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From ANON - Anon on February 03, 2010
Chapter 10: Yeah, you gotta blame Sakura and Naruto for telling people. u.u ____ Heh—Hinata’s kid reminds me why I never want to be around little kids. I really don’t like ‘em. >.>;; ____ “Three of these things,” lol. XD ____ “Silly thing… just like his daddy.” I think that’s an oxymoron? ^^; ____ What I don’t get is that if the secret that Uchiha Sasuke is pregnant got out, what’s stopping the secret that the father is Uzumaki Naruto? Because both of those secrets kind of come together, and if somebody leaked one secret, what’s stopping them from leaking the other? ____ “Not interesting. Painful.” Ditto. ____ “If you hadn’t turned fully male …” Not fully male. Otherwise that would cancel out his womb and then he’d really be in a mess. ____ “Together, the stubbornness of their children would be something for the legends.” Let’s hope they’re good legends. It would be bad if they got interested in the darker stuff.

“But you and me together … the village elders would have a group heart attack.” And that’d be a bad thing? ____ I’m surprised Naruto doesn’t find some way to … discourage the baby shower. Or find someplace so Sasuke can avoid it. ____ Heh—“You have to stay, because endless hours of fellow ninjas staring at my stomach and trying to be awkwardly sympathetic will finish the emotional scarring Itachi and Orochimaru started!” Well said. =) ____ Oh wow! I wasn’t expecting Naruto to suggest becoming pregnant! =O ____ “And there was a knock at the door.” Oh boy. Doom approacheth. ____ Come on, girls, at least wrap the packages in colors Sasuke would appreciate. ____ I really don’t get the Kakashi/Iruka thing. Maybe it’s just that I’m missing the chemistry between them. ____ I would’ve thought these village idiots would know what Sasuke doesn’t like—that he still likes to keep to his personal space. Not that Ino ever respected that, but still. ____ And I thought it’s rude to ask someone who the unknown partner is. ____ I’m surprised that Sakura doesn’t pick up on the other reasons they’re keeping Naruto’s involvement quiet. She’s supposed to be pretty bright. (Though I wouldn’t mind it if he does tell.) ____ Oh my god, he actually told them. =O ____ (*snicker*) Love Shikamaru’s and Neji’s reactions. X3 ____ Lol: “It was consensual! Er… kinda, at least. Sasuke, help me out here before they start throwing sharp objects…” That’d be funny if Sasuke “helped out” by saying, “I got Naruto drunk and screwed him.” I wonder if that would difuse some of the sickly sweet behavior of everybody around him. Not that Naruto would thank him for the turned sympathy. ____ Well, the argument Sasuke used is actually pretty good too. I like the line: “Anyone who has a complaint may lodge it now, with the assurance that I really don’t give a damn.” ____ Lol, “‘Yes,’ Naruto and Sasuke replied immediately” ouch, Gaara—it was from both of them. XD ____ Hehehe, alright, Gaara, you tell em! ____ “People sort of skirted Naruto for a bit—which” (*interrupting*) Which is too bad, considering how Sasuke seemed about to suffocate under all the attention they were giving him. It would let some of the pressure up if they spent some of that time talking more to Naruto and giving Sasuke room to breathe. ____ “For now, entertain the guests and keep them the hell away from me. I’ve had it up to here with this whole fiasco.” I hope he said that just slightly above a whisper so some people heard that. ____ “If it’s about Ino, I can’t help you there, man---I’m no good with chicks. Worse than Shikamaru, even.” I don’t believe that, but LOL ANYWAY! XD ____ AHAHAHAHAHA, I WASN’T EXPECTING THAT! XDDD ____ Lol, this is another good one: “When Sakura-chan first started training with Tsunade-hag, she talked medic-lingo in her sleep.” ____ I admire Chouji’s dedication, but Naruto’d have to teach Sexy no Jutsu to Ino as well. Or maybe Konohamaru can teach her. She’d need a male body to get Chouji pregnant. Unless Chouji cheated on her, but I don’t think she’d appreciate that. ____ Aww, darn it. I was hoping there’d be a little side-something about someone teaching Ino the male version of it. ____ OMG SO CUTE IT’S A KITTEN!! ♥ =D ____ “I thought that you wanted them all to think you were still all buff and manly and super-straight!” That’d be hard to pull off when he’s pregnant and proud of it. Even if he said it was just for reviving his clan. Then again, if he said that, I’d probably worry about the kids he’d have. ____ Lol, love it when Sasuke admits that he’s not asleep. ^^
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From ANON - Anon on January 29, 2010
Chapter 9: Lol: “Oh my God, she wasn’t kidding.” XD Nope. ____ XD She needs a drink. ____ “You only got into the ‘Sannin’ because Orochimaru and Jiraiya couldn’t be the ‘Famous Leaf Two’, now could they?” Ouch. ____ Alright, Moment of Truth—how many babies does Sasuke have? ____ At least it’s not 9. That would’ve been scary. ____ “Oh… that October 10th. Oh. Okay. Moving on.” Yes, that October 10th. XD ____ “Every week you keep them in the third trimester counts.” “It’s high-risk, isn’t it?” “Very. Your body type isn’t very well outfitted for this kind of thing …” As if there wasn’t enough to worry about. >.< ____ “I just… did not foresee a lot of this going into this pregnancy. I didn’t know it’d be quite this difficult.” I can’t really blame him—even if he did look up more stuff, I doubt he would’ve expected triplets. ____ Well, how the hell is he going to gain weight when he keeps coughing everything back up?! ____ At least Tsunade’s lecturing him with a controlled temper.

