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By : Nushi
  • From Blackwidina on June 01, 2008
    Wow. Usually, I'm not interested in the more esoteric pairings, but I decided to read this one, since I like your writing in general. I have to say, I'm in love with this fic. I can see it's been a looong time since you added anything, but hey, I hope people are still enjoying my stories long after they're finished, so why not assume you would, too? Your characterizations are wonderful, the plot is both poignant and fascinating, and you know how to use spell-check. Awesome.

    I'd love to see more, someday, if possible.
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  • From Tricia1224 on May 06, 2007
    I love this story. I hope you pick it back up.
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  • From ANON - grahamcracker on July 09, 2006
    this was so cute! i love your style of writing...it has a nice flow to it. update asap
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  • From ANON - lunar_manaic on June 21, 2006
    Oh, I really like this so far! It's quite descriptive, especially about his condition. The repetitiveness just shows how serious his condition is, and makes me feel as if I understand how it feels as well (usually, redundance becomes annoying. You do it in a way that works!)
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  • From ANON - TellesAgnes on May 21, 2006
    Well, this is the first Hayate/Saku I've ever read. And I LOVE IT! I got a feeling that this fic is going to end very bad! But not all stories has to have a happy ending, neh? So I hope you update soon, 'cause its been a while since you've updated... And I know I'm not the only one waiting for more. So please hurry and update! ^____^ oh, please send me and email when you've updated, alry?! Sayonara
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  • From ANON - Luna on January 15, 2006
    ooh good chapter as always. Just a little confused with whats going on with the Sand and Leafs. No worries, I'm sure I'll catch on later.
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  • From ANON - DirtyD on December 20, 2005
    I don't often go off and read M/F stories but the pairing intrigued me and I'm pleased to say the story plot and writing was excellent. I enjoyed this and look forward to more.
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  • From ANON - Ruka on December 20, 2005
    again a great chapter! I really lik ehow you let things evolve slowly for them! I also liked the scene in which the use the katana! that was so cute!

    please update soon!

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  • From ANON - Katabulous on November 27, 2005
    Wow, AFF.net ate my comment! T_T

    Anyway,
    I love the story! You need to write more.
    I was actually suprised you hadn't hooked Neji and Tenten up, since most post time-jump fics I've read do that.
    But Neji's natural idiocy when it comes to women is refreshing and very cute! :D

    You need to write more! T_T
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  • From ANON - Katabulous on November 27, 2005
    Ack! Why haven't I reviewed this already?!
    Feel free to hit me now. T_T

    I LOVE this story, I especially always love how you characterize Genma and Hayate.
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  • From Dvana on November 26, 2005
    wonderful. An unexpected but very well done pairing, refreshingly real. ^^
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  • From Gigicerisier on November 23, 2005
    Hey, thanks for updating so soon, Sorry for keep you waiting for a while... I will try to send you a reiview quickly next time...


    Language ahead, Ino just has to have a potty mouth, and Sakura it seems too…

    Disclaimer: If it was it would never be released on time.


    >Sakura stared up at the sky with pain squinted eyes. She continued to lie on the ground and rest her aching limbs until a shadow fell over her face.

    “What’s wrong with you?” Kakashi peered down at her, still holding a kunai in one hand from their confrontation.

    “I’m tired, every part of my body hurts, I hardly have any chakra and you threw me onto a pointy rock.” She groaned in self pity.

    Oh god.. I am very proud of Sakura since she is training in spite of lack of Chackra not mentioning physical exaustion....

    >You’d think you would get sick of winning all the time. But it just makes you more of a cocky bastard Kakashi-sensei.” This only received surprised laughter and a hand up from the ground.

    Heh, this was exactly what I thought as well... *grin*

    >“I think that’s enough for today then. It’s not as much fun winning when your partner can barely hold a kunai.” He was intentionally trying to piss her off. It would have worked wonderfully a couple of years earlier but Sakura was used to it by now.

    Kakashi is a jerk totally, I tell you Nushi!


    “Good thinking, then when I’ve rested we can come back and I can wipe that smirk off your face.” But she still couldn’t help herself, so with that parting remark she shifted herself into the village. This little trick only drained more chakra and Kakashi came into existence next to her not a moment later. Her attempt at trying to get away from him failed miserably as she realized she wouldn’t be able to perform that skill again anytime soon.

