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By : Inuzuka

From ANON - ZeldaFitz on August 02, 2006
I've really enjoyed this fic and would like for you to continue. I think you're off to a good start.
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From ANON - Rasengan22 on August 02, 2006
Yack, my computer shut down as I was writing about how much I'd kick your butt (not threatening, joking... or am I?) if you deleted this fic. I think I just went on and on about how freaking disappointing it would be to lose such an awesome piece of fiction, it's seriously one of my top 4 of all time, and it's not even complete! And I was just thinking about e-mailing you (actually haven't checked to see if you have an email because the note freaked me out). For more specific details about what I love, see first insanely long review under kyuubigirl. This story has mucho potential, and I'd hate for it to go away, but ultimately the decision is yours. I'd suggest taking a few days to get back into the swing of the story and see if you want to nix it. I've personally been waiting for you to update, so that sucked it wasn't for a new chapter! Anyway, and if it'll help, I'll come up with like a damn 2 page list of possible next chapter names if I have to, so you'll at least squeeze out one more. The relationship you have going is far different than any of the stories for your own reasons/writing abilities. Please, please *begging on knees here as I wait for my computer to crash on me again* don't give up!
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From ANON - jazzy on August 01, 2006
Also if you want to start a new story then do it, but please don't delete Conditional, later you may find yourself inspired to write and finish what you started here, and it would bum you out if you had to start all over on this fic. Believe me when I say this.
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From ANON - jazzy on August 01, 2006
You bet I'de be pissed if you went and deleted this fic, It's great I love the slow build up of the boys and angst and the uncertainty of where they stand with eachother at moments is great stuff. Please continue this story, please it's truly a great peice of work, you don't slap them together like some authors and though I would love to see some lemon action going on between them it just wouldn't do right now where they are at, they need to talk more and understand themselves or what they really want or something... I really think this is a great story you must continue it!
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From ANON - redtatsu on August 01, 2006
I would trully love it if you finished this story. I feel terrible that I haven't left a review beforehand. Better late than never. Please continue this.
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From ANON - sadistickiss on July 17, 2006
Wicked story ^_^~~!! I love the mention of Naruto's whiskers (they're so cute). This chapter is my favourite so far =) Please update soon!
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From ladygizarme on July 15, 2006
ahh i love this story, it's really good; i should really say more because it's very deserving, but i'm like braindead right now from lack of sleep (but if i don't review now i'll forget to later) so anyway, it's awesome, i like that you took the time to establish their friendship is still intact, even if naruto still has that nagging worry that sasuke will leave again; the turn the plot is taking is really interesting as well, and i hope you continue this soon
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From ANON - kyuubigirl on July 10, 2006
Shit, I saw the end coming, and I was actually pretty upset because there aren't any more chapters after that! Ok, wow, great story. I read your notes on the third chapter about how you didn't like it or thought nothing happened, but that might've been my favorite chapter. You think you didn't do anything? But that scene in the river was so beautifully set up, and the way they were interrupted there at that moment allowed for lots of interesting things to set up.

Oh gosh, and granted I don't want to say anything bad, but the fourth chapter was the one that felt rushed and was a little hard to follow, but if it was easy to follow then I suppose the boys would actually know what was going on as well, ugh, and so I can only have to ask another question I have so that I can go on to more of the great stuff I loved, did Sasuke tell Naruto about the fire, and why haven't they gone back to the village straight away? Maybe I should reread that part.

Ok, but again, the fifth chapter was absolutely BEAUTIFUL. And in the middle I really wanted to ask you where you are when you write because the imagery is spectacular so I pictured you writing by moonlight in some peaceful place (barf I know, but that's what I was thinking). I just can't get over how in the moment it all feels! Woo, I'm getting giddy here hold on and I'll try to calm down. I really enjoy/am intrigued by this inner debate going on in Sasuke's head about how he always leans on another and then moves to the next and here he's doing it with Naruto. And my heart says that's great because Sasuke should be allowed to live for himself, and at the same time I want to also believe he doesn't just want to use Naruto like that (which is obvious because of what Sasuke has said so far about him wanting it to be real, etc... ) Gosh that's really great that you call that his nindo. I mean I'd never really thought about Sasuke's hangups before!

