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Reviews for Silence

By : nesan
  • From ANON - MeLaiya on February 03, 2006
    Wow, this was an incredible first chapter. Great start really, now, hows about some updates hm. Please update soon, cant wait to see what happens next.
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  • From ANON - Dhampir on February 03, 2006
    Your story has an original ring to it and so I'll continue to read it if you post it, but I do think you need a beta.

    There were a couple mistakes like "feet" instead of "feat" and some of your sentences seemed blocky and unfinished. I don't know if you just rushed it to post it or what, but I think a beta might be a good idea. Also, try to focus on emotions and personal thoughts as well instead of just the facts. I couldn't really feel how it was affecting everyone with Naruto's disappearance.

    I can say that your writing skills did improve towards the end of this chapter.

    Sorry if this sounds harsh, I promise to read the next installment, but I thought you'd like to know.

    --Dhampir
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  • From ANON - losthimagain on February 03, 2006
    Thanlk you!!!!!!!!!! This is sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo cool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Please update ASAP or I'll kill you with a kunai!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! XD Angst is fun XDDDDDDDDDD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    -The Update Monster
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