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Reviews for Life's Little Changes

By : ladywolfTerri
  • From ANON - evol on June 23, 2006
    NOOOOOOOOOOO! my poor naruto! dont hurt him sasuke, u evil bastard! I KEEL U!!!!
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  • From ANON - fyredevyl on June 23, 2006
    I seriously dislike aff sometimes. Cutting off my review when I spent to long going over it.

    To finish what I was saying. I try to give reviews that actually critique the author's writing style. Reviews like: "OMGOMG, I LOVE IT! UPDATE SOON!" don't help that much. They make you feel good, but don't help you improve on your writing.

    I hope to read more from you in the future. ^_^
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  • From ANON - fyredevyl on June 23, 2006
    Good story. Your interactions between characters are fun and entertaining, which is probably what holds my interest the most.

    However, I do have one major issue. This story lacks transitions between scenes, making the flow of your story very sloppy and bringing down the quality of what I believe is one of the better fanfics on aff. Sometimes you give us an extra line between scenes, but most times I've noticed you give us nothing. And while your average aff reader can certainly catch on that you've shifted scenes, it shows a lack of polishing on your part. One such scene I'm talking about is in chapter 5 when Naruto and Sasuke are having breakfast and talking about breaking in new clothes. Right after Sasuke says, "They'll break in." you start the next sentence with 'Naruto spotted Shikamaru as they pulled into the parking lot...' At the very beginning of this sentence I thought Naruto was seeing Shikamaru through the kitchen window of Sasuke's house. Just by adding a sentence along the lines of 'they washed the dishes when they were finished with breakfast and headed for school' can go a long way. That or do like others and put a line there to signal a shift in scenes.

    Also, dialogue tags are a must. Of course, they don't have to be at the end of every piece of dialogue, but I don't recall any being in this story. You do very well in making it pretty clear who's saying what most of the time, but I would suggest adding in some tags.

    Of course, everything I'm saying is a suggestion. It's your story afterall, and you can do what you want with it. I'll certainly keep reading. And please don't be offended by anything I've said. It's not my intention to flame you or make you feel like you are a horrible writer; I'm merely trying to give you a review that has more substance than: "OMGOMG, I
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  • From ANON - Cassie on June 23, 2006
    got cut off again... D: I just had forgotten to comment on how Shikamaru needs to help Sasuke and Naruto, Naruto especially, realize their feelings...cuz obviously he is seeing them sooner then they are, and they need to fix things soon before more hearts are broken, more shells are built back up, and all around more problems!!!
    Till next update!

    ...I really comment too much...--_--
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  • From ANON - Cassie on June 23, 2006
    P.S.....I FRIGGEN LOVE!! THIS STORY I lack the broad vocabulary to describe my liking for/of this story better >
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  • From ANON - Cassie on June 23, 2006
    WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!! Poor Sasuke! I think he is realizing that he does like Naruto, but then Naruto isn't realizing that he likes him too...:( Little Sasuke's heart was broken by Naruto and neither of them know it!! Stupid Temari and Kiba and Neji!!...and Gaara ish a creepy perv >< Please oh Please update soon! I hope Naruto can make Sasuke's pain go away ^_^
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  • From ANON - Rei on June 23, 2006
    AWWW DAMNITT!
    your evil!
    but in a good way...I hope...
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  • From ANON - xBunni on June 23, 2006
    zomgzomgzomgzomgzomg!! An update!!! YATTA~!!! ^^ *glomps terri-san* Uwaaaaa~!! You have no idea how long I've been waiting for an update, mou~ OO *sobs* Demo, I'm definitely glad you've updated now!! I just can't get enough of this fic!! Especially the sadistic gaara-ness~ Gotta love gaara's sadistical actions/advances/molestation to naru-chan~ ^^ Ja!! I hope to read more soon!! Gambatte ne~ Terri-san~ ^^
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  • From ANON - kitten53 on June 23, 2006
    Poor Naruto!
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  • From ANON - Tae on June 22, 2006
    When will you make more chapters! this is my favorite so far other than mile high club ^^" still make more chapters!
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  • From ANON - ded (too lazy to log in) on June 20, 2006
    Kawaiii! More i need more! -flips of Neji- I always disliked him, trying to take Naru-chan from Sasu-chan. Freaky eyed bastard! Viva La Sasunaru! -holds up 'Sasunaru 4eva' flag- XDD I can't wait for more, this is really cute, i love how you write my boys :D (Yes they belong to meeeeeee!) XD
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  • From ANON - YaoiOtaku on June 19, 2006
    agreed, agreed, hehe i liked Chapter 5 better too.
    *squeal* it was so adorable how Naruto sauntered out in a g-string
    and Sasuke bought it too!
    ah.......SasuNaru love =D
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  • From ANON - innerchild on June 17, 2006
    I really liked this story. i liked the scene with naruto and sauske trying clothes on together... and then the little lingerie thing. that was funny. hope you update soon, cause this story kicks ass.

    later,
    innerchild
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  • From ANON - kuu-ish on June 17, 2006
    Wow. This is a very good story, I really like how you've done it. I love how you have both of them with their own completely different lifestyles, it really gives it...Just.. Er. I can't really explain it, though I'm sure you understand what I mean. Rofl. I love how Sasuke's "Friends" are all gawky around Naruto.. It's cute how they share food and stuff, hehe.. You can't help but go "aww..!" Teehee!

    And Neji.... I love the guy, but he better back off!! -shakes fist vigorously-!!!R#@%#@ Sasuke>Neji!!

    :P

    I'm bookmarkin' this. A great story indeed!!! Hope you update it sooner or later!
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  • From ANON - Amber on June 08, 2006
    When are you going to write the next chapter? I really like this story.
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