Ah, there’s her grouchiness. She saved it special for Naruto. ____ Yay, more conflict. Gaara’s adding some difficulty. =) ____ Wait, Hanabi’s a rogue?! Awesome! =D ____ Lol, “You know the type.” Yup. ____ Interesting—the same age as Itachi. ____ I wonder how Hinata and her father feel. ____ Hell, for all we know, she could be backing up Itachi. ____ I’m surprised they don’t go with a four-man team. ____ “Compiling teams and missions is the Hokage’s job.” A job which you assert that you will have one day, so why are you surprised, Naruto? ____ She’s retiring this early? ____ I still think 56 is kinda early. But maybe that’s because I’ve seen the Sandaime, and he was a special case. ____ “Responsibility was doing good things to the boy. Giving him premature gray hairs, perhaps, but those weren’t always bad.” Lol. ^^ ____ I like the perks. And the way she phrased them. XD ____ Hahahaha, smooth! Love the subtle bit about Tsunade’s bad gambling! XDD ____ And I love the playful exit. XD ____ Oh, nice touch, Konohamaru being engrossed in a book. Might be just a wee bit OOC, but who cares, it’s a good mental image. =) ____ Ah, it’s Icha Icha. That explains a lot. ^^ ____ “You should have the medic-nin check you for shellshock. Looks like whatever it is you’ve been doing for the last month and a half has messed with your head.” XDD ____ I like the heads-up Naruto’s giving Konohamaru. And I like the line, “That’s why I’m giving you nine days to prepare. Get yourself in the zone, right?” Huh, and I also noticed lucky number 9, there. ____ XD “And I mean hot, man. Icy-hot.” Lol, he’s got the hots for “Satori”. ____ Oh jeez, there goes another one’s brain. And Konohamaru will either be playing a lot more with the jutsu, or a lot less, depending on how much of it he’s explored in his private time. ^^;;

I like this whole next explanatory scene. ____ That’s new, Naruto roommating with Kiba and Lee. Did an accident happen recently that busted up their homes? ____ She still seems like a Yamanaka to me, married or not. ____ “Man, and to think I used to hate ramen…” Um … huh? ____ “Sasuke had been stuck with a perfectionist, domineering father who saw the world through Itachi-tinted lenses …” Very good description. =D ____ Hahaha, I love the love-bite dialogue! XD ____ Lol, “One of the babies rolling over. They’re enjoying the attention.” ____ (*groan*) Not the nauseatingly cute pet names. (*is green*) ____ “… and you won’t get into my bed until I’m done being pregnant.” Too soon, I think, as far as punishments go.
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From ANON - Anon on January 25, 2010
Chapter 8: Heh—“I’m sorry, guys,” to his stomach—cute. XD ____ Lol, “Ten dollars says that The Plan consists solely of putting me into a dress and hoping no one notices.” He’s onto you, Naruto. ____ “Oh my God, Sasuke-kun! You’re huge!” And she hasn’t noticed that already? (*sweat*)

