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From ANON - chelsea-chee on October 25, 2009
It's been a while since I've read an update on this one. And man, is it good! I'd really prefer that the story turn out Naruto/Sakura, if it's going to turn out into anything at all! I'll also have to keep an eye on this, since I don't have an account here or won't get an update about it.

Besides that, awesome job & will the next chapter be about her going to Naruto's house & delievering his papers? If so, will there be some smut for that as well? I will be most excited if there is, hehe! Anyways, update soon or when you can please! Thanxs! :) :p ;)
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From ANON - Anon on September 01, 2009
Part 8: Might want to break up the paragraphs a bit more.
Erm, you forgot the second �i� in �Jiraiya�.
Sasuke�s got some serious issues. ____ No, she�s not stupid. (Not totally, in this sense.) Just a little clueless. ____ Heh�Sasuke sure handles things weird. He completely ignores her and he expects her to stay? That�s what it seems like. His ego goes through the roof. So he�s startled when she thinks about leaving. Very weird.
Aaaaaand why is he being deliberately rude to her? ____ Hahaha, she�s just doing it herself cuz Sasuke�s making no sense. XD ____ Once again, I find myself confused. He�s telling her that he had sex with Naruto and she seems hurt by it. But wasn�t she the one who called out to Naruto �It�s just sex�? ____ Okay, so it sounds like she�s figuring out that Sasuke�s just screwing her around. ____ Awright, go for it, Sakura.
So is this the flashback to when Naruto first suggested Sakura?
I�m surprised that it was Naruto who suggested getting a girl. I mean, it makes sense, considering that he wants to get Sakura, but I don�t get why Sasuke was so annoyed about it. Maybe he just doesn�t like things to change.
Okay, now that doesn�t make sense at all. He wanted anyone except Sakura, but he said he didn�t want anyone else�. Does that make sense? ____ Oh wait a minute! It�s just Naruto that Sasuke wants! He isn�t really interested in girls! � Is he? He seemed pretty interested when he was staring at them in the first chapter. Okay, now I�m confused again.
You�re not the only one who�s bewildered, Sakura. Sasuke doesn�t seem to make much sense one way or another.
Very slowly, Sasuke�s weird behavior is becoming more and more clear. But it�s happening v~e~r~y s~l~o~w~l~y. I�m guessing that he figured out that by hurting someone close to Naruto, Naruto would want to own him. But he doesn�t seem to get that it�s only pushing Naruto further away. There�s momentary sex, but once that was done, Naruto took off. Then again, why did Sasuke set things up so that Naruto would see him seducing Sakura? That just puts him, Sasuke, in a bad light and would definitely start to drive Naruto away. I mean, what�s he trying to do?? ____ So now we got a love triangle going: Naruto�s in love with Sakura, Sakura�s bewitched by Sasuke, and Sasuke�s obsessed with Naruto. And yet they�re all acting in reverse: Sakura�s doing something for Naruto, Naruto�s fucking Sasuke, and Sasuke�s seducing Sakura. They just need to balance and go both ways. ____ At least some honesty is coming out. Sasuke may still be keeping something from her when he says �I have nothing against you being here,� but that says a lot, too. I�m sure that Sakura can guess that Sasuke would prefer it if she weren�t there, but she�s going to try to get him to not mind her at least.