    “Ooooooh, big words for such a little kunoichi.” Not able to refute the ‘little’ remark, seeing as she had to look up at him, she decided to refrain from comment. “I wonder, how do you know I’m smirking, and how do you plan on wiping it off my face?”

    Now he was just plain teasing her and it was starting to work. Sakura bravely walked on with the man following closely at her side.

    “I can see it in your eye. And if I told you how I plan to wipe it off it wouldn’t be a fun surprise. But it does involve taking the mask off and then probably smacking you.”

    “Hm. Then it’s never going to work.” She looked at him sharply. “Let’s face it, your skill has been waning. You need to train more...and maybe grow a few more inches.”

    “Shannaro!” She hissed but Kakashi grabbed both her hands in preparation of retaliation.

    >“Sakura-san, Kakashi…” Hayate descended from a roof next to them and landed close.

    That's good timing Hayate as always...


    >“Hi Hayate-san!” Sakura ripped one hand free to give him a wave. He gave a half smile in return.

    He gave her a half smile? That's cute..

    >Hayate looked at the restraining hand around Sakura’s wrist and then back up to see a glaring look from her in Kakashi’s direction.

    Hah, hah, I can imagine what was like in my mind...

    >“Just a little training.” Kakashi said and let go to give her a sharp slap to the shoulder. Sakura winced and shot him another glare.

    Tell me, Nushi... why is he so harsh to Sakura even though he knew she had drained her chakra already... *sigh*

    >“Ah,” Hayate said and then turned a little more towards Sakura to get her attention. “Would you like to get something to eat?”

    Hooray, Hayate finally has made a move! Woohoo!

    >Surprise written on her face Sakura turned back to stare at him. He looked completely serious from what she could tell and he directed it only at her.

    She is too obilivious towards her popularity among men isn't she??

    >“Um…” Sakura glanced at Kakashi to see his reaction. His eye looked a little wider but when he turned and raised his eyebrow at her she realized how long her response was taking. Hayate didn’t seem to notice. “Sure!” Taking a step closer to him to let him know she meant it.

    Ahaha... I love this... Kakashi and Sakura is like siblings...like Naruto and Sakura...

    >“No. It’s still early.” Sakura thought her mouth might be hanging open. “Besides, you look a little…worn.” He smiled kindly when he said it.

    Heh, Hayate and Sakura are sitting on a tree....*sings contently..*

    >“Kawaii, are you jealous Kakashi-senpai?” He snorted and walked off.

    Heh, poor Kakashi...

    >It was a little after seven when she finally decided she’d rested enough and spent the last hour sitting under a scalding pour of water. Giving up on trying to find something ‘pretty’ Sakura settled with a black t-shirt, black shorts and her two flaps of red fabric with a white ring on the front that posed as a skirt.

    What a... that is almost same as her previous shinobi clothes...
    Oh, man... I hope Ino or others drag her to go shopping soon even if I know that Hayate won't mind that she is wearing her shinobi clothes for their first kind of date...

    >Sakura shot the women a curious look but continued toward the men since she was more interested in Hayate than gossip at the moment.

    Sakura is really infatuated with Hayate isn't she?? *smirk*

    >“So what are they talking about that’s so God damn funny?” Genma sidled up next to her to whisper conspiratorially.

    “What? How should I know?” Sakura said turning but pulling her head away from his lowered one.

    >“Oh c’mon Sakura-chan.” Sakura shook her head sadly at him. “Well go find out for us then!” He took her by the upper arm and started to push her towards the other women who were completely ignoring Sakura and her group.

    “No! Don’t be so juvenile. Besides, I’m busy.” Taking back her arm and trying to step away.

    Genma seems love touching Sakura so much like Kakashi does.. *wide grin*

    >“Bull.” Genma grinned but was cut short when Hayate stood up and close to them both.

    “Ready?” Hayate asked her.

    “Yes.”

    “Then let’s go.” They started to walk away but Genma was easily in front of them, a huge grin plastered across his face.

    “Oi, where do you two think you’re going?” Taller than Hayate but towering over Sakura as he blocked their way.

    Heh, Hayate seems little bit jealous... when Genma pulled her with him...
    so does it mean... Hayate was also jealous of Kakashi then landed on near her earlier?

    >Sakura looked over her shoulder at Kakashi, usually he kept Genma occupied around her but he started a conversation with Raidou instead, completely ignoring her.