Hehe, I like the way Sasuke’s watching Aido so warily. ^^ ____ “Mr. Slayer of Clans himself.” Noneother. And at very cruelly ironic timing as well. And I love the slight delay at the beginning of the next paragraph, when Sasuke realizes how vulnerable he is. I can just see him go ashen (more ashen than he already is in this state). Heh, I like it when he thinks, “Dammit, I should have killed him before I got myself knocked up.” I’m surprised he didn’t think of that. I’d’ve thought that would be a VERY obvious thing to do. ____ Don’t panic, Sasuke. Naruto and Sakura are there. And I’m sure Kakashi will help, and maybe others if you can get to them. ____ Heh, I like this part: Naruto: “What are you crying for now?” *Sasuke gives him the note* “Oh hell.” Yup. XD And I like his use of the word “weaselish”. XD ____ I would’ve thought Sasuke would tell Naruto to back up on the killing Itachi part. Not that Naruto would agree to it. Then again, Sasuke is becoming a mom. His instincts might be changing a little. ____ Heh—“My mother was not a bitch.” You tell him, Sasuke. Naruto, watch it; that was very rude. >: ____ “You’ve got a really pretty face, but we barely get to see it with your bangs in the way.” That’s what makes it prettier, if you ask me. ____ “Sasu-chan.” (*groaaannn*) ____ Love it how Sasuke seriously considers a possible battle between Naruto and Itachi. “I think it’d depend on how much Itachi pissed Naruto off---the angrier he gets, the better he fights. He has a berserker’s nature due to the Kyuubi’s influence.” Sounds like “Rage” in online RPGs. ____ (*snort*) “I mean, it’s not like I got drunk and told Itachi that …” In other words this is how you force yourself to tell Sasuke the truth. And it’s understandable about how calm Sasuke’s taking the news—I mean, it doesn’t change things a whole lot. If anything, now he’s more certain of what Itachi could be dong in the area and what might be on his mind. ____ “And he won’t find me, either. I’m Satori-chan, remember.” And Itachi has the Sharingan, remember; he can see through jutsu. And he’ll probably be glancing at every pregnant woman who’s showing, anyway. I doubt the maternity clothes would hide much from him. And he’ll definitely recognize Naruto. If you ask me, it’s a case of “If he comes, then he comes, and we’ll have to deal with it then.”

I wonder, if Naruto and Sasuke ever have sex when both are guys, will they take turns topping each other, or will it strictly be Naruto on top? ____ Hmm … both Sakura and Sasuke have points. I would normally agree with Sakura on this, but Sasuke’s worried enough. ____ At least Naruto’s there to form a compromise.

Oh dear. Sasuke’s spotted already…. Unless … (!) Is it Itachi? ____ Nope, it’s Sasuke. Poor Ino’s not going to be thrilled when it comes to looking at Sasukes’s hips now. ____ (*snicker*) She notices the hand-holding before she notices Sasuke’s gain in weight? I’m surprised. ____ Oh, good. At least she changed her mind and thought, “It’s not him.” Her mind is spared so far. ____ Okay, why’d Naruto keep Sasuke quiet? Did his voice not change or something? ____ (*snicker*) “And found herself batted viciously away by the woman’s chakra, a red-hot whip that left a weal against Ino’s psyche.” She must be a very good judge of people. Hell, that sounds like something Sasuke does to people without even trying. ____ Ah, darn, she’s going to have her brain scarred after all. u.u ____ (*sniff*) Poor Ino … I like her. ;_;
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From ANON - Anon on January 19, 2010
Hmm, no witty disclaimer this time. =

Chapter 7: I’m surprised Sakura hasn’t told Sasuke that she let something slip to Itachi. Hell, that Itachi’s in town. Hang on … last chapter said that Sakura couldn’t come the previous month…. So did Itachi do something? Mess with her head in some way? ____ Lol, “The hell did you have to do to him to get him to cry?” It’s sad, but it’s a good question. ____ Do foxes mate for life? Real foxes, I mean, not the Kyuubi. ____ “No, I didn’t win. I’ve lost it all, now.” Sakura should tell him how she pissed Sasuke off the first day they were on a team. True, that wasn’t quite the same as this—that was unintentional, this was deliberate. But one fight shouldn’t ruin everything. Well … it shouldn’t. Sometimes it does, though. (*is very pessimistic*) ____ (*snicker*) “So what the hell are you two waiting for? Stop being such men, and kiss and make up!” XD ____ Oh man, I forgot the painted nails. That must be bizarre for Sakura to see. ____ “I’ve had my share of mates.” So what’s this about mating for life? ____ Lol: ‘“I want him to love me,” Naruto mumbled aloud, ignoring how several barmates sighed in drunken agreement. XDDD ____What the hell is up with the way the Kyuubi’s pronouncing the Uchiha name? It’s … weird. =.= I’m sure he pronounced it correctly before. ____ The fuck? Where did the butter come in? XDD So random….