Well, things are a bit clearer than they have been, though it�s still hard to follow. But the story�s an entertaining read. I hope this gets updated and not abandoned because it seems too good to be abandoned. It has so much potential.
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From ANON - Anon on September 01, 2009
Part 7: This is so going to break Naruto�s heart if he hears about why Ino�s doing this. ____ It�s a little hard to tell if they made it all the way to intercourse or not.
Hmm, so things might get better if they talk. ____ Aww, Naruto�s sweet. ♥
Heh�he�s never been in the library, has he. ____ O.O Go get him, Naruto! XD (*crazy yaoi fangirling*)
Oh. At first I thought maybe Ino would go off eating instead. ____ Aww. Man, this is sad. Touching, but sad. ;_;
Heh�that�s cute, the platonic relationship between Ayame and Naruto. And why is Sasuke trying so hard to hurt Naruto? ____ Boy, it is hard to picture Ayame doing that. And what is with Sasuke�s cruelty? ____ I�m surprised Ayame still wants to serve customers right now. Sasuke kind of humiliated her. Wouldn�t she want to, you know, go home early or something? I mean, I�d feel pretty bad if I were in her position. ____ I�m still not sure why Sasuke wants to push Naruto�s buttons like that. It doesn�t make any sense to me. ____ I like where this is going so far. ____ I wonder what that �something� that Naruto felt was. ____ �Naruto was trying to be gentle but Sasuke kept saying things which only made the anger grow and the more Sasuke spoke the more Naruto wanted him to shut up.� So why doesn�t Naruto tie him up and gag him? He�d deserve it. ____ Heh�now Sasuke�s worried. >D ____ I don�t get why Sasuke would look sorry. The progression of the scene, while interesting, doesn�t make much sense to me. ____ If it weren�t for so much angst, this scene would be absolutely droolworthy. Then again, that�s probably just me. I do hope there are scenes like this in the future where sex isn�t initiated by hurting someone emotionally, though. ____ I wonder if Sasuke was still a virgin in that way before Naruto took him. ____ Yup. He just gave Naruto his virgin ass. ____ It seems like Sasuke wants a place in everybody�s life. ____ Heheh�that�s what he gets for hurting his friend. His �friend�. Yeah right. He would be more of a friend if Sasuke would let him. Sasuke doesn�t have any friends. Well, maybe Sasuke will learn from this experience.

Hey, don�t sound freaked out about no het and only yaoi. I don�t mind the yaoi at all. In fact, I want more of it.
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From ANON - Anon on August 31, 2009
Part 6: Uh-oh. I hope Ino doesn�t go off food or something. ____ I like this bit about the differences between Ino and Sakura. ____ I love how Sakura kind of wants to be a hero.
�And with this little flower to help him, everything was going to go exactly as he wanted.� Don�t count your chickens, Sasuke. ____ Sasuke getting turned on when he�s irritated. Nice. =)
Oh boy, this should be good. ____ Yup, knew it�d be good. ^^ Here comes a big conflict.
Aha, and here comes the Naruto/Ino stuff. This just keeps getting better and better.
Heh�lost in communication. Ino should really just try honesty. ^^ ____ Why is Sasuke trying to be so mean to Naruto? I mean � why? ____ �I know that uniform, I�m sure your school will be delighted to know one of their students was hanging out with a prostitute...� I wonder to which student he was calling the prostitute. ____ Ah, so that�s her plan. She can be pretty smart. And yet, at the same time, so dumb.
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From ANON - Anon on August 31, 2009
I wouldn�t mind seeing Ino with Naruto for a short time. So long as it wasn�t lasting.

