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By : kimbop

From ANON - AngelsWarmth on May 22, 2006
This has been one of the most entertaining and hillarious fanfics I've ever read. I was literally in tears at some of the things since they were so funny. With the triangle going on between, Sakura, Sasuke, and Sai is very intersting. With me, I really don't care who Sakura ends up with, for I like them both. Well I can't wait until the next chapter, and awesome job!
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From ANON - Hillary on February 12, 2006
please please please please please please please update soon
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From ANON - Hillary on February 12, 2006
please please please please please please please update soon
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From ANON - EF on February 07, 2006
I am really fond of the "ex-ag-ger-ate" part! Made me all warm n' fuzzy inside! And Sasuke smiling when Naruto confirmed Sakura's loyalty... too cute. You're so talented at the scenes! And you know what I really like? The fact that everything stays in Sakura's POV. (With the exceptions of those small scenes at the end of this chapter w/ Naruto and Sasuke, and Hiruma and Kakashi) I mean, you could write it with Sakura being confused about what Sasuke would want after winning their second spar and then switching to a scene with him basically telling the readers what he wants, but that is so not as suspenceful! I like to keep guessing and you're really keeping me on my toes.

I feel so much sympathy for Sai.. I really hope he gets a happy ending. Which randomly reminds me, have you ever seen A Walk to Remember? I'll admit, it's a truely sappy film and if we didn't watch it in health class, it would be totally something I would never pick up at a video store. But, anyhoo, it's basically about how two people, boy and girl (duh), get paired up for some reason and the guy is totally not into the girl, thinks she's plain-jane and such. When they first pair up, the girl is all, "Promise me..that you won't fall in love with me." And of course, the guy thinks it's hillarious, but que sera-sera, he ends up totally in love with her. Sorry, it kinda remined me of this whole Sakura-Sai deal. And maybe I just wanted to type alot. -shifty glance-

Well, anyhoo, onward my dear writer! I await for an update with baited breath once more!
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From ANON - Hillary on February 05, 2006
please pleae please please please please please pleaase please please please please please update
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From ANON - SMut is my Religion on February 04, 2006
"ALL hail the Queen of SMUT!!" ::BOws reverently(sp?)::
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From ANON - Dark Phoenix on February 04, 2006
I'm not one of them (those who want SasuSaku at first, then SaiSaku later). NEVER. SasuSaku ALL DA WAY!

Reason why readers are clamouring for Sai to get with Sakura is probably because you focus too much on the ra-ass bastard, and make him far less of a jerk than he is. Sasuke is like a distant runner-up in the triangle. Like there's all these dramatic moments with Sai's character development and the one in chapter 13 with the older couple, Sai is constantly there. Whereas for Sasuke's appearances, I can only think of the one where he took her home and watched her sleep. That's too little.

And WHY did you make Sakura almost kiss the JERK-FACE?!?!? She only thinks of him as a friend! Right?!

All the above, are the reasons why you readers most likely think this is s SaiSaku fic, thus the encouragement of Sai fans for you to pair them up.

Frankly, I believe Sakura could only see Sai as a Sasuke replacement AT THE MOST (though she clearly doesn't in the manga), and would only kiss him if she confused him with Sasuke. Like when she was piss-assed drunk.
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From ANON - Ivydraken on February 04, 2006
WOW!!! I finally read all the chapters together because my sister was nagging me to do so. So what do I find? I LOVE SAI/SAKU!!! God is this good! I couldn't imagine in all my dreams that i would prefer the loud annoying Sai to Sasuke. You have made the character work in a fantastic manner and I hope you update fast. Yes Lily, you were right, I'm a junkie! Keep up the great work.
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From ANON - Hillary on February 03, 2006
please please please please please please please please please update
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From ANON - Hillary on February 02, 2006
please please please lease please please please please update
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From ANON - Ari on February 01, 2006
Also, I must say, you are a creative genius with the insults and Kakashi excuses! The one about the dress and males flirting with him was hillarious!
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From ANON - Ari on February 01, 2006
Yay! This story is wonderful! I love SasuSaku and I love SaiSaku, so please end this with whatever pairing you want! At the moment I'm hoping for SaiSaku, but everytime you create a new romantic scene between either of them I sway on my opinion. So if chap. 14 is SasuSaku I'll probably be hoping for a SasuSaku ending, and visa versa. Lol, anyways, great story! I'll be waiting for an update!
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From ANON - PrincessSweetSugar on February 01, 2006
Alright, I just finished reading this story and I love it! I totally agree with you about all the stories being yaoi, lets get some het pairings in there! You're writing is simply beautiful, and I don't notice any mistakes so that's great! And the sexual tension between Sakura and Sai is so thick you can cut it with a knife. I really love how you formed them together and with Sasuke how you keep him in his quiet, very anti-social self but still manage him to play off well in your story.

Personally, though a Sakura-Sasuke pairing would be nice, I definitely want a Sai-Sakura pairing for this story! But you are the author and I can tell you that either way I will be really really happy!!

Keep on writing and update ASAP!

~PSweetS
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From ANON - Hillary on February 01, 2006
please please please please please update
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From ANON - Hillary on February 01, 2006
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