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Reviews for After the pain

By : Legilmyth
  • From ANON - Slade on August 10, 2006
    Wonderful chapter..i liked it the most so far keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - FireKitty on August 09, 2006
    2. WHEN R THE BASTARDS WHO VIOLATED Tem GOIN TO PAY !!! I WANT THEM TO PAY!!!!!!(if u covered this in another chap.Ignore this *rubs back of head8)
    3. When tem is due have be late and then her and naruto ty a whole bunch of remedies to induce labor but they have to eventully have to have sex. It would be an aquard way they could have sex and it would be very sweet too
    4. Naruto should find his son in a small village on the border of the leaf country it would be a great moment and it would lift a great guilt off his shoulders


    P.S. pls e-mail me when u have a new Chap. up and i would like to e-mail u some info on some fanfics i have in the making
    dont ever stop love your storys Love YA FireKitty
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  • From ANON - FireKitty on August 09, 2006
    *WAAA boo hoo**sniffles* im still wiping tears from my eyes that was so touching and im sorry i really feel like killing Jewel or is that what u were aiming for. well i have a few requests and other stuff so this is not going to be as short as my other reviews.

    1. WHEN R THEY GOIN TO KISS ?!?!? I WANT THEM TO KISSSSSS
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  • From ANON - VJ on August 09, 2006
    Yo yo I'm baaaaack and loving your updates. Jewel explanation is excellent. Temuto merger definitely on the horizon

    being picky, you haven't changed your habit of spelling "tired" as "tiered" and your latest chapters had many instances of spelling "sand" as "sana". no doubt you were typing fast. Being the obsessed fan of this story I have every chapter edited gramatically and saved in word format if you want them.
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  • From ANON - Shadow on August 07, 2006
    Oh, wow! I... Have no other words to explain my thoughts of this. It's really well written, and now I finally see Naruto's pain more clearly. I actually cried at the end of this, and let me tell you, I don't do that very often. I love this chapter, it's in depth, and heartfelt. Just amazing-no, not just amazing, it's more than that. Typo's aside, it's perfect! I can't wait for the next chapter. Literally, I can't, so hurry up and write it. Lol. If I could give you one suggestion though, it would be "Change absolutely nothing in your writing style." I couldn't do any better myself. And yes I write fanfics. ^-^ Please continue! Please?... Please?! I can't wait!

    -Shadow
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  • From ANON - TerraChrono on August 07, 2006
    Excellent work. This is a very good story, plot-wise, and the dialogue doesn't sound stilted or unnatural, two definite plusses which set this above the vast majority of other works. However, your word choice is consistently incorrect. While not so thick as to corrupt the sentences they appear in, their existence nevertheless gives the impression that you are an unskilled writer (which, it seems, is contrary to fact) too careless and lazy to edit your writing, or to find a beta-reader to tend to the matter for you. All-in-all, however, I am happy to note that these traits have not prevented the success of this story. I eagerly await your return from Chicago, and the further updating of this fic.
    Thank you, and I hope your trip goes well.
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  • From ANON - meliny on August 06, 2006
    oh my gosh!!!!!!!! that was just. . . *grabs a tissue* that was an amazing new chapter i seriously cant wait for more
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  • From ANON - Josh on August 06, 2006
    How can you have such a great talent in writing a story this good. I can relate to Naruto. Why cuz of how he is treated and I lose sleep cuz of the story being as good as it is. I love the way it is turning out and who is Jewel. Can you fill me in on that and hope to see more from you.
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  • From ANON - nonengel on August 06, 2006
    I was curious as to how this chapter would go after the ending of the last.

    Excellent.

    This was perhaps that best chapter I've seen of this story. The background story you made regarding Naruto and Jewel was extraordinary. You had enough detail and emotion in it to warrant making it a story on its own.

    I'm looking forward to seeing how the relationship between Naruto and Temari will proceed after this.
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 06, 2006
    Holy crap that was so sad. Poor Naruto. At least things r looking u for him now.
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  • From ANON - James on August 06, 2006
    that girl was a dirty whore and should have died after the child
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  • From ANON - Peacemaker of the Phoenix Soul on August 06, 2006
    Yay, that was a good chapter and I didn't see the Jewel thing coming from a mile away, bravo!!!! Keep up the great work and update when you have time please.
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  • From ANON - Spectator Beholder on August 06, 2006
    Great story! Gotta say, this story's the first with a Temari/Naruto pairing I've encountered and I wondered how it'd work out, considering the pairing is a bit rare. But you've pulled it off really well! The story has been a great read so far and I look forward to future chapters of it, whenever they come! :). Ganbatte kudasai! :).

    Oh, and when will word reach the Sand that Temari's safe? After all, I can't imagine Temari holding off telling her family that she's safe much longer...
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  • From ANON - Lady Darkness on July 26, 2006
    This is a wonderful story!
    Please continue it, I can't wait for more!
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  • From ANON - kit on July 24, 2006
    great story cant wait on the next chappy
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