Part 5: Heh�how often does Ino do this kind of thing, I wonder? =) ____ I hope Naruto gains some popularity eventually.
Heh�love seeing him walk around the house in the nude. If it�s his house, it doesn�t really matter, of course, except to the readers who love to watch. ^^ ____ I�ve never pictured Itachi as a violinist before. ____ Awww, that�s sad. �_� ____ Yeesh, he�s mean. Hopefully he�ll change over the course of the story.
Cute. Research time.
Ah, so that�s why Sasuke didn�t pick Ino. She can�t keep her mouth shut. That makes sense. ^^ ____ �Sasuke started to feel his irritation rise, and with it the need to make someone cry.� That�s a cool line. ____ Ooh, ouch. Man, that�s mean. ____ MEAN! I mean, God, that�s horrible! Poor Ino. ;_;
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From ANON - Anon on August 31, 2009
Part 4: Both those descriptions sound very accurate, Sakura. Except neither involved alcohol or drugs. Everything was all hormone- and pheromone-induced. ____ I knew she�d feel weird about it later. I wonder if she still plans to go through with the Next Time. ____ Yup, they�ve got her hooked. They set it up right and picked the right girl, and now she�s theirs. Until complications arise, of course.
Heh�love the tension between Sasuke and Neji. ____ Sounds to me like Neji�s torn between addiction and potential addiction. If Sasuke were a drug, he�d be an extremely potent one. Just being around people � ____ Ooh, Neji�s scared of Lee�s wrath. I wonder what Lee would do if Neji upset him. ____ Sasuke�s just looking for a conquest in Neji, right? It seems to me like he wants to get Neji hooked on him mostly for the power rather than attraction. ____ (*shiver*) That was intense. Love seeing Sasuke seduce Neji. ____ Heh�knew he just wanted a conquest.
You can tell she�s already addicted. She�s thinking about deleting it alright, and it�s always possible she will. But it will hurt if she actually does it. It�s not easy breaking a habit or addiction. Sometimes you really have to force yourself to do it.
Heh�sounds like Sasuke�s got some kind of addiction to Naruto. In the previous chapter, Sasuke had been thinking about not involving Naruto the Next Time, but I wonder � he begged Naruto for weeks to get the guy to suck him off, after all. ____ Heh�sounds like Naruto had a case of LAFS (Love/Lust At First Sight). It�s kind of romantic how it just took one look and he was lost. ____ Lol, Naruto �taking it backwards.� Sex before love and all that. But with Naruto, many things are possible. ____ Wow. I never thought I�d actually read a scene where Lee was active. There goes another piece of my brain. ____ I normally don�t approve of the guys calling each other �-chan� in fanfics, but I�m not bothered by it this time for some reason. ____ I love the way you describe Neji�s movements in sex. He is very pretty. ____ Heh�Naruto is good. And I can see why Lee would be pissed if he saw what was going on. In a way it seems more like Neji�s paying more attention to Naruto than to Lee. ____ I�m normally not fond of seeing Neji lose his grip on control, but I don�t mind this. ____ This scene is actually turning out to be a lot more appealing than I would�ve expected. ____ Aww. ♥ Love the tenderness afterwards.
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From ANON - Anon on August 31, 2009
Forgot to mention this in the previous review: I�m wondering if Sasuke and Naruto are virgins. When it comes to girls, I mean. Sakura�s most definitely never been with a guy before, of that I�m sure. But the way Naruto and Sasuke were talking at the end of the last chapter, it indicates that maybe Naruto�s been with a girl and Sasuke hasn�t. Or maybe they both have and Naruto�s just more appreciative of girls than Sasuke is. Which would be pretty in-character, if you ask me. =)

And now for this chapter�.

How hard do you think you have to convince a girl to have sex with two gorgeous not untalented guys? Honestly, that would depend on the girl too. And maybe on how subtle the guys are about it. Some girls would never say yes, no matter how enticing the guy is.

Okay, now back to the story.

