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Reviews for Somewhere in the snow

By : KrickItat
  • From ANON - FoxDemonKurai on November 04, 2005
    Yum. This looks like it is going to very much to my liking. Then again, almost all stories are. Hehe, keep up the good work. *Hands author a cookie.*
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  • From ANON - Sasha on November 03, 2005
    It's a really good story so far. I really enjoy the plot, because it is so original. Please continue! Don't give up!!
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  • From ANON - tsukashi on October 28, 2005
    Hey sweetie,
    Wow! that was quite the little twist, with him telling her she was his lil wifey, can't wait to see what happens next. My step-mom does massage therapy, it is really hard on the hands, she's only been doing it for about a year now. Okie dokie, I will be watching for updates.
    Fly
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  • From ANON - blisblop on October 28, 2005
    Teasing her,he should have wiped her too.Weird and wonderful.
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  • From ANON - i got took off -- on October 26, 2005
    lmao u kick ass!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! hahaha
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  • From ANON - kitty on October 26, 2005
    it's good coz i like the story...it's bad coz it only got two chapts -__-*** i'm angry!! u got my cliff hangin here..and i dont like it!! update or i'll beat u >
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 25, 2005
    Awesome writing! I can't wait for the next chapter! Hope it all ends well.

    -Chelsey- AKA HisBeautiful
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  • From ANON - krickets on October 25, 2005
    p.s
    i can't refer to the flashback throughout the story due to the fact that she can no longer remember it OR sasuke, i baisically did it as sort of a transition from her having a memeory and then suddenly not.
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  • From ANON - krickets on October 25, 2005
    Well for one i KNOW he is terribly OOC....but i am going somewhere with this trust me. dont expect him to stay to much in character cause i am really going to be doing my own thing with this.
    and you have to remember itachi is the master of the art of the mind fuck....he loves it and you know you love it when he does it

    and the sasuke thing...i caught it and it wont happen any more. if i'm feeling generous i may even go back and change it in chap. 1
    if i am.....but im the master of the mind fuck too ne?

    you want her to be a virgin? uuuh its a little late for that but i might try to find somthing to spark your interest...maybe have kisame rape some little red headed virgin out of frustrated lust....yay!
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  • From ANON - Dark Phoenix on October 25, 2005
    *reads up to the end of chapter 1* ...NO LEMON SCENE?!?!? Dammit! What's the NC-17 for then? XD Okay, back to seriousness. I really like the ending of chapter 2--the part when Itachi touched the deer's muzzle as he calmly cut its throat was chilling and absolutely in-character. Great job; hope to see more soon!
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  • From ANON - blueinferno on October 24, 2005
    its cool...i like it...normally i cant read storys adn the girl isnt a virgin..but i guess cos theres not alot of sakura/itachis around im gonna have to deal! --""
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  • From GhostStories on October 24, 2005
    hmmm, lets see. First off, I believe it's spelled "Sasuke"... just a little FYI. I think you have great promise to be an awesome fanfic writer. For a first story, this isn't so bad. I've seen far worse. In fact, this is better than a lot of stories that aren't even first stories. With enough practice, you could be pretty fantastic. Now, I don't tink it's necessary to just "say" FLASHBACK in a story, thats distracting and unimaginative. since it was short, it might have been better to refer to it throughout the story, without actually saying it. We sort of got the idea of that scene anyhow with the first scene, which was a sort of clever intro. Also, I think Itachi is sort of out of character. Why the hell is he acting so nice, trying to convince Sakura that they're married? that's sort of odd. But then again, Ita/Saku stories are like way hard to do right. plus, this is probably a PWP so what can you do? But still, you should treat all your stories as practice and try to make them the best possible. A little more exposition would be nice. Draw some scenes out, explain everything that they're thinking and feeling. Why would they take this course of action? How do they feel about this recent turn of events? I hope you don't take this as a flame or anything, because it's not. It's a helpful artistic critique. I only offer these things to people who I think could really benefit from them. You have an extended vocabulary and a good way with words. Learn to use it to the best of your power. I don't say this so alot, LOADS of people are lost causes as far as writing goes. Keep reading, keep writing, and I'll come back later to read the rest of this.
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  • From ANON - okami-kori on October 22, 2005
    Great story, and jelous Sasuke is the best. I like the plot and the Idea and I hope you update soon ^-^
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  • From ANON - saika on October 22, 2005
    Hey great first chapter I really enjoyed it and even better i love itasakusasu pairings ( though even more Itasaku ^^ ) This si going really great I am a bit sad that sakure lost the baby (?) but it gives her a chance with Itachi
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  • From ANON - tsukashi on October 21, 2005
    Oooooohhh, is this a Saku/Ita fic? I LOVE Ita/Saku, my fav pairing (when done right). Ok, I always try to give a good, and constructive review, sometimes I end up babbling, so here goes: I noticed a few minor errors like the use of then instead of than, or maybe it was the other way around, either way, no big deal. Overall the plot looks good. (On a side note, I didn't like the fact that Sasuke bit Sakura to mark her, its too overdone, but that is me.) I'm sorry, I forgot to pay attention to if you did tense swapping (mixing past and present) so can't say one way or the other. No punctuation errors jumped out at me, thumbs up there.

    Wanna let you know that it is Sasuke not Sauske. I know that phoenetically it would make sense to spell it Sauske, but that is one of the Japanese language's quirks - they whisper certain sounds. I was reading this one story of FF.net, the author thought that Sakura was calling Kakashi "Kaka-sensei" when Sakura calls him "Kakash(i)-sensei, whispering the i. But, for those who are not learning Japanese, how are you gonna know that? So anyway, enough with the impromptu Japanese lesson, hehe. Other than that, if there were spelling errors, I think it was prolly a case of an odd typo, cuz nothing stood out to me. (Mind you, I did an "enjoyment" reading, so I was not looking for errors)

    I really look forward to seeing where you take this. Itachi is a hard character to write, I should know, I have my own Ita/Saku fic that is in limbo, cuz... well, Itachi is a hard character to write! lmao. This first chapter holds a lot of promise, I will definately be watching for updates. (Squee's in fangirl delight at having found a new Ita/Saku fic ^__^) And I will keep my soggy ramen noodle at ready, should you stop updating, and beat you with it, evil taskmaster that I am, "write for me my pretty, muahahahaha!" No, wait, your not supposed to EAT the noodle, your supposed to FEAR it! ^_^*
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