I like the first paragraph of this scene that describes why Sasuke doesn’t like to cry. ____ And I like the description of how he cries in the second paragraph. ____ Interesting how crying gives him cramps. Kinda … cool in the way that makes me wonder if the babies know anything about what’s going on in their mother. ____ “She hadn’t thought she’d have to, seeing as the ninja in question was Uchiha Sasuke, who had no trouble keeping his emotions in check.” Ahahaha … I don’t think so. I think that’s a ninja that Sasuke would like to be, but is far from actually being. He tends to let emotions take over. Particularly the negative ones. He seems to embrace and welcome negative emotions while pushing away the positive ones. It’s why Naruto had such a hard time getting Sasuke back to Konoha (still is having a hard time in the real manga). Therefore, I would think it would be a priority for Sakura to tell Sasuke this. And hell, she’d seen Sasuke cry like crazy! One would think she’d stick around long enough to check things out and let him know the dangers. ____ “There was nobody around to here it anyways …” Actually it’s “hear” it. ____ I didn’t know people had contractions when the baby was not coming. I thought that if they did, that meant miscarriage or something. ____ “Sasuke tightened up into a smaller ball on the floor. He ached from sleeping in such a position, but he didn’t want his weakness to show.” Wouldn’t it look weaker to be seen curled up on the floor like that? ____ I like what Naruto’s saying to him. I like it better than just apologizing and then saying it. ____ “Naruto, are you drunk?” I would’ve thought that’d be debatable. If Naruto faked it convincingly enough before, wouldn’t Sasuke not let anything fool him now? ____ “An’ I’m not jus’ saying that ‘cause I’m drunk.” I’m not sure that’s very convincing. ____ A little cheesy for my taste, but at least they made up.

Lol, Naruto read his mind. ____ “Oh … oh…” XDD That’s messed up, but funny. ____ “I didn’t realize I left marks.” One would think he’d see them on Naruto before he got out of bed that morning. Surely at least one would have been visible. Then again, what could he do about them even if he had seen them? ____ Lol: “Only one of us can be soggy and female at a time, mind you, and as the pregnant one, I have dibs on the position.” XD Never thought I’d see the fic where Sasuke would say something like that willingly and not seem totally effeminate. ____ I’m surprised Naruto hasn’t told Sasuke the possibility of having a litter. I thought that was sort of a crisis earlier. ____ Heheh--*CHOMP* XD ____ I like the part when Sasuke says, “You sound like you’ve thought about this a lot,” and what Naruto replies. ____ XDD There it is. Sort of. Sasuke knows something might be weird. “I swear to all things holy that if the thing growing in my gut’s furry …” XD ____ I thought Sasuke was losing weight, but now they’re saying he’s gaining an abnormal amount. ____ C’mon, Sasuke, I thought you were a genius—surely you can figure out what Naruto’s driving at. ____ Lol, “Or maybe more, because… because it is the Kyuubi, so nine is its sacred number.” I hadn’t thought of that! Man, that startled me. ____ (*groan*) It is 9, isn’t it? =(

Heehee—Sasuke: “I think I”d know if my babies were in any kind of danger.” Naruto: “One word—Itachi.” Sasuke: “Fuck.” Hadn’t thought of that detail, had we. ^^

(*groan*) This isn’t going to be too flattering, is it?
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From ANON - Anon on January 15, 2010
Chapter 6: Purrrr, I wasn’t expecting these particular types of details this soon. =) ____ Interesting. I like how Sasuke’s musing about Naruto and … stuff. I dunno. I like it. And not just for the hotness. ____ “He didn’t look all that drunk. Smelt like alcohol, but didn’t look or feel drunk.” So Sasuke suspected.