Part 3: Sounds like those guys got the location-location-location. (Though Sakura doesn�t think so yet.) ____ Okay, I was hoping the seduction could be dragged out a little more, but it�s not bad as it is. It�s not rushed. ____ Man, they really thought this out. They�ve got her all flustered. And in strong unexpected heat, it is kind of hard to think clearly. Though I usually get a headache. ____ Lol, this is a good line: �She�d never really understood why Ino had been so boy crazy until now. This feeling was addictive.� ^^ ____ She doesn�t seem to have a clue that they�re setting her up, does she. And I wonder how far these guys have planned this out. ____ Oh MAN, that�s bold. I�m surprised at how much Sakura�s not struggling. ____ Heh�she�s totally drugged off them. ____ Love the way Sasuke�s repeating her name like that. (*shivers*) ____ Haha! Good one, Naruto, not letting Sasuke win so easily. He would know, too. Sasuke likes having power over people. ____ Love it how Sasuke just lost control so easily when Naruto interfered. ♥ ____ Boy, when Sakura�s thinking clearly later, and if she gets over this scene (she�s probably going to feel somewhat ashamed of herself, I�m sure), she might feel insulted at what Sasuke�s saying and the way he�s looking at her. Like he doesn�t think much of her. And that�s not going to make her feel very good about herself. ____ I can understand why Sakura�s blushing. He�s looking at her almost critically. That would make a lot of people feel self-conscious even in a normal situation. ____ Ahhhh, interesting. I like the difference in motivation between Naruto and Sasuke. I like how Naruto wants to take it to a more romantic level while Sasuke just wants sex. And it�s creepy how cold Naruto is about Sasuke. It�s kind of cool how Sasuke doesn�t realize just how manipulative Naruto can be. =D ____ This is another cool paragraph: �In the instant before she begged, while she let the last of her shyness burn in her eyes for him to gloat over, Sakura decided that if she could, this would not be the last time she experienced this kind of pleasure. With them or without she wanted to feel this burning again.� It came up at the perfect moment. ____ Whoa, whoa, hold on: �It�d taken weeks of humiliating begging before Naruto would agree to try again.� DUDE, I WISH I COULD�VE SEEN THAT! I would�ve loved to see how Sasuke begged Naruto! =DDD ♥♥ ____ Nice bit about Sasuke �flipping his fringe�. That sort of thing has the fangirls just mobbing at the door. ♥ ____ Love the differences in what Sakura feels with Naruto and with Sasuke. It�s interesting how she can adapt from the sweetness of one to the ruthless demands of another. ____ Oh, Sasuke � there�s so much you don�t know. ^^ ____ Heh�Sasuke�s feeling resentful of Naruto. He�s even considering ditching Naruto for the girl. I wonder if he�d been playing with that idea for a while, or if he�s just thinking that now because he�s feeling put out. He seems kind of sulky when he doesn�t get his way. It�s cute. ____ Heh�Sasuke�s totally jealous. I hope this fic comes to an end when they�re all happy together.

Man, great ending to the chapter! =D Hell, that was a great chapter! I hope there�s more like it to come!
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From ANON - Anon on August 28, 2009
Part 2: Erm �extra curicular� should be �extracurricular� (you�re missing an �r� in �curricular�, that�s the main thing). ____ Heh�Sasuke�s up to something, isn�t he. ^^ ____ Also, it�s �Uzumaki�. ____ I�m amazed at how much this teacher is allowing Sasuke to get to him. I mean, how much power does Sasuke have besides being a genius? � Hold on�I think I just answered my own question. If he�s considered a genius, he could scheme something up to make things hard for somebody if he wanted to. Then again, it could be that this teacher�s just a wuss. ____ Oh yeah, this guy�s a total asshole if he wants to get Naruto expelled. Hopefully that won�t happen, though. ____ I take it this teacher doesn�t approve of sports, since it says that Naruto�s pretty good. But I�m confused: the teacher seems to see Naruto as a flaw, but Naruto can easily make the school sports team pretty popular. That would raise the school�s reputation a bit, wouldn�t it? And yet the teacher�s complaining. ____ Man, this guy is totally kissing Sasuke�s ass. ____ The teacher was more right than he knew: Sasuke is a genius. And he probably went to this particular teacher because the guy could easily be intimidated and manipulated.
Cool. I like Tsunade�s background. ____ Lol, I love how Tsunade�s suspicious because it�s a genius requesting help. Maybe that�s where Naruto can come in, since apparently he needs help.
Hang on a minute� I thought Sasuke said that he thought Sakura would do quite nicely. Is he having second thoughts? ____ I like the way they speak to each other. ____ Lol, Sasuke likes boobs. ^^ ____ OhoHO! Has Naruto been with girls before, then? He sounds pretty macho. ____ I�m guessing condom-types, right?
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From ANON - Anon on August 28, 2009
(I review as I read.)