    So, this time Genma and Kakashi teamed up to stop Hayate from taking Sakura??

    >“Out to eat.” Hayate answered before walking around Genma, Sakura followed suit.

    “Just the two of you?” He said to their backs. His little display was drawing attention from the other group.

    “Yes.” Hayate said turning back. “Why?” Sakura was trying not to smile or blush too much as Hayate calmly faced the other jounin.

    Oh... Sakura is such a cutie pie which got eaten by Hayate soon enough...*evil grin*

    >As Sakura made her way out with Hayate, Shizune broke away from the back of the knot to practically run over to the men.

    YOu know I love Shizune in your fic very much... She is like Sakura's nosy sister or something... *snicker*


    >“Sorry about that…” Sakura started as they both settled down into a booth at a cozy restaurant.

    “For what? Genma?” Sakura shrugged and nodded a little. “You know their gossiping about us right now. Does it bother you?”

    “Not at the moment but I saw almost every female friend I have in that group before. I’m going to get hell…” Sakura sighed but smiled a little as she went through the faces that had turned towards them.

    Hayate watched her carefully. She didn’t really seem at all upset to him so he figured she would just have fun with the constant questions they would probably hound her with later.

    Going to get hell huh? I can imagine Anko will bag him a lot then maybe Kurenai.. too...

    Sakura probably is willing to talk about her date with Hayate for sure even if she seems reluctant...

    >“Why, does it bother you?” Leaning forward across the table with a wicked grin on her face.

    “I wouldn’t have asked you if it did.” He was rewarded with a big smile. “I just wanted to say thank you as well. I realize how exhausting it must be…taking care of me.”

    Oops... that was a bad move... Hayate...

    >Sakura felt herself deflate a little. Maybe that’s all this was to him, just a thank you friendly dinner. Not that she thought they were going to attack each other physically afterwards but she felt stupid thinking he might have been interested.

    Poor Sakura... She was totally smitten...

    >Hayate saw something flick across her eyes as she leaned back a little and noticed his mistake.

    “That was actually only partially true.”

    “What?” Sakura said with a little laugh.

    “I didn’t think you’d be interested so that was my back up explanation. I also wanted to see that look on Genma’s face.” This brought a real laugh from her and Sakura felt extremely better.

    Nushi... I love your Hayate/Sakura by far... they are just so damn good together...

    >“Um…let’s eat.” Hayate agreed and they ordered their food. She wasn’t sure she should have been that happy about being used as some sort of prize between men.

    Sakura is prpbably the most honourble prize to win .... heh

    >Coughing into his hand as they walked Hayate looked around. Sakura was surprised he could hold a conversation so easily for almost two hours while having to cough. But she supposed he was used to it and never having heard him speak so much in general she didn’t know what was normal for him.

    I am sure he can talk easily than Neji can...

    >“Where are you going?” He asked finally.

    “I’m going home, why, where are you going?” It was nice not having to crane her neck as much looking up at him as she usually did when talking to the other male jounin.

    “I was going to go get a drink.”

    “Well, have fun then.” He stopped but she kept walking.

    Sakura is playing well against Hayate.. I guess...

    >“I thought you would come with.” It pleased him to see how easily she came back to him. “I would call it an early night but if neither of us was seen Genma would get the wrong idea and hound me tomorrow.”

    “You could just lie and make up something spectacular.” She was completely serious.

    She seems want to have rumour about her and Hayate doesn't she... *smirk*

    >“What reputation would you be talking about Hayate?” She wanted to know what he really thought about her. He noticed she’d stopped using an honorific at the end of his name within the past half hour.

    “Hmmm…”

    I want to know too, Hayate, tell me..!


    >“It’s true!” Tenten hissed as she jabbed her elbow into Neji’s side.

    “What?” He said annoyed. He was trying to have a conversation with Kiba and Shino about tracking when she decided to interrupt.

    “Sakura’s with Gekkou Hayate…They just kissed!” Kiba and Shino had leaned close to hear what was so important but immediately whipped around towards the door of the bar. “Oh no sorry, he was just whispering something to her…I’ll be back.”

    Tenten went off in search of Hinata since she had only seen her a moment before and Neji trailed after her. All the while keeping an eye on the bobbing pink hair of Haruno Sakura.

