, so good for you. ^^ Fluffiness is just enough, and the wait makes the fulfilment more sweet. Anyways, I was so worried when I started to realize along with Naruto that Sasuke is healing. I was mentally yelling 'Sasuke! Fake it! Fake illness!' and all. Of course, I think Sasuke is healing Naruto personally. So they'd be insane to take him away from Naruto.

But anyways, so glad you updated! Can't wait for the next chapter. And yeah! Shino! *glomps him* ^^
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From ANON - hanyou-elf on September 01, 2006
(gives tissues) don't cry because you don't own them, you've got such control of them in the stories, that i wouldn't know you didn't. you're absolutely amazing with this story. i love the way the story is coming along, i love the dynamics between naruto and sasuke. and oh goodness... their kiss! such a romantic kiss, such a simple kiss, but so damn romantic. i think it has to be one of my favorite kisses ever read and it was so simple. (applauds) amazing job!

and the angst! great job with that. oh i felt so bad for naruto when he made his realization. i just wanted to hug him, you made it so believable and so real. it was absolutely beautifully done. and still, you're continued lyrical writing draws me in and makes me want to read more and more from your hands. please, keep writing and i'll keep reading!

and still, you manage to keep the characters completely in character, believable and wonderfully controlled. that's amazing considering the fact that it is an au. so many people have troubles with that and you have it handled perfectly. thank you so much for the email and i look forward to the next one, especially when you update again.

ja ne!
~hanyou-elf
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From ANON - Rei on September 01, 2006
Love it!!!!!!
and Finally YAOI!
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From ANON - Briryan on September 01, 2006
Such a great chapter!) Really enjoyed reading the part with the "HAPPY FESTIVAL DAY" it was really funny!P What a perfect mental proble to give to Sakura, I think it suits her. Haha. Are you going to say what is wrong with the others? Gotta love Kiba, he can be so cute at times. Who would of though that Shika could have put up with Lee. That was sure a intense(sp?) part with Naruto and Sasuke. Glad that things worked out and Naruto went to someone by himself. Yes, please I would loved to be emailed when a new chapter is posted!) Thank you in advance. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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From ANON - A. Nonny Mouse on September 01, 2006
I'd like to take you up on the alert thing. This story's fantastic, and I'd love to be notified of updates as soon as they happen.
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From ANON - Briryan on September 01, 2006
Great chapter!) Loved the race that they had. It is always god to know what is wrong with someone and now I know what is wrong with Lee. I agree with Sasuke, I too would be scared of Lee. Off to read the next chapter now!P
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From ANON - sadistickiss on September 01, 2006
*dreamy sigh* This chapter was so sweet ^^. I dunno if this'll sound kind of weird or not, but I kinda like the fact you gave Naruto suicidal tendencies, it makes it seem like he really deserves to have somebody heal things (did that make any sense at all -.-''?). Suiciding in the toilet bowl is uber creepy *can't stop thinking about it O_O*. I get where he's coming from though, it'd be so depressing if Sasuke left T_T (pause... I hope you don't squeeze Orochimaru into this).

