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By : Shakirah

From ANON - sadistickiss on July 15, 2006
*rubs eyes* Ah, you've got me weeping all over the place. You're amazing, you know? To fit all those morals and reasons into a story. This is such a beautiful story, please update soon =)
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From ANON - mathilde on June 17, 2006
yo shakster! your story is awesome! though it's sad too...i can't wait to see what happens next but i sure hope Sasuke won't die. and the flashbacksaren't confusing and wow can't wait for the next chapter
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From ANON - ky0kichi on June 09, 2006
Wow..

This story is..breathtaking.. I can't describe it. All the emotions and suspense..It was driving me insane..! In a good way of course.. I was like "Egad, Sasuke you're so mean..!" But then it woudl change suddenly..And make you go "awwww"..

The whole "Did you eat?" Thing..Was just too cute. Lol. :)

And YES~ Finally!! I'm so happy he's gonna get the procedure..! Yooosh! Great job..~! I can't wait for another chapter. It'll definately be the highlight of my day.
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From ANON - fiberchick7 on June 06, 2006
I guess maybe I was wrong. Will Sasuke survive? Obviously, I'll just have to wait and see.

There are still a few word problems, as in using the wrong one. I could point them out, if you want, but I doubt you do.

Anyway, what I really love about the way you write is how well I can feel the emotions when reading. The pain, sadness, denial, joy, desperation, guilt, and most especially how Naruto loves Sasuke. (And deep down how Sasuke loves him back.) It's just perfect.
Great job! Can't wait to read the rest.
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From ANON - Cassie on June 04, 2006
OMG! So good!! This chapter made me really happy. It's weird though cuz it was sad...but It could have made me happier if Sasuke had finally said 'I love you' to Naruto! I hope he will soon, it always makes me have warm fuzzies in my tummy when he says 'I love you' to Naruto in a fic! Can't wait till then!!

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From ANON - fujinakaheero on June 04, 2006
very, very good chapter. I must say that I was probably almost in tears while reading it.
I will just say this since there is nothing else to say, keep up the good work.
I have to say, you're a very good writer.
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From ANON - Bookworm51485 on June 03, 2006
I'm gonna be shorter than usual because my brain is just not up to coming up with a long good review for you this time around. But I love this chapter and I am SOOOOOOOOO happy that Sasuke decided to have to surgery. I have to say I really felt for Neji in this chapter, it seems like he really loves Naruto and even though he's sort of moved on with Tenten he hasn't completely gotten over him. I hope he does, Neji's one of my favorite characters in the series and I like to see him happy. I can't wait to see the rest of the chaptes and the results of the surgery. And I had one question before I end this review, (and you might have already mentioned but I just can't remember at the moment) are you planning to write a sequel to this story or are these 10 chapters going to be it? And actually I have one more, are you planning/writing any stories that you're going to post eventually? I definitely want to see more of your writing, I love it and I'm finding it harder and harder to find author's that I truly love. That's all, I think I'm going to sleep now so good night.
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From ANON - DevilLived on June 03, 2006
That was a greta chapter, you really wrote it well. The scene with Naruto and Sasuke after the Hospital Nursary scene had me on the edge of my seat. I couldn't wait to see how you got Naruto to convince Sasuke, and I sure wasn't disappointed!! I loved how you didn't really make Sasuke say it, but it was still clear that he agreed at the same time. :D It was so...so.... (fangirl squeal) ...Yeah. It was like that.

I can't wait till the next update, and I also can't believe that this story is almost done! I won't ask if there's gonna be a sequel until the end because that usually gives you a clue.

Until the next chapter, have a nice day!
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From ANON - DevilLived on May 27, 2006
This chapter was really well written, you did a very good job!

I liked the beginning with Sasuke's thoughts about the procedure and Naruto. It was sad that he never visited his family's graves or anything.

I liked the scene with Sasuke and Kakashi-you always make Kakashi sound so cool! XD He has some very smart lines, I think.

But my fav line so far has to be this one:

"The glass was always half full with Naruto."

I thought that was really, realllly cool!! :D:D It's such a smart way to describe someone like Naruto and I think that you're the first one that's done it like that.

Anyways, I can't wait until the next chapter. I kinda get what the Ino and Choji part had to do with Sasuke and Naruto but maybe I still have to look underneath the underneath :D.