    Hm... it seems Hyuga people has got some inclination to stalk people generally...*smirk*

    So, considering from the action of Kiba and Shino, do they fancy Sakura too??

    “Hinata they just walked into the bar!” Neji watched his cousin also whip around and immediately locate the objects of discussion. Tenten watched with her for a moment before they both sat down at the table Hinata was standing at.

    Heh, you know I don't like Neji/Hina as a couple at all. but I like their sibling kind of relationship.. that is adorable enough..


    >“They look nice next to each other. Do you think it was really a date?” Tenten nodded furiously at Hinata.

    “I’m sure it was. You know what I heard about Gekkou?” Wide eyed, Hinata shook her head and leaned closer to the older kunoichi. “I heard he can-”

    “Why is she going out with Gekkou? Isn’t he a little old for her?” Neji cut in quickly and calmly. He had no wish to hear what Gekkou Hayate could do and couldn’t believe his little cousin wasn’t blushing.

    I love interaction between these girls... heh heh..

    >“Only eleven years and its one date. Little jealous Neji?” Tenten prodded as he sat down at the table as well.

    “No, why would I be?” He looked cool but Hinata watched his eyes following Sakura’s progress.

    Heh, I love Neji/Tenten... Neji needs someone like Tenten who teases him so as to make him forget about his traumatic past...

    >“I was helping her with her technique.” He said a little defensively.

    “Oh Neji-niisan…” Hinata shook her head at him sadly, like he’d made
    some huge faux pas.

    I can imagine the scene in my head... heh heh love it!

    >Unable to take another moment of their disappointed eyes he went of in search of male company that probably wouldn’t accuse him of being an idiot.

    >At that moment Shizune was dragged over to their table by Ino who immediately went back to the most important topic.

    “Holy shit you will not believe what Shizune just told me. Did you know that Gekkou Hayate can...” Ino made some hand gestures near certain parts of her anatomy as she whispered furiously to Hinata.

    "Is, is that really possible? Without chakra?” Hinata was blushing now but she also looked extremely impressed.

    “Wait, I didn’t hear the no chakra part. I thought it was impressive with chakra use, I hear that’s really hard to learn.” Tenten said looking to Shizune.

    “Of course it’s possible, what about men who can’t use their chakra?” Shizune said looking at the young women around her wishing she had kept her mouth shut.

    “Do you think Sakura knows?” Hinata said as she activated her byakugan and looked through the crowd. Ino snorted and waved her hand knowingly.

    Oh... Shizune, Shizune, Shizune... you are awesome... Nushi, I think you should team up with Kishimoto.. then the comic will have much more depth...

    >“Oh, she knows. Why do you think she’s hangin’ on to him and refuses to come over and talk to us?”

    “I’m pretty sure that’s how you would think and not what Sakura’s actually thinking Ino.” Tenten said sighing at the overly open blonde.

    “You’ve got a point.” Nevertheless Ino went off in search of someone else to share her newfound knowledge with.

    I can't explain how much I love characters in your fic... they all have got so much character... YOu are such a awesome writer Nushi! *waves a flag written a word "Nushi, You are the best! " in it enthusiastically*

    “It’s already started.” Sakura commented as she watched Tenten. Hayate followed her gaze and stopped walking.

    >“Do you want to leave?”

    “That would make for interesting talk…” Sakura said experimentally, watching for his reaction.

    “Then I think we should stay.” Hayate said. “Or you could just go over and talk to them if you’d like.” He was giving her leave to spend the rest of her night without him.

    Hayate never insists people do something unlike Kakashi or Genma... *smirk* Such a gentleman he is...

    >Sakura squeezed his upper arm, his flesh was firm under her grip and she decided to hang on.

    “No I’d rather stay here.” He nodded and walked them to a table where

    Genma was waving them over.

    Heh, Sakura doesn't want him to go... but I think Hayate is actually plased by her action a lot in his mind...

    Okay...now they firstly have to face hell called Genma... *evil snicker*

    >Good lord it’s been over 2 weeks since I updated. You’re definitely allowed to hate me now.

    OH, Nushi, I won't hate you as long as you promise to update and not wait us for 3 or 4 months like other authors... *smirk*

    Well, excellent chapter as always, but I have to admit that this chapter was more fun to read unlike chapter 2 since that chapter was quite serious.
    but I really like the chapter itself too.