Anyway, this fic totally rocks. Please update soon ^^.
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From ANON - Anon on September 01, 2006
Damn it, half way through I was going to be a spiteful bitch and make a short review! DAMMIT, but then it just kept getting better and better... ugh *looks up at own review just above this one, slaps self for being a paranoid jerkwad* Yes, is all I have to say, yes yes yes to an unstable Naruto. I friggin' love that he's the most messed up one, and I knew he was thinking that he'd be the last to go and that he was the glue and yet everyone would take that for granted! Ugh, I love his attacks the most, because *those* are the ones easiest to feel. Everyone else, it's like you only get the outline, superficial part of their problems, but with him... damn it I love Naruto. Oh God, but I just fell in love with your Sasuke. All those little feelings arising in him for Naruto, and the moment in the bathroom. SHIT. Seriously, I had a squealy fit when he asked if he could do it again... you just never read this sort of innocent, honest, real emotional connection EVER. And please don't let them take it too far too soon, it's moving just right! And as much as I love a nutso Naruto, I am glad he told Shizune *meh unless he was lying* I'm sorry, I know it's Sasuke, but there's no way Naru's just gonna "get better." I'm sure more angst lies ahead after the humor. I personally love the angst the most. *dammit i should have been spiteful* fine, here's your damn long review *pouts*
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From ladygizarme on September 01, 2006
yayayay!! new chap, new chap!! *dances in glee* kyaa sooo awesome! all your chapters are awesome, but kyaaaa!!!! poor naru, totally saw that angst/suicide attempt coming! ..didn't expect it to be an attempted toilet-drowning though.. hafta say that was mighty diff lol (soo wrong of me to think it's funny O.o) but yay! for sasuke getting there just in time!! that could also be a thing for him, ne? he couldn't save his fam, but he got there in time for naru... and wooot!! for *finally* some real action (even if it was only kissing, cuz hey ya gotta start somewhere, and it was so sweet! i loved it!! it was perfect for the moments, cautious even with the intensity that led up to it--i hafta add, though, i pretended to myself that naru washed his hands and face first lol *has a germ-phobic ocd*) also i'm glad naruto told shizune on his own, so sasuke didn't hafta be a snitch (even if technically it's the right thing to do, it just doesn't feel quite right when you hafta do something like that *sigh*) and sasuke's freakout over naruto being gone was sad/sweet/touching/heartbreaking, especially when he was all "oh god oh god oh god" and told naruto what freaked him out.. ahhh *happy sigh* i can't wait for the next chap (as usual XP) you guys rock!

~ lg
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From ANON - themirror on September 01, 2006
This must really be one of the best fanfictions I ever read. I really love your writing, and I can't wait for the next chapter ^_^
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From Trollmia on September 01, 2006
Ohhh, how cute... they're kissing... I like kissing boys.... *squeals happily before darting off to work again...*
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From ANON - rasengan22 on August 31, 2006
Hey, you're getting as bad as me. How am I to know when to update if I don't get to read yours first? It's like I can't function normally without a chapter from you. *gives worried look* You better just be sick and not slacking off! Here, have some soup... or some... cookies?
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From ANON - MiniMew on August 26, 2006
*cackles* Oh God! 'My CRANES!' Yes, the story needed a little humour. You have some amazing writing skills. I could just SEE everything happening. And poor Shika. *shakes head* . And ~finally~ Itachi got some of the punishment he deserves.
My mother once worked with children that either had problems at home or had a psycic disease. (it was an institution in the country, where they could come a little away from everything, have fun ect.). I was sometimes with her, and there also was one or two of the boys that had ADHD (I think that's how it's spelled in english), so I know how most act. I was amazed at how well you described the boy's situation here and so on. Not many can do that, and go completely wrong. But you're just... amazing.
I noticed a few minor misspellings, but it was nothing too serious. Please write more soon. (keyword: SOON) *begs on knees*. Please? Until then, see ya.

~MiniMew
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From ANON - Pumpkin on August 25, 2006
Hmmmm. If Neji's going to visit Shikamaru soon.. Hope he don't try to kill that poor-Lee. xDD
Hahaha.. Ooh.. Just update soon. I want more Neji ! I want more kisses between Neji and Shika. -giggle-
Ooohh now I know! When Neji is in Shika's room, Lee (or somebody else.. Tenten maybe..)hears some moans and groans and goes into the room. He (or she)interrupt their passionate kiss, and when he saw it, he just blurts out to everyone that they were kissing! ..Okay.. These are just my own fantacies. UPDATE.
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From ANON - yaoigoddess on August 25, 2006
My goodness this fic is really really good! I enjoy how you two write the characters, and I'm really looking forward to the update^^!! (Sasuke and Naruto are soooo adorable *squees*)

oh and I really miss Neji.....cause I love how you wrote the relationship between him and Shika! Do we get to see him soon??? pleeeeeeeeeeease?*pleads with watering chibi eyes*

ah, and i also would like the email when you update, thanks a bunch!
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