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Reviews for The Top Floor

By : mirandler43

From ANON - ADHD kid on October 04, 2006
LOL!! OH GAWD I LUV THAT CHAPTER-despite Naruto's little incident. Especially the part with the 'two trees', ive never laughed so hard while reading a fic. AWESOME JOB!! Keep it up and PLEASE update soon!!!
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From ANON - Anon on October 04, 2006
Hey, why don't you just brag some more about how many reviews you got. That makes ME feel GREAT. Nah, it's alright, though I might start reviewing on ff.net, so there! *sticks out tongue* Anywho, so wow, ok, what's awesome is that I wasn't expecting that last part, and OMG, I'm gonna be so late for work cuz that chapter was longer than I expected. It took me an hour to read it. Anyway, the way it started was so... well, just slow and simple, I guess. I wasn't expecting it to move in a darker direction AT ALL. And I was even going to say, oh hey, they get it on just like that, with no bells and whistles, but now I'm glad that part wasn't overdrawn because it would have detracted from the last scene too much. And the part where Sasuke and Naruto were trying to explain their relationship was a freaking riot. I like when Sasuke's sort of dense... "like two trees." And then Shika adds his 2 cents. I died, I laughed. Ok, but now let's get into the final scene which was amazing for different reasons...

Ok, what was happening inside Naruto's head nearly gave me a panic attack itself, it was so done. I don't know why when I read about one I suddenly feel one coming, but damn, for people who've never had those kind of issues, you don't know how strong that little voice inside your head (that's totally independent of your own) can be! It's like you're fighting something that is always SO much stronger than you. Oh so my heart, I just cried for Naruto. And then I was afraid he might actually die with Sasuke just sitting there! I was yelling at Sasuke, like, duh, stop living in your dreamworld. And that Naruto was attempting to communicate to Sasuke... argh... and btw it was just perfect, I thought, that they were playing hangman (I also forgot to say I liked how Naruto was chucking wads of paper at Sasuke)... it sort of felt... symbolic? and dramatic? And then what Shika did for Sasuke, washing his hands and getting Naruto's blankets, aww I really love Shika in this.

And since I'm reviewing for 2, I'll keep going because *sob* I'm sure LG would say something about the "getting it on" part. ZOMG. Sasuke jerking off?? And Naruto catching him??? Shit that's hot as all hell. I just think this Sasuke is so fucking smooth I want to like put him in a cage and keep him for myself (but only after his 18th birthday). I thought that was better than them just being somewhere and going at it. You don't read enough masturbation stuff, really, and I think that's hot! Soo.. argh shit I'm gonna be sooo late! Oh and as for switching POV, I mean I feel you do it heavily with Kiba, and Kiba's complicated. He's ADHD, right, and fairly socially stunted, but occasionally we see glimpses of cognitive thoughts (seeking acceptance from Shika, Sasuke; having the sense to be annoyed with Lee); But I have to admit, your strongest POV is ALWAYS Sasuke, so that last scene where it was all mostly in his POV, it was very strong. Your Naruto POV is exceptional, as well. Shika's good when you do it, but I'm always way too biased and want all SasuNaru all the time. Anyway, that was awesome, and I hope you do update faster, sheesh. Liarpants! And as for me updating, PFFT. Maybe if I had 49 reviews I wouldn't wait 3 weeks... but I haven't started it, so I'm guessing I won't be updating too soon! Ok, off to be late to work and probably fired, woot! *HUGS* And your sister is right, you are far too slow!!!
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From ANON - Yuri-san on October 04, 2006
Oh, yay! an update!!! :D
The Naruto and Sasuke scenes, ok, those were just--OMFGawd--HOT!!! VERY hot! XD *gives you each a truckload of cookies* (*grins devilishly* Naruto got pretty pissed when Kiba interupted them XD)
Naruto had another attack, but fought for control! Sasuke is good for him.^___^ There's hope for Naruto yet!!! (I feel all squishy inside=^_^=)
That was a really good chapter :) I like it that your chapters are so long. Short ones are frustrating -but they do update faster sooo...*shrug* (Update faster!--but no pressure or anything...right, no pressure at all...>;D)

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From ANON - Steph on October 04, 2006
I almost cried...
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From ANON - MiniMew on October 04, 2006
You're welcome! :) 15 reviews behind? We can catch up to that!! XO
This chapter made me laugh (ahem, not the last part. I just sat there and whimpered in agony for Naruto.)! Kiba was sooo adorable! I just went 'Awwwwwwww'. The first part especially was great *whistles innocently*. I have to get a new keyboard beacause of that, I think. I drooled all over this one.