AWWWWWWWWWGWHAAAT!! XD Darn it, it ended too soon! XD I get the feeling that since Sasuke is in female form, he’d wake up frustrated rather than sated. ____ “Crushes are below an Uchiha. Crushes are below an Uchiha.” I could make jokes about that, but what I’m really thinking about is that Sasuke hasn’t thought too deeply on some of the people of his clan. Or he just can’t picture them having crushes. I’ll bet that a lot of them have had them, though. Just never showed them out loud. Or maybe some of them tried to bury them by thinking the same thing that Sasuke has. Surely not all of them, though. ____ Since when did Sasuke even learn about that cheesy romantic crap? Probably from all the girls hitting on him back home, but still…. I doubt it would suit him, even if it only involved him and Naruto. ____ So “The Plan” was more than just getting knocked up. At least that much of it worked. And that was the point, wasn’t it, Sasuke? ____ “I’m on a role this morning.” I think it’s “roll”. ____ “Still don’t like sweets.” Aherm—ice cream. ____ “Goddamn those blue eyes… can’t … concentrate … self-restraint … failing…” Then don’t look at him, silly. ____ Yaaay, they’re getting somewhere. ____ “For the love of the Fourth, shut the hell up!” Oh sure, that’ll get him quiet. I doubt the Kyuubi has any love of the Fourth. It’s the Fourth’s fault he’s in this situation, after all. ____ Hrrrg, darn it. WHY is it always more than one at a time?! I swear, every single m-preg story I’ve read ALWAYS has the first pregnancy (or the first one vividly witnessed in the story) as a litter! And it’s only in an epilogue that there have been single children! After the twins/triplets/quadruplets/etceterets were born! ____ Still, I like that phrase—“seeding him so heavily.” Sounds hot. ____ (*snicker*) “I like it when you have sex.” “Yeah, Naruto thought, sighing. Me too.” XD ____ “He feared he’d never get used to the tastes of stomach acid in his mouth.” Actually, I’d be scared if I did get used to it. I don’t think you’re supposed to get used to it. ____ Hang on … humans have had twins & triplets & quadruplets & etceterets … so how can the human body not be meant to carry so many? ____ It’s probably a bad idea, but Naruto should probably tell Sasuke what he knows. That’ll lead to some upsetting questions, but it’s kind of important. ____ Lol, “You’re not going to shut up until I tell you, are you?” XD And probably not even then. ____ (*snicker*) “How gay does Hoshigaki Kisame seem to you?” XDD Fair point. ____ AHAHAHAHAHAHA, the line right after that was hilarious! XDDD ♥ ____ I like where this conversation is going. It’s hilarious, and it’s bringing some secrets out into the open. Naruto told Sasuke he’s bisexual. (So now, if Sasuke wants to try it again as a guy, he can still jump Naruto.) ____ “He had circles beneath his eyes from lost sleep, making him look uncannily like his elder brother.” And for some reason, that makes me wonder if Itachi’s ever tried giving birth. ____ “Er, but what about you?” “What about what about me?” I think only one “What about” is necessary in Sasuke’s line. ____ (*snicker*) “Just a kick. A really, really hard kick. Goddamn ninja baby.” XDD ____ Why doesn’t Naruto just tell Sasuke that he talks to his tenant? ____ I like the sudden turn of mood for Naruto, when he realizes that Sasuke will once again have a family and he, Naruto, will be left outside. Can’t blame him for feeling a little cheated, especially since they’re his kids as well. ____ Well, things are going to be a little rough for a while, but at least it’s out now. ____ “Takes two to tango. I had to get twenty-three other chromosomes somehow.” Just out of curiosity … what would’ve happened if he made a Kage Bunshin (I don’t think it’s Sasuke’s technique, but for the sake of argument) and mated with it. Probably some weird genes would come of it. Hell, clones probably aren’t that fertile anyway. ____ I love the scariness of Naruto’s anger. The threat. ____ “Alcohol seemed to be the only natural salve.” But he can’t get drunk. And wouldn’t that just depress him because it’s related to how Sasuke tried to use him?
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From ANON - Anon on January 14, 2010
YES! But OMGITACHI! =D

Chapter 5: Nice opening paragraph for this chapter. ____ I like it how Aido had a bit of a ninja background. And I like how she recognized him. Of course, with the Uchiha summer home nearby, everyone there might know what he looks like, ninja or not…. Well, maybe not. ____ (*snicker*) “… and why the hell is he looking through the cooking books?!” XDD Like, dude, he’s human! Maybe he’d rather eat his own stuff than his partner’s! XD Nah, actually, I think he might be thinking of poison or something. Or, who knows? Maybe just sending his congrats? X3 Anyways, lol, “Maybe he’s a cannibal. I wouldn’t put it past him.” Like he ate his family. XD (“Mmm, Uchiha fetus—my favorite.”*Garmiet is shot for terrible taste*) ____ “trying not to throw the card that she was a former chuunin, and that she had five shuriken …” I’m pretty sure Itachi already knows. Or suspects. He probably suspects everybody. It’s why he’s got his Sharingan on all the time. ____ So she knew “Satori” was Sasuke all along? I wonder who’s her cousin. ____ “Taking on Uchiha Itachi alone was more than suicide, it was drinking poison, slitting her own wrists, lighting herself on fire, and jumping off a cliff.” Those all sound like suicide to me. A very-sure-chance-of-being-successful suicide. ____ XD I feel stupid; I wasn’t expecting Itachi to be looking for that. ____ “Yours is the only bookstore that carries it.” BULLSHIT. (Sorry. I just highly doubt that.) ____ Hard to picture Kakashi scaring away customers. Itachi makes sense, though. Heh—I like the title of this one, though: “Icha Icha Piracy.” ^^ ____ Nice touch: “Take a deep breath and finish the word.” And then she calls him “Uchiha-san.” No point in hiding it now; he knows she’s terrified and he knows why. ____ “Can’t lie to Sharingan. Can’t lie to Sharingan. Can’t…” I like that. ____ Hmm … true, omitting is not exactly the same as lying … but the Sharingan might pick up on the fact that she’s hiding something. Or not being entirely truthful. True, she’s seen “Umichi Satori,” but she knows that that’s Sasuke. So she has contacted Sasuke (through “extension,” maybe, but still). ____ Oh COOL! Her cousin’s Iruka! =D ____ Hell, it’s at the Uchiha summer home. He might just check there first.

