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Reviews for Diplomatic Relations

By : Maldoror
  • From ANON - Archeeka on January 10, 2006
    Hmmm... You handled the characterization and everything well in here, and you were as analytical as ever, yet... Maybe it was because it's first time and it was appropriate, but needless to say, it kind of killed the erotic mood. *puts up hands* I'm not saying that it didn't make SENSE, that Lee would just be mentally processing a whole lot, bit I think that you kind of... crushed it a little bit by doing that.

    And... since this is a lemon, I'm going to critique as such.

    While I know that there are limitations definately there because of their characterization and because this is their first time, this seemed a bit too... soft, and far away. Like certain descriptions just made me go "what?" because they alluded to something else, a technique that I like, but it wasn't prepared or presented in a way that made a whole lot of sense. And sometimes you left things very vague and... left events that could have used a little bit of BAM! to them. Or something a bit more clear. When you described Gaara's orgasm, I could have just sworn that he'd just started a flow of precum. And then I was confused for a bit, and then Lee left, and then I was totally like "....Wait, what? You're not kidding?" There wasn't a proper (or a real recognizable) preparation for him doing that, no real buildup so to say, and you kind of described it like a bird happened to be flying past the window at the time. Like "Oh look, and now I guess he's orgasming. Huh."

    And that was kind of disappointing, really. And not because "Oh my Crap, it's a lemon, it MUST BE HOT" but because it was less hot than the other times when they've gotten kind of intimate and Lee's brain "crashed and burned" and whatnot, and it was anticipated, like, even during the entire story you could feel it building up to that, so much just building up TO it, and then when it happens it's kind of like "Oh, well, I guess they're doing sexual stuff now. Hm hmm. Yup." It's a total put-out. And I'm sorry if it sounds mean, but it doesn't even feel like I read sex.

    Hey, sorry it's a crummy comment, but I really DO need to get that off my chest.
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  • From ANON - Bryn on January 10, 2006
    OMG...loved it^_^ They are too cute...
    And I can't wait for the mad sex in the later chapters!! Woot!!!
    ^_^ Keep it up...this is freaking awesome!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - chibilainen on January 09, 2006
    (Hey my review looked weird. New one a-coming)

    You STILL rule! Art will come... Oh yes, it will...
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  • From ANON - chibilainen on January 09, 2006
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  • From ANON - P.N. on December 26, 2005
    Hello,

    I just wanted to tell you how much I'm enjoying 'Diplomatic Relations'. I've read a pile of in-progress fics in my time and yours is one of the very few that I keep going back to, hopeing that it'll be update day again. Heh, no pressure though. You seem nervous about keeping the humour and readability going but I can tell you you have -no- problem there. Lots of fics start out well and then morph into one long angst river with bits of sex floating on top, so I