~MiniMew
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From ANON - Hellagoddess on October 04, 2006
Oh my god, i cannot even believe how happy i was when i saw that this had updated. This story is so wonderful and completely original...i think i've fallen in love with it. The most recent chapter was so intense i don't think i really blinked a whole lot...my eyes are aching like made and i think i might need some eyedrops.

Amazing...keep up the incredible work...really REALLY looking foward to how this is going to finish!

Hellagoddess
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From ANON - Kitsune_19 on October 04, 2006
good story, no, grate story lol. Poor Naruto but at least he's getting better. I think Sasuke's getting way better then Naruto really fast so you should make something happen to Sasuke to make his recovery take a step back so he's par with Naruto's recovery rate. Thats just an opinion you dont have to listen to it lol. Anyway like i said grate story and i hope you update soon. Bye bye.
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From ANON - hanyou-elf on October 04, 2006
oh gods. the emotions i went through with this chapter. have i mentioned that you two are absolutely amazing? you never cease to amaze me with the work you are able to come up with. amazing, simply amazing.

now, i thought i was going to die laughing when sasuke tried to compare them to trees. TREES? hilarious. you two are awesome and absolutely great.

and then, the little bit of sasuke and naruto at the end, horribly scary and great to read. i love this story. i really really love this story. and poor sasuke for the reminder of what had happened to put him on the top floor. greatness.

ohs... and the little bit of smut... i wish i could find a good drooling emoticon that would show up here... but just imagine it's there.

you two are amazing. it's awesome what you both can create, it's amazing what you can emote. i love the story, the plot, the action. you two are amazing. keep it up.

i didn't mind the wait, it was completely worth it. you both created an amazingly wonderful chapter. the wait is okay. keep it up! (did i mention i love your story?)
~hanyou-elf
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From ANON - seraphym on September 30, 2006
I really love all the psychoanalysis you've done of the characters. I think this story is really well written and dialogue flows really well. I look forward to every chapter!
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From ANON - Anon on September 29, 2006
So far my favorite part was the part where Sasuke wigged out. At first I thought you were gonna make him seem sane the entire story.. I like a crazy Sasuke. :3
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From ANON - Anon on September 29, 2006
LOOOOOOOL~~!!R#@% #Q -dies of laughter-- That was the PERFECT ending for this chapter!! LOLOLOFLHTRFGBRDFG. Oh my god, you're brilliant. The youth! OH THE YOUTH. I love how you automatically know who it is, yet you have to wait for the next chapter for it to be announced. :P
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From ANON - WolfyGrll56 on September 27, 2006
This stroy is awesome ^^ I cant wait to see if Shika can write Neji back ^^ plz update soon
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From ANON - crying on September 23, 2006
need update now!!!...please
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From ANON - Anon on September 23, 2006
Well *taps foot expectantly* LadyGiz and I were just chatting and we're both in dire need for an update women. So give us that sweet sweet mentally unstable SasuNaru that we adore so much. I miss them! And when are they gonna get laid? LOL. Kidding! uh sorta. hehe! Fine, I'll just go reread the last two chapters then.
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From ANON - Steph on September 21, 2006
...you asked for details. I'm mentally ill, too, so I can relate to the boys. I have cyclothymia and PTSD, which has manifested itself through voices and noises in my head, and OCD. I also run the (major) risk of suffering a psychotic breakdown. If you'd like to use any of my conditions at any point in the story, please e-mail me. I would laugh myself silly and adore you forever (and be your comment whore).
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