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Reviews for After the pain

By : Legilmyth
  • From ANON - iamnuff on March 11, 2009
    you made here pregnent,in most storys that just about ruins it for me, the only thing worse is yaoi.

    hopefully this one will be diffrent
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  • From ANON - chocmilkchan on January 22, 2009
    i love your story and am hoping for an update soon! :)
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  • From statnin on January 03, 2009
    Luv this story!
    Wen r u gunna update it?!
    plz b soon
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  • From Username159 on December 28, 2008
    Found this a couple days ago and am only on chapter 18 as of this review. This is good writing mate; keep it up. Seriously, I've read published works that are way below the quality of what you’re pumping out here. I can understand your frustration about your muse being fickle. I get ideas all the time, but am to unorganized to be able to make anything of them. My only complaint of your story is that you glossed over the trauma that Temari's rape would have caused. I’m not personally into the whole graphic rape thing, but I have watched too many Law and Order: Special Victims Unit episodes to know that the wounds inflicted by a rape don’t disappear overnight. They take years to scar and those scars last for the rest of your life. I will cut you slack on this point because you are writing for a more or less general audience and you do show at least some of what victims deal with emotionally. On a lighter note though I noticed you forgot to put puppies, kittens, and little hearts onto the pillows in the Gaara pillow mountain scene.
    Finally, I would like to recommend that you at least look into a free computer program called NaturalReader (http://www.naturalreaders.com/download.htm). As the name suggests it reads text on your computer aloud, which allows you to pick up a wide variety of grammatical mistakes relatively easily. The only drawback is that the voices can be slightly droning, but compared with some of the other programs out there this is minimal. Please don’t take this as an insult to your abilities since your writings are not nearly as littered with grammatical errors as many of your peers in the fan fiction community. My recommendation comes from a want to see good writing become great writing and from someone who owes their passing English with the aid of NaturalReader and the Merriam-Webster website (http://www.merriam-webster.com).
    Bet you could have used a reading program to help you get through my review. ;)

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  • From ANON - Auric on December 23, 2008
    The way i look at it, this story is like a great swordsmiths 10 year blade. it's something that is a long time in the making, but when it's finished it will be something beyond compare. it is something that cannot be rushed, that must be forged at the proper pace, or it will become brittle and shatter with the next blow of the hammer. Ch. 25 was definitely worth the wait, but i am hoping that there won't be another long hiatus between now and the next chapter. And just a comment on your character development: good work. It is written: "You only truly know who you are when all hell breaks loose". Great people are forged in the fires of chaos, and only grow when their limits are tested beyond bearing.

    Trust your muse, and for luck's sake wear some warm clothing, 'cause up here the winter's really gonna be cold.
    Auric
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  • From wharehouse on December 20, 2008
    Great chapter, glad you got around to putting the new one up. Just to say, if you reworked this as a non-Naruto story, you could probably publish it with a little bit of work.

    Hope to see more from you in the future.
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  • From ANON - Josh B. on December 17, 2008
    Hey how ya been. I am glad to see that you updated your story. I was kinda intranced into your last chapter that I am not gonna wanna read any more stories until I read this one to the very end. I love the scene in the forest with Naruto and Temari... I would like for someone to draw a picture of them like that. Til next time Legilmyth
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  • From serenagold on December 17, 2008
    I'm so happy that you're updating this story again. I truly love it and can't wait to (finally) find out whats going on with Temari and to see the two of them officially come together.
    Keep up the excellent work. ^^
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  • From LadyLaran on December 16, 2008
    So glad you updated. I have been hooked on this one and waiting patiently for a new chapter. Great job!
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  • From ShouraiChan on December 16, 2008
    *jumps for joy* AN UPDATE! And I so sympathize with you--my muse just likes to be a lazy someone too! But I have loved this story for the LONGEST and I'm glad it's back up! You go! Keep it up and welcome back.
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  • From ANON - a wandering stranger on September 28, 2008
    impressive, very impressive. this caught my eye by the rather odd angle for a romance to story begin with, but it really has turned out beautifully. the original characters are colorfully made, the plot is excellent, and kyubi's attitude is spot on. with the end of every chapter you can't help but want more. there aren't a lot of ways to place real appreciation into words but it truly is terrific, I give it a 10/10. keep up the good work and i can't wait for the next chapter.

    starring out the window in deep contemplation,
    absentmindedly sipping tea,
    a wandering stranger


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  • From ANON - anon on September 28, 2008
    ....
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  • From ANON - Voronwer on August 27, 2008
    This is truly one of the best stories of Naruto that I have ever seen.The plot is awsome with plenty of twists
    and turns not counting deep that you can almost feel the chars emotions.I can't wait to see the next chapter
    and have bookmarked the story.I congratulate you for making a fine art and letting all of us read this
    masterpiece.
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  • From ANON - Ian Sarver on August 10, 2008
    Great so far. I have been reading this from the beginning and I have no critique or anything that I can say about it. 1000000000000/10 stars for you.
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 24, 2008
    Ah...still hoping you update soon. I know I am being selfish, but I need more...PLEASE!!!
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