Update soon, alright?
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From ANON - Bookworm51485 on May 27, 2006
I have to say you're a better person than me, I wouldn't have dignified that idiotic accusation with a response. And if I did respond it wouldn't have been nearly as polite as what you wrote. Oh well. On to the chapter, I loved it as usual. All your chapters are so long, it takes me awhile to read them because their so long I'm interupted really often in the middle. But unlike other stories where I've been interupted, I don't lose the groove of the story. You suck me into the story so well, I just love it. I have to say before this chapter I was thinking Naruto was a better person putting up with Sasuke, but after this one I'd say they're about even. Naruto can act really stupid at times. Though I have to say on him it's a bit cute. I have to say I'm wondering about Neji though, if he's going to talk to Sasuke and if he's going to help convince him to have the surgery. I still have no clue what's going to happen and I hate that a bit. I'm one of those people who always wants to know what's going on and I just can't figure out you're story. But I can't wait until your next update, especially since it's in the same day and I want to see Sasuke's reaction to either a visit from Neji or Naruto's two hour absence after a visit from Neji. On to more technical matters, I noticed a few spelling errors in the chapter. And because I'm a bit annoying, I'm going to correct two of the ones I noticed first:

"He�d be diluting himself if he didn�t admit he wasn�t as cool and collected about death as he pretended to be." should be deluding not diluting.
"The child that clang to life desperately and pathetically because he was horrified and weak." should be clung not clang.

Before I finish this review I wanted to ask one question, are you planning or contemplating a sequel or at the end of this will this be the end? Anyways that's all, I love your chapters, I love your story, and I can't wait until your next update.
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From ANON - hypnotic on May 25, 2006
i really do like this chapter, it was touching the part when naruto helped sasuke to the bathroom, the ending was wonderful and i can't wait to read more
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From ANON - hypnotic on May 25, 2006
i really do like this chapter, it was touching the part when naruto helped sasuke to the bathroom, the ending was wonderful and i can't wait to read more
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From ANON - Bookworm51485 on May 23, 2006
Wow, Kaguya's got a lot of nerve to accuse you of copying based on such stupidness. I've read a lot of stories and your story isn't like any other I've read, though there are scenes that are similar to things I've seen in other stories. That's the thing, of all the stories I've read a lot of them have elements that are similar to those in other stories, it happens. Just ignore the moron who's stupid enough to accuse you of plagiarism based off of a couple of scenes that are somewhat similar to others stories she may have read.
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From ANON - Bookworm51485 on May 23, 2006
I LOVE YOUR STORY SO MUCH!!!! Every chapter just gets better and better. And they're so long, which is always nice. I have to say about your story, it's not predictable. A lot of similar stories are leading towards a predictable conclusion so you spend the whole story just waiting for the obvious conclusion. I think most of us reading the story know what we hope will happen but none of us have any clue as to what will actually happen. And that's something that makes the story even better, a lot of the time predictability can ruin a story. Though of course, I'm hoping you'll go for the happy ending because Sasuke dying is so sad. Though the story is pretty sad, despite not knowing what's going to happen. Like the scene at the end with the bedpan. I'm glad you added that in, it's like Naruto saw a bit of the reality of the situation and how.....dependent.......not in control Sasuke was in the hospital. And why he's afraid of what might come after if he had the surgery. AHHHH!!!!! It's just so good, I can't say enough things about your story. And now I'm going to go because I have to vote for Taylor so McBanshee doesn't win AI.
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From ANON - DevilLived on May 23, 2006
(oh, my God. I wrote a whole long review and I go to post it and it "cannot find the server" AGH!!)

That was a very emotional chapter, but you strung it together nicely. Be proud, be very proud. :D

Trying to remember what I wrote before.... I like how you made Naruto and Sasuke's relationship not all that normal, almost awkward. It's realistic because they really are rivals and Sasuke really is an ass some times. If you get what I'm trying to say...

It looks like Naruto has made some progress with Sasuke... But he better pick up the pace! He only has one day left, right?! He IS going to convince the Uchiha.... I hope...

Part with the bedpan was precious. I enjoyed that.

Anyways, sorry if this review is a bit choppy :D. Just update soon, alright?
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