Ok, also, I love your Naruto. I always love IC Narutos that aren't weak or ukeish (not that that's an issue here anyway). Naruto has been so consistent, and I feel how he's reluctant to let go of the idea that Sasuke might leave, and I love how even though he questions how he feels about Sasuke... that way... the kyuubi is telling him all the while that he should just "hit that." I didn't describe that very well.

Anyway, I'll just shut up after I analyze this last bit. I am so glad you offered a look into what it was like for Sasuke when he was with Orochimaru. And that he turned over with innocent eyes! It's easy to forget that when it all happened they were just kids thrown in circumstances they had no control over, so no matter what they've been through, they still are rather innocent in that respect. And that it made him physically ill really says a lot about this Sasuke. And the way you described Naruto's concern in that moment! And then when Sasuke steals Naruto's pillow... oh I wanted more (did Naruto notice or think anything? was it an impulse on Sasuke's part to take it, did he need comfort just then or something else?) Oops, I know I said it would be the last thing, but it really eased the tension when Naruto was thumping on the shower wall and Sasuke thought he was well, you know! Very cute.

I know this was from the earlier chapters, but I am so pleased with the way you write. And so I picked out this particular description you had when poor Sasuke was dwelling on his feelings for Naruto. I loved it so much: "Uchihas were a stubborn family, and he was no exception. Perfectly prepared to sit on his infatuation for all eternity, Sasuke quieted."

So very good! Please don't rush yourself. I know it's going to be so great when it all falls together. DO NOT RUSH THE SEX. It will be disappointing if you do. Gosh, and I kind of hope it'll be sweet. No one ever does it where it's sweet, though whatever happens happens. The temp/rhythm of the story is JUST RIGHT. So no worries. Thank you for such a wonderful story so far! I can't wait for the update!

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From ANON - Rasengan22 on July 10, 2006
I'm at Chapter 3, as in getting ready to read it. I'm really enjoying your story. I don't even know how to describe it. I love author's that don't rush into the story, they let their characters develop, and the scenes unfold so nicely.

I just loved the scene where Naruto and Sasuke meet and then afterwards at Naruto's apartment. It just felt so natural, and I can't believe how IC they both are! It's like a hint of a relationship, and yet it doesn't add anything more than there already was in the canon (well, close enough!). Just everything feels so subtle. I don't feel like you're pushing to get them in bed. And it's just super nice. I hope it continues like this.

And usually I get distracted when kyuubi gets involved in stories, but I find it's kind of great for comic relief, and it's not overpowering. Aww shucks, I like this story a lot.
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From ANON - blue_genjutsu on May 26, 2006
Love your story and how you've written Naruto and Sasuke. Can't wait for more of it! :)

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From ANON - noise. on May 24, 2006
Oh sweet jesus you're back with an update! I can't wait til you add more chapters!!
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From ANON - Tsukiyomi on May 23, 2006
I really like your story. It is staying true to the characters and that is rare to find. I'm just dissapointed that they haven't came together yet. I feel like we're being teased. But then again, I'm just an old fashioned pervert of sorts, lol. I can't wait to see how these two finally come together. And I wonder what is happening in Konoha. Nicely done.
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From nocturne on February 10, 2006
...meh.

why'd you leave it off there? this story is fabulous; write more soon, please! ^--^
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From ANON - Billy on February 01, 2006
Very well done.....
Keeping up with it...you have to make it more known who's talking or thinking. like add said the fox or kuubi or like naruto stated i am having trouble knowing whos talking and so on.
and you should have a special symbol and no iltalics when naruto and the fox chat.
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From ANON - Arry on January 30, 2006
Very nice I like how your taking your time on this and I love kyuubi in this fic as well, keep up the great work

Arry
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