Part 1: Ohoho � gets right into it. Very hot beginning. I like. ♥_♥ ____ Nice description of what he looks for when he looks at girls. ____ Man � talk about torture. So simple, yet so brilliant. ____ Watching the way Sasuke�s teasing Naruto � that word �tantalizing� comes to mind. ____ Love Sasuke�s amusement of the public reaction. ____ Kiba and Shino, blech. No like. D: ____ Lee neither. ____ Okay, okay, back up: �Lee may not have been much to look at, but he had a body that made Neji melt and a cock that kept him crawling back for more.� XDDDD That made it worth it. If it hadn�t been written right, it would�ve broken my brain, but you did a good job with phrasing it. ^^ ____ Love Sasuke�s narcissism. So far it�s not overblown. ____ This Lee�s-skill-vs.-Sasuke�s-good-looks thing reminds me of the issue in the manga where it was Lee�s hard work vs. Sasuke�s genetic gift. ____ I�m loving Sasuke�s little ambitious fantasies. ____ Lol, Naruto correcting Neji�s insult to Sasuke. ____ I wonder if Sasuke would like Neji to actively join them or if he�d prefer just torturing him. Probably wants Neji to approach them and make an offer so that he, Sasuke, can refuse. Man, what a tease. ____ (*snicker*) Indeed, Neji does go �crawling back to Lee.� ^^ ____ Hehehehe, God, this is so enticing! =D (I�m also wondering how far Naruto and Sasuke have taken it and who tops. We haven�t heard much from Naruto so we can�t say, but at the moment, Sasuke seems more likely, considering that ego of his.)
I hope there�s no yuri coming. ____ Lol, Ino on the lookout for Sasuke. That�d be funny if he heads towards the school, Ino goes, �Sasuke-kun! I�m Ino Yamana�� and Sasuke goes right past her to talk to Sakura. XD ____ Oooh, this is a good one: �She of course would never consent to date someone as conceited as Sasuke Uchiha, but the idea that he would ask was.....enticing.� Love Sakura as the goodie-goodie. ^^ ____ Mm�you said �coverted�; actually, you mean �coveted�.

�Ah such small beginnings� indeed! But so worth it! =DD
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From ANON - kazuko on April 15, 2009
i have only liked very few threesome fics but this one makes the list! although i rather like the mini triangle that is in this one. i am very happy that sasuke seems closer to naruto and actually likes him cause i believe it's more cannon. i wonder what happened to naruto in the past, something had to happen judging from his reaction to what happened with ino. and sasuke...he's a bastard. a sadistic bastard but for some reason we all seem to love him... as long as he loves naruto i'm good. he at least has good taste. i feel a bit sorry for sakura getting caught up in all of that and also very very jealous for the same reason...-_- please please update soon! i NEED to see how this works out!!
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From ANON - venia on November 21, 2008
This story is amazing, period. No matter how many times I read it (chapter 8, in particular) I think it's a masterpice in threesome fics. You are an awesome writer and I'm so sad of not getting any signs of life from you...
Please, can you let me know if you are planning to update or if you have given up on it? (at least end my agony and suffering, please T.T I've tried so many times to contact you without a result) And in case of bad news -since you have my e-mail- could you be so kind as o tell me how you had in mind to finish it? I don't need much, even a line is good as long as I can learn the ending. Being left at half fic is horrible, when the fic is so beautiful.
Thank you very much in advance. I really hope you update someday.
~venia
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From venia on September 11, 2008
Awwww damn, I've come back after so long and you still haven't updated ;__; This was, no, still IS my favourite AU threesome, so please, please, give us a sign that you're going to continue it!! I wholeheartedly adore it, you can't stop it now...

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From ANON - Mello-MattLiveOn4ever on June 26, 2008
Please please please update this story. This is probably one of the best FF's on here other than NaruSakuSasu one shots everywhere. But they're no where near yours. So please please please update this. You havent updateed this since last year and that kinda scares me. Please update

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From animelove1787 on February 08, 2008
uuuuum, I don't usually review here but your story is amazing. Honestly I could ramble on and on about what makes it good, but I'm sure you've heard it before ^^ Looking forward to seeing how this pans out!
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From ANON - Anon on January 06, 2008
This story is so subverse - so interesting. It gets at their personalities in such interesting ways. I can't wait to see what happens and I have no idea what will. Thought it was a good chapter despite your worries about it.
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