    Anyway, I am looking forward to reading new chapter soon and I feel more inpatient each time I read new chapter.. so Keep up writing!

    Gigi




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  • From ANON - Sakuryn on November 20, 2005
    That was sweet! I've never seen this couple before!!
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  • From GhostStories on November 19, 2005
    I once saw a Hayate/Sakura doujinshi, but I couldn't read it, and that fact alone was driving me crazy. After that I really wanted to sind some fanart or fanfiction of that pairing, but of course, none ever came- after all, she was 12 when he died. Then I happened to be scrolling through the archives of Naruto adult fanfiction, passing by yaoi after yaoi, when something caught my eye. My long awaited Hayate/Sakura.
    And it's better than I hoped! It's well written, seems to have a semblance of plot as opposed to a PWP, and is taking things nice and slowly instead of rushing an obscure romace. Crack pairings have to be handled delicately, after all- since you gotta CONVINCE your readers that this is possible.
    I am a hundred kinds of happy to have stumbled across this, and I hope you haven't abandoned it. I'm favoriting this, so do continue, i'm your new biggest fan.
    I musta cried buckets of tears when Hayate died. He did so little to win my heart, only to break it!
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  • From Gigicerisier on November 07, 2005

    Hey, Nushi!

    Sorry for not having sent you a review until now....

    Thanks for updating before the weekend! Here goes another tormenting review for you!


    >Disclaimer: Kishi-kun is so bad! Why does he kill off characters he knows everyone will adore? Ick, I used kun…

    Yeah... you don't need to use kun to him.. he doesn't deserve it... really... damn the man, killed too many.... tck.


    >“NO! Not that one…here see? Look at the book for God’s-Stop! No don’t cry, just make sure you’re painting the same symbol in the correct position.” Tsunade was busy rushing around correcting the new various chuunins painting the seal for the ijutsu.

    Poor Tsunade... she doesn't seem having any time to do her favourite gambling after all...


    Sakura watched one young kunoichi’s eyes well up with tears as she held her brush, almost dripping with paint, watching her Hokage.

    I think Sakura would be never like these chunin girls... she is too tough...and I really adore her toughness


    >“Hayate is it?” Shizune cooed as Sakura started to walk away. Doing her best to ignore the older kunoichi Sakura made her way up from the basement.

    Heh... Shizune seems loving to tease Sakura a lot doesn't she?


    >Hayate’s visits seemed to be happening more and more often lately. It had been barely two weeks since she’d spent an afternoon and evening sleeping off her exhaustion from the last time. Not that she really minded, it was part of her job and was building her stamina and chakra supply more than during any other kind of training she’d ever endured.

    It seems his illness is much grave than I have previouly thought.... Poor man... and Sakura... I hope she won't be so worn out after this....

    >“Gekkou-san…Oh, Sorry!” As she entered the room she quickly closed the door behind her and turned around.Hayate pulled up the hospital pants and shrugged on the shirt, watching the back of his medics head. The embarrassment was easily seen on her pink cheeks but he wondered why. She’d be seeing him completely nude in a short while and be placing her hands on him. What was the difference if she saw him naked now?

    Okay... now I can see that Sakura won't be a naughty nurse like I wanted her to be... but she is so cute!


    >Scar tissue was building in another part of his lung and she’d spent a great amount of time trying to clear and smooth it, cultivating the correct lining he needed. His breathing was coming easier and smoother as a male medic switched with another on the outside ring of the design.

    Sakura swept what chakra she had left and what was coming in beneath him to find another lesion in his lung. She stopped the tiniest trickle and healed the area before continuing her search. Not much else could be, the seal was weakening and everyone’s chakra was running low.

    Hayate’s cells seemed intent on destroying themselves and corrupting those around them. It was extremely unrewarding to find an area just healed already reverting back to its decomposing state.


    Whoa! Your discription about this treatment is amazing... I can imagine this part like a film...




    >“Will you give them back if I let you in bed?” A playful tease. Of course the sheet and blanket were thrown back over her immediately.

    A grin split her face as the bed shifted drastically; a warm arm snaked its way around her waist and yanked her against an even warmer body.

    “It’s barely past 9:30, why are you in bed already?” He rumbled into her ear making her squirm in his grasp.

