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Reviews for As The Leaf Turns

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  • From ANON - vashta on January 31, 2006
    Finally someone Naru turned down, I bet that guy feels really crappy, Naru does everyone, or did! Well, now will Iwashi get Tenten's cold! I mean you don't swap slobber with a germ factory and come out unscathed. I suppose with your new fic the updates for the others will be spaced out more? I can cope I like the new fic, well, I am interested in what you could come up with for "Ask Naruto", or "Dr. Naru", hmm I could come up with dozens of good names for Naru's column!!!
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  • From ANON - vashta on January 19, 2006
    OK, I know who they are now, I just read that part a couple of weeks ago! Really, I am too old to have all of these anime and manga characters floating around in my head, at least my hubby says so! I think he is jealous because I have retained my inner child so well, and he can't enjoy cartoons as well as I can! I am ready for the proposal, poor Iwashi, Naruto makes a great advice columnist.
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  • From ANON - vashta on January 05, 2006
    Well, if Neji is planning to get pregnant he won't have to deal with a monthly cycle, he just needs the capability to be fertile! What a wimp, getting all green over that. I am trying to place these new characters, the minor ones who aren't around for long in the manga confuse me. If they aren't going to be around much I won't worry about it, otherwise please tell me where to look for them mangawise.
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  • From ANON - Marielle on January 01, 2006
    ...The Sakura-Sasuke dialogue in the store...



    PRICELESS...

    I laughed out loud...

    I am confused about one thing. Koibito's name. The first name listed is that the official birth certificate name, or are we going to get a name swithc in the middle of the story...?


    Soooo glad you put this new chapter up. Sorry I haven't been on aim recently...

    Holidays have been a pain in my ass. I see ya online sometime this week!
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  • From ANON - vashta on December 31, 2005
    That was just too funny! Poor Sakura, but I could so see Sasuke doing that, he has a mean streak. I suppose she will think about her questions more carefully from now on. Personally, I would say call me next time you two go shopping so I can stalk, and watch!!! Well, another nice chap down more to go!
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  • From ANON - Marielle on December 16, 2005
    *Runs though room waving Fan Club banner. Trips and slides into the wall...*



    I'm fine I'm fine!!

    Great chapters! I was kinda behind, Christmas has been a pain in my ass!


    But the President is back, and I bring with me Christmas Cookies!


    Hopefully I'll be back on AIM tonight!

    We must write our Lemon! YOSH!
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  • From ANON - vashta on December 16, 2005
    Well, that was informative. I like Tenten's new guy, he is sweet. I do hope that he doesn't let her dominate him though, her personality calls for someone strong that can take a stand with her, while still cuddle when needed. Ready for more.
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  • From ANON - vashta on December 09, 2005
    What is with all of these controlling parents? I mean it is not like the kids are picking drug addicts or alcoholics or schizophrenic murderers!!! Man, well, I liked that and I am glad we got a little Kaka/Iru, they are almost as good as Naru/Sasu and Shika/Neji. I am pleased and my dentist didn't have an open appointment, so I decided to suffer for your art!
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  • From ANON - vashta on December 08, 2005
    Awwww, I think I got a cavity! That was very good, I like the way you make these two stories back each other up. I also like the diiferent couples, keeps things interesting to have so many pairs to read about. You are doing very well with keeping everything updated too, I am impressed.
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  • From ANON - vashta on November 29, 2005
    I am just saying, 'good for the goose....good for the gander'. It is unfair to get in Sasu's way, maybe he just wants to sample the linebackers as well! I personally was glad my first knew what he was doing, but if he had been wanting me to hold out while he was giving out free samples, mad I would be! I do realize the immense benefit of Naruto's vast experience though, hmmmm, Sasu is in for a treat! No stone throwing intended, just slightly unfair of Naru, in my opinion. Ready for more!
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  • From ANON - Marielle on November 29, 2005
    Oh, yes, the pin is still polished...


    I've been checking this story everyday since the last post, so I'm very happy that you updated...


    I'd like to state for the record...


    Gaara is a man-whore... and I love it!


    *awaits the next chapter...*
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  • From ANON - Marielle on November 22, 2005
    ....GAARA AND NARUTO FORNICATION!?!?



    Hahahaha.... this was great!

    Stupid people and their hater-ation voting!


    Keep writing, and don't worry about them.

    All that matters is that I'm the President of your fan club!

    I'm wearing the pin right now! *_*
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  • From ANON - vashta on November 22, 2005
    Naruto is such a slut! Man I agree with Gaara, Sasuke should be terribly upset when he finds out Naru has been so loose while keeping him away from others. Good chap.
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  • From ANON - Suki on November 22, 2005
    I wouldn't sweat the stars so much. If not many people have reviewed, than 1 low rating can change the whole thing. You did ask for criticism, so here goes: First off, your plot is fine. (I haven't read the other stories, so I get confused at times, but that's my problem...) Your plot is probably very good, but we're not very far into the story so I can't tell just yet. I have two complaints, the first is very easy to fix. The stories bounce around way too much. You don't have to touch on every character (or even very many characters) in each chapter. One or two paragraphs about each one per chappy makes it choppy and it gets confusing, and you never give yourself a chance to delve into the situations. It's fine to switch around a little, but I think you've over done it a bit. You might try focusing on one or two 'stories' per chapter. (and make your chapters a WHOLE lot longer) That way you can really get into their heads. Which brings me to criticism number 2, which might be rectified by fixing criticism number one. I feel like you're 'telling' the story, not letting it flow. It might help a lot if you dedicate more than a paragraph or two to a scene. It will force you to do something other than scratching the surface of what's there. For example, your the scene with the sand sibs is less than 3 pages long, yet you've got a REALLY interesting dynamic between the characters that you barely explored. I like that Gaara's into Sasuke and I love the little relationship Tema and Naruto have got going on. It's very naughty, and has a lot of potential to be a really great scene, (and develop into an even better plot) but you really just glossed over it. You don't need to cover a larger time frame, just expand within the constrains of the scene you've already got. Basically, I'd say you aren't doing your plot justice. It could be really really good. (really really long) but that's what you get for trying to write a soap opera! =) Anyway, no flaming intended, I mean no offence. I wouldn't bother to criticize if I thought it was hopeless. Good luck!
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  • From ANON - Wellwellwell on November 21, 2005
    LMAO!!! thas the funniest author's notice i have ever seen, i like the story.
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