The thing about the chakra-sensing … I’m not sure Naruto is the sensor-type, Kyuubi or not. I think that’s kind of a rare thing. Some ninjas might locate others through other means, or possibly through different aspects of chakra, but I’m not sure if it’s a huge general thing. ____ I doubt it’s anything as drastic as the conclusions Naruto’s jumping to, but you never know. Itachi is in the area. ____ “He’d probably planned it, the bastard.” Probably. XD I like that image, by the way, of Sasuke sleeping in the tree. ____ Cute, Kyuubi begging. XD ____ “You have to stop being all Mr. Cool and start being Mr. Mom.” XD ____ “Sasuke was a master of wordless communication.” ♥ ____ I like the way Naruto translates Sasuke’s body language. ____ I know I asked for it, but I find the visual image in M-Preg disturbing. It’s for the other stuff that I read it, though, and I like the paragraph about how deadly Sasuke is, even while pregnant. ____ Hahaah! Sasuke wants to pick on Naruto! XDD ____ Ooh, “flexible.” ♥ ____ “Kunai mail.” Cool. =) ____ “He’s got a breaking point, remember? Six years was his breaking point when it came to keeping his hands off you, so I’d give him six minutes on a smaller subject.” XD I like the way that’s put. ____ Ahahahha, I like Kyuubi’s suggestion for the note! Some of the stuff would get Sasuke out of the tree pretty damn quick, and some of them would make him delay longer. XD ____ (*snicker*) Flaming kunai. That’s the response. XDD I wonder if Sasuke likes the kunai mail any more than just verbal conversation. He could probably have fun with driving Naruto crazy with it. ____ Nice bit of dry, dark humor at the end of the chapter.
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From ANON - Anon on January 14, 2010
Chapter 4: Ahahaha, I like the mention of the shuriken practice! XDD ____ (*snort*) “Jokingly, Sasuke suggested that he take up knitting, only to have the kyuubi-boy do just that.” I honestly wasn’t expecting that. XD ____ Heh—I knew he’d get a craving for ramen. ^^ ____ Yay, ice cream. ____ “Naruto’s normal eating habits mirrored that of a pregnant woman.” I wonder how Naruto’d react if someone told him that. In any universe, not necessarily this one. ____ “Because it would hurt. Sasuke just hadn’t realized how much.” Why Sasuke and not Naruto, I wonder?

Spoonfight, lol. I like that bit. ____ Awww, cute. ♥ ____ Actually, I don’t think Sasuke’s lashes are so long. Itachi’s stands out a mile away, lol. ____ Hehehe, “He was also trying very, very hard to convince Naruto to have intercourse with his new ‘mate’ as often as possible.” ____ “The one with the strange eyes and the unfortunate furry protuberances?” XD I liked the way he phrased that. ^^ ____ “I was a convenient lay.” That probably makes him a little sad. But I like Naruto’s perception of Sasuke’s intentions. ____ Well, it should be past three in the morning now. ____ Huh. I thought Sasuke just didn’t trust the other girls. ____ “So your Sharingan and Itachi’s Mangekyou-Sharingan came from your mom? That nice, pretty lady who gave up ninjutsu to be a housewife? The uber-scary-wheel-eyes came from her?” Lol. ^^ ____ “Sharingan used to be considered a woman’s technique---who but a mother could know so much just from looking at someone? It’s only in the last few generations since the police squad started up that Sharingan was considered to be so masculine.” Interesting. ____ “…heh, yeah. With the help of my technique, and perhaps the help of some of my better body parts as well, eh, Satori-chan?” Hehehehe. >D ____ So Sasuke’s realizing that he’s got more feelings for Naruto than just as the sperm-doner.

Ohhhhhhhh …… SHIT. Her tongue’s loose. >.< ____ Waitaminute … “tall, dark, and handsome man” … IS IT ITACHI??? O.O ____ I hope it’s Itachi … ____ OH HELL YEAH!!! (*pumps fist in the air*) THANK YOU! ♥♥♥ (Actually, I think it would’ve been better if he’d kept quiet about it….)
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From ANON - Anon on January 14, 2010
Chapter 3: It’s funny how specifically Sasuke labels his days. ^^ ____ That’s sweet, how Sasuke really liked spending the night with Naruto. It kind of shows that there’s more there than simply getting the guy’s sperm. ____ “Who was he, that…” He’s thinking that a lot. Sounds like humility. But I like how you took Naruto’s Seal into account and how it’s uncertain of its effects on fertility.