    Turing in his arms she shifted until her side was pressed against his stomach and her legs draped over his. His teeth flashed bright in the darkness as he smiled down at her. Naruto always came back with a smile on his face and all his body parts intact. Which Sakura was eternally grateful for, not only because they’d become extremely attached to each other but because she didn’t often have to patch him up.

    I am really really glad since you have put some amusement... after this serious treatment thingy...
    I think Naruto is the only person I feel nothing wrong after reading this first part(her legs draped over his... etc.. ) since their relation is like siblings..

    Oh..I need to change my opinion... Naruto is still very much in love with Sakura... Whoa your Naruto is irresistible compare to Kishi's Naruto...Mmmm Yummy... I hope Naruto will be grown up like 4th(I haven't told you but I really like him... like Genma... I know it is impossble but I really like the idea of 4th+Sakura...



    “Chakra drain. I see you’re full of life however…” His head ducked down and he started to nuzzle the side of her neck. Sakura’s sentence fell off into a fit of surprised laughter. “N-naruto stop!” She laughed but couldn’t put up any kind of fight worthy of a kunoichi of her skill.

    When he grabbed her wrists and pushed her down only to find barely any resistance; he let up. Sakura gasped for breath but didn’t retaliate or try to gain any control.

    “Jeez you must be serious…” Naruto was hoping for some fun, he had a sick fascination with pushing her until he received bruises for his attentions. “Now what should I do?” He said in a mock sad voice, rolling his eyes to the ceiling as Sakura watched.

    At the devilish expression plastering itself across his features Sakura started to become nervous. Now she pulled at his hands and tried to roll away, all in vain of course since Naruto just settled himself heavily along her body.

    “Well, since you seem to be at my mercy and unable to inflict bodily damage…”

    Hm... Sakura seemed reallized how much Naruto could be a man... hey.. your Naruto is pretty sexy and masculine... *doodle some 4th face-Naruto+Sakura naughty pics in her head and grin widely*
    Are you trying to convert me into Naruto+Sakura shipper, Nushi? No, I won't..



    Hayate: cough cough...Excuse me...but, you have just imaged them in your head now...*while staring at Gigi suspeciously..*

    Gigi: ....... (Oops... ) Well..because I have got kind a artist block at the moment... *averting her eyes from his intense, accusing gaze...

    Hayate: ... So... cough cough... Are you really going to finish the pics you have previously planned of me and Sakura-san after that instead of Sasori+Sakura-san?.. cough cough

    Gigi: .... well... I will try... *sheepish grin*

    Hayate: You better.... cough cough... *quietly leave the room after giving her one another threating glare...

    Gigi:.... Phew... *After making sure Hayate has gone, quickly jotting down Naruto+Sakura plan to the next of Sasori+Sakura*




    “I’ll tell Kakashi.” Naruto pulled up and away from her, allowing her to rise and stretch leisurely.

    “Don’t use him as a threat, besides, he doesn’t give a crap.” Naruto was frowning but trying not to smile at the same time.

    “You know how he gets, remember Aoba?” Sakura was wide awake now. She loved teasing Naruto as much as he loved teasing her.

    “Completely different situation. I was, er am kinda, his student.”

    “What about the time he knocked you unconscious out in the street after we’d been drinking?” That was probably Sakura’s fondest memory of having someone be protective of her.

    Naruto laughed deep and rough, very different from when they were children. He clearly hadn’t forgotten about the time he’d openly groped Sakura, making her mad enough to really want to hurt him.

    Of course she didn’t get the chance because Kakashi’s fist had come out and put Naruto to sleep for the night. Obviously Kakashi hadn’t been worried about seriously hurting him nor appreciated Naruto’s inappropriate public act either.

    Hehheh... I love many guys are so protective towards Sakura... Hell yeah! Sakura rules!




    >“I’ve been helping with Gekkou Hayate’s treatments if you must know.” She mumbled into her pillow, already sleepy again.

    “Gekkou? Why? What’s wrong with him?” Naruto rubbed his hand through spiky blonde hair in confusion. Sakura wasn’t sure she believed him for a moment.

    I am quite suprised that Naruto still remembered about him.... It must be his abnormal illness state....


    “Naruto…he’s really sick, his lungs…”

    “Is that why he coughs all the time? Well if you’re treating him, why does he always seem the same?” Sighing Sakura rolled over, her back facing him. “He always seems kinda the same to me anyways. Looks tired too…How often do you do it, every week?” His child like curiosity and questioning was grating on her nerves.

