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By : Redwitch05
  • From ANON - Sas-uke on August 28, 2006
    Not certain what to say about this. Nor am I intending to 'flame'. To the point, as I continue reading this, this story is driving further and further away from plot and focussing on way too huge a cast of characters. Specifically those of your own creation. You might want to consider cutting the load, because it's just exceedingly overwhelming. And even as the story claims to be a yaoi-ish NaruSasuNaru, it appears to have little or nothing to do with them. I will end off here. Good luck with your future writings.
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  • From ANON - Ruby Lips(not signed in) on August 28, 2006
    Don't be so hard on yourself. I liked this chapter, it fit nicely with the story and progressed it in a satisfactory way, and was also nicely detailed. Simply by allowing readers to visualize rather than over explaining adds the feeling you believe was lacking. Relax. Stop being so self-judgemental and appreciate your work for the quality stuff that is is.

    ^^

    Much love from your teme

    Ruby Lips
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  • From ANON - Inus_Kagome_Forever on August 18, 2006
    You really made me hope there for a moment that you had added another chapter ::sniff:: Please update soon!

    Inus_Kagome_Forever
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  • From ANON - RoguefanAM on August 03, 2006
    Wonderful fic! Both chapter's were done extremely well. It had nice imagery, diolouge, and the characteraztion was incredible. All in all, a great fic. Did Saki die? It sure looked that way, but...perhaps you'll keep her around. I hope she's not dead, I was actually starting to like her and usually I detest OC's. *frowns*

    Anyway, update soon I hope!

    P.S. More NaruSasu moments, please! ^_^
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  • From ANON - Jennifer on July 29, 2006
    Hey, sorry it took me so long to comment, but I just got back from vacatation, and haven't had a chance to read the newest chapter. I still love this story, and cannot wait to see what's going to happen. I don't know if you're a new fanfiction writer, but as someone that writes fiction too(I'm on LPfiction and fanfiction.net)just take your time, always proofread, and do your best to put out your best work.

    Anyway, please email me when you get the next chapter out!
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  • From ANON - kyuubigirl on July 24, 2006
    Wowz. How do you keep up with this? I like the kind of time uh wuddaya call it, rift/changeness happening. It's so great at building up suspense. And I don't know why you dislike this chapter. You accomplished lots of things. But SERIOUSLY, how's a girl supposed to finish the damn chapter when Sasuke's talking about his winger dinger? Honestly, I laughed for like five minutes, which sucked because before that I laughed for like 20 when all he would say was Hnn. And what Naruto was saying to goad him was HYSTERICAL. That could be the funniest thing I've ever read.

    And then suddenly I wanted to write something that had to do with their kids. That was so cute! Their kids running around and then maybe dating each other? I so want to write something for that. But then I guess the way I always like things to happen, that would sort of be incest cuz somehow they'd be NaruSasu's kids. ANYWAY, so that was a riot, and also when he said Mr. Toilet. I love a funny Sasuke!

    But poor Naruto! Then I was afraid Sasuke was making out with a dead body because HELLO, why was that whip thing in the bathroom? WHAT THE HELL. Mind exploding. Blind Sasuke, eh? Another interesting idea... you've got all kinds of plot bunnies hiding up in this chapter. Dammit, what did he give consent to? GYAH! too intense. hnn.
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  • From ANON - Inus_Kagome_Forever on July 21, 2006
    Hmm, odd, I had a lot more along with that review but it seems to have gotten erased? idk Anyway, just to make sure you understand what I was trying to say in the last one, it was mostly rambling anyway, heheh, get carried away, update soon!

    Inus_Kagome_Forever
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  • From ANON - Inus_Kagome_Forever on July 21, 2006
    WOW! I was expecting a cute little Naru/Sasu, a romatic story, touching... other stuff. More cute and fluff... BUT THIS WAS AWSOME! SOOOOO SOOOOO SOOOOO MUCH BETTER! Wow, this complex story is just... just what I've been looking for! I thought it would be mostly/only about Naruto and Sasuke, but this! And the characters! They're great!!!!! Although I thought it was odd that Sakura didn't punch Naruto when he kissed her?! Does she warm up to him in the later episdoes
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  • From ANON - Kayo on July 21, 2006
    I can't wait for the next chapter, but take your time so it rocks! Man, I liked Saki, although I suppose she /had/ to be defeated so the story could continue, but I hope she didn't die. I'm curious now. How did Naruto and Sasuke managed not to be killed/captured when they were both unconscious. Wondering who Lulu and Stilmaya(?) are, and who the whip with glass shards belong to...the identical whip that hurt Naruto. *confused here* Hint hint. But I can't wait for another chapter. I like how the story is progressing and all the details. Nice expression of emotion too. XD Can't wait for an update!

    Kayo
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  • From ANON - sadistickiss on July 21, 2006
    Kya~! Thanks for the update email (how thoughtful)! It was an interesting chapter and totally did not suck - how could you even THINK that? Sasuke's flashback thoughts in the shower really got to me *pain pain*, can't wait to find out the meaning behind the argument! Thanks for the update, it was a fabulous read =3
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  • From ANON - Pundit on July 20, 2006
    You need to pick a tense: past or present. Stop switching between the two. The same thing applies to the perspective. Either use second or third person pov, not both. You swithch from "Naruto does this" to "You do that" to "Naruto did this" etc. It's distracting and inconsistent. Other than that, looks promising. These are just little things that you need to work on. Good job.
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  • From ANON - DevilLived on July 20, 2006
    YES! You updated!

    I really liked this chapter, even if you don't (though I know how that feels) and I'm glad that you're not going to give up on this any time soon, because it is a really great story and you write well.

    Things are getting messy. What's Itachi's gang doing here?????

    Poor Sasuke woke up naked. How embarassing.

    Update soon, okay?
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  • From ANON - sadistickiss on July 15, 2006
    Kya~ Sounds interesting ^^ Please update soon!
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  • From ANON - Sakura-Laurel on July 14, 2006
    Nope, you're not the only one that's lost! I'm wondering what the hell's next! Could you please email me when this is updated, because this site, unfortunately, doesn't have an alert system like ff does. My email's sakura underscore laurel 6 6 6 at yahoo dot com. Thanks a bunch! Ja!
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  • From ANON - rogue on July 13, 2006
    why havnt you updated. i really love this story. i want to know what happened to sasuke and naruto. so sad...and yet angst is so good. you are doing so well with this fan fic please dont put it on hiatus or just leave us stranded like this. i want to know whats going to happen to naruto and sasuke. so keep up the good work.
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