Heh—I like the bit about Sasuke’s made up story about Umichi Satori. ____ Hahahaha! “And you should know a thing or two about makeup, too---a ninja ought to be prepared for anything, even living as the opposite sex.” I wonder how long it took Sasuke to actually force himself to play with makeup. ^^ ____ “This is the springtime of our lives, and we should---” Naruto’s been spending way too much time around Gai and Lee, it sounds like. ____ If people see Naruto with “Satori,” I wonder if they’ll draw the right conclusion that he’s the one who got Satori pregnant.

“And if he had made jounin, he wouldn’t have gotten himself pregnant …” How does Naruto draw that conclusion? ____ “He knew that the baby was his fault in more ways than one, and he was willing to take responsibility for his mistakes.” Really…. So he knows that it’s his? ____ “Because it was physically impossible for Uzumaki Naruto to get drunk.” Uh-oh. So he really does know the truth. No wonder Naruto’s so obsessed with taking care of Sasuke. ____ Lol: “NO HE’S NOT! HE’S LEAVING BECAUSE UNPROTECTED SEX BUSTED HIM AND HE’S NO LONGER FIT AS A NINJA! ARGH!” XD ____ (*snicker*) I also like Naruto’s immediate mental thoughts about Sasuke’s pregnancy. ____ Heh—cute. Naruto likes the idea of being a father. Once he got used to the idea, of course.
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From ANON - Anon on January 14, 2010
Lol, I like your disclaimer again. Is there going to be a different one for every chapter?

Chapter 2: I like the descriptions of the worst days of Sasuke’s life. ____ Lol, “The Day The Uchiha Clan Went Kaput.” XD ____ Huh. So Hinata got pregnant. By who, I wonder. ____ That’s gotta be bizarre, to be examining a pregnant male. ____ Lol. “Good news… You’re pregnant.” “Really?” Cute. They’re both playing a little. ^^ ____ “Mellower. Not as likely to gnaw off someone’s arm at any given moment.” She’s right. I thought he seemed calmer. ____ “He supposed that it was something like how a girl had to get used to guys speaking directly to her breasts instead of her face.” XD ____ “I think I’m safe as far as cravings go.” You say that now.

And the cravings are beginning to show themselves, I take it. ____ “Naruto infected things.” I like Sasuke’s glass-half-empty take on it. ____ Oh dear, morning sickness.

I figured that this was when Naruto would wake up. ____ Interesting line: “Well, that was something, wasn’t it? Uchiha Sasuke had fallen so far as to not care that Naruto was watching something so grossly personal as him throwing up.” ____ Lol, “Chubbs.” XD ____ “Being as traceless as possible was beneficial, but he was on holiday. He could smell like a fruit if he damned well felt like it.” XD ____ So what does Sasuke think about the Lightning element? ____ So that’s who got Hinata knocked up. And as for Neji’s bloodline making an interesting match with Sasuke’s, that’s debatable. It could screw things up instead. ____ Lol, “To her highness Ino herself.” ^^ ____ “A kiss here, a poke there, and he’d only just been able to hop a ride before the train blew its whistle.” XDDD Good way of putting it. ____ “He’d left out a piping hot cup ramen with a note that read I AM GOD---EAT ME AND YOU’LL FEEL BETTER attached to it.” XDD (!!) I’ll betcha that ramen’ll be a craving!
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From ANON - Anon on January 14, 2010
(I review as I read.)

Lol, I like your disclaimer. XD (I own his necklace myself, lol.)

You phrase your summaries really well.

Chapter 1: “Kakashi made a point out of making the last bash the biggest one.” That’s nice of him. I’m not sure if it’s totally in-character, but it could be. =) Lol, Sasuke being declared a rogue for not attending the party. Surely it wouldn’t be that bad a penalty. ____ “if one could ever call Kakashi a chaperone with a straight face” yeah, he’d probably just sit aside and read his book. ____ Heh—Sasuke switched into first-person: “---and no, I am not jealous. I am simply making observations.” ____ Sasuke must be in serious denial if he thinks he doesn’t like alcohol and he drinks it anyway. ____ “Naruto was so incredibly blitzed …” That’s saying something. I imagine that he’s one who can hold his liquor, so that makes it even funnier. ____ “THE PLAN” Hehehehe. ____ “So I wait for now… and when the party’s over…” If The Plan is to lay Naruto, he might have to make his move sooner, otherwise Gaara could get there first. ____ I wouldn’t be surprised if Kakashi knew that Sasuke was up to something despite Sasuke’s acting. (Actually, if I were Kakashi, I’d say Sasuke was up to something.) ____ “What’sher name, misshy?” lol. Naruto sounds like a perverted old man. Must be something he heard Jiraiya say a lot. ____ Ahh, “Satori-chan.” Haven’t heard that one before. It sounds a little masculine to me, but who cares. ____ “Naruto had used Sexy-no-jutsu, but Sasuke had had only to brush out his hair and apply a little makeup. Sometimes, genetics could be perfectly unfair.” Heh—he’d complain if he’d had to use Oiroke as well. He’s hard to please. ____ “Bimbotastic,” lol. (I’m loling a lot, aren’t I; sorry about that. ^^;) I like the details about how little the Oiroke alters him. Probably because he’s slightly androgynous.