    “Naruto-”

    “Is he getting better now? I bet, since you’re helping out Sakura-chan.”

    “Naruto, he can’t be cured.” He didn’t respond, probably because Sakura couldn’t keep the sadness out of her own voice. “The treatments just keep him functional enough to complete missions.”

    Um... that's so sad to have known that Hayate won't be cured... I hope I won't see his death on your fic... Mind you... your friend might(or rather definitely...) try to kill you if you do that then... *evil snicker*


    “But can’t Baasan…”

    “No. She can’t.” Naruto stopped for a moment. He couldn’t comprehend the Hokage not being able to fix one her sick shinobi. “So he comes every few weeks and I suppose does missions afterwards while he’s feeling well enough.”

    “Does it hurt?” Again, even though he was a grown man, it was child like.

    “I assume so, the ijutsu isn’t delicate…He’s probably in pain all the time.”

    “Then why…” He stopped himself from finishing his thought because Sakura turned on him, her eyes clear and angry.

    Tsunade can't heal Hayate?? So does it mean they have to use some forbidden spell such as the one Chiyo-baa-sama used?


    Hayate’s raucous coughing cut Sakura off, his lungs sounding as if they were trying to escape from his chest. She could see why, horrible purple bruises raised spectacularly from his skin, covering all the ribs of his right side.

    Blood dribbled down his chin as his body stiffened straight from the coughing and pain it must have caused his injury. Sakura wanted to grimace but held it back, Hayate grimaced enough for the both of them, if only for a moment. If he could handle being in so much pain Sakura could handle seeing it.

    “Injuries?” She said before another fit of coughing could take over. She stood in front of the jounin and also placed her hands on his chest while he tired to lean forward to breathe.

    “Trauma from some powerful chakra I think…His stomach was slashed open by a katana possibly. He hasn’t been able to talk.” The older man informed her, standing aside so she could take his position but sit on the bed next the Hayate.

    “I stopped the bleeding, it should hold.” The chuunin said quietly, securing the gauze and stepping back.

    “Mmm.” Sakura’s eyes were closed as she searched his chest. His ribs all seemed to be unbroken, but the force against his muscles had caused swelling and inflammation around his lung. She eased the swelling and as much of the inflammation around the top of his lung where the tissue was functioning relatively well first.

    I wonder who had injured Hayate... with powerful chakra... Is the person Baki? You know... I feel sorry for Baki since many people hate him... Even though I love Hayate... I haven't got any grudge towards Baki at all... He is like Hayate.. Baki was also the one who was betrayed by the Sound...I like Baki... even though he was the one who killed Hayate... He is probably one of my faviourte characters from Sand village along with Yura who had so much respect on Sasori but got killed... Probably Yura is the one who made me very suspecious towards Sand village... I have always had some unpleaseant image towards Sand... I have never liked villagers... so... Even though Sasori killed the Third kazekage, I don't think anything wrong (oops...) since I don't think the third was very likable like 4th hokage or 3rd to me... His character seemed more like Gaara's dad who tried to kill his own son? Sorry for stupid rumbling... *sheepish grin*


    >Hayate pitched forward as more coughing took over. One hand coming up to cover his mouth, Sakura instinctively wrapped an arm around his back and placed her hand over his. When he quieted she brought it up and blinked at the warmness of his blood spreading across her palm and fingers. Blood seemed to be leaking from lesions more than normal and as he coughed more came out, clotted darkly with bright red blood dripping on the floor.

    Closing her eyes she allowed the chuunin to wipe away the blood deftly before trying to repair his bruised flesh.


    WHoa... pretty gore isn't it... Aw... poor Hayate... you konw... I think this fic is the best fic I have ever read about Hayate... ignoring the fact I am a total Hayate+Sakura lover... I have read quite many fic about Hayate...many are Genma+Hayate... but I haven't read any Hayate fic which is precisely written about Hayate's condition like you did...
    YOu are just so amazing!

    I am really happy to have found such a talented writer like you...


    Sorry, Nushi... I haven't written so much this time.. but you know... this chapter is pretty serious...

    Anyway... I have enjoyed this chapter even more though it turned pretty serious... I hope you will update soon...since this chapter made me even more inpatient indeed...

    I am looking forward to reading your next chapter... Keep up writing!

    Gigi
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