Sasuke’s a total workaholic, isn’t he. I like this whole bit about “training missions” being a cover. =) ____ “Sasuke usually had nothing to hide, nothing that the ever-present paparazzi of teenage girls didn’t know about him.” Interesting way of wording it. I wonder if it’s something he rues. ____ “Umichi”—cute family name. ____ “And that took him to the morning The Plan failed him.” Hmm … so what was The Plan, and how did it fail? It sounds like it was Sasuke’s intention to get pregnant. ____ It’s kind of funny how calmly Sasuke is taking it all, even if he was resigned to doing it. ____ “Well, because I got your dimwitted father smashed so that he’d sleep with me, because I am the last Uchiha and I have something of an image to keep up---and thanks to you, kid, my image is going to become increasingly bloated---and because I am inherently male, and should therefore not be pregnant to begin with. But I used a variation of Naruto’s ridiculous prank-jutsu so that I could conceive an Uchiha child.” This whole paragraph is really funny. I like it. ^^ ____ I like how the story still refers to Sasuke as “him” even when he’s in female form. ____ Oh… he’s not in female form. That must be weird, carrying a child as a guy. I guess it does take concentration to hold it—it’s not like an easy sex-change. And I like the whole paragraph that describes details about it, and how much of it he uses for pregnancy. Heh—it makes me curious about when he learned it, and if Naruto knows, and if Naruto’s seen him like that, and so on. ____ “Two and a half pairs of eyes—two green, two blue, and one deep gray.” XD ____ Lol, Sakura’s jealous. Isn’t she disturbed at all that Sasuke—the guy she’s been in love with—is pregnant? ____ Actually, it makes sense that Naruto wouldn’t immediately assume Sasuke’s pregnant. I mean, sure he’s a girl right now, but—he’s a guy. He’s Sasuke. And if anything, Sasuke should be the one knocking up someone else—someone who’s naturally a girl. It would be kind of hard to get one’s brain around. ____ “You sit around and get fat?” XDD ____ ‘“I’m not fat, shit-for-brains,” Sasuek said in a tired monotone, his eyes half-closed.’ Good imagery. ____ “And you say I’m in denial!” LOL! XD ____ I like Sakura’s quick thinking. And I like how part of her is pissed at Sasuke: “How could you be so stubborn?” ____ “Sakura, it’s not like that—” Actually, Sasuke, I think it’s exactly like that. You don’t trust a girl to carry it. ____ Kakashi’s reaction’s really interesting. ____ You know, this is turning out better than I thought it would, so far. I like the dramatic, slightly-grim mood, but it’s not totally angsty. Or shallow. I mean, I can nearly take it seriously.

This is an interesting contradiction: [Sasuke]’d lost some weight if his bony shoulders were any clear indication, but there was the whole matter of the bulging belly straining against the waistband of his sweats.” And then, “Sasuke had to be sick to have accumulated that much weight in one spot in such a short time period; he’d probably left the village because he knew he was falling ill, and he didn’t want to lose face as an Uchiha because of his weakness.” He’s actually very close to the truth. ____ (*snicker*) “I thought even you would have realized that by now, dobe, but I suppose I’ve just misjudged your intelligence once again. Sorry for my mistake.” ____ Lol, there’s the answer to my question: Naruto did not know, and now he’s freaked out. (I wonder if he knew it could do that.) ____ This dialogue is hilarious. XD ____ “This has nothing to do with team seven, Konoha, and especially not you!” Liar. ____ Good place to leave off with.
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From winterhanson on February 28, 2009
nice
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From Narcoleptic86 on September 19, 2008
Please email me when you update: narcoleptic86@gmail.com

Thank you! ^_^
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From CianisDeRolionus on March 14, 2008
Allys said something about this story being discontinued.... Such a shame.... It was a good story
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From Kyubifire on February 10, 2008
For ur information, this has been one of the best stories I have ever read in my life (with sasuke being pregnet and all) and I hope u keep it up. And I understand u can't update quickly, no pressure although i'm here pondering when sasuke's gonna deliver. Well, wateva...I LUV THIS STORY THOUGH!!! And who knew men could get pregnet...hmmmm *thinks hard on the subject* makes u wonder doesn't it ^.^ 4-ever NaruSasu!!! KEEP IT UP!!
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From mls on February 09, 2008
love this story!!! keep up the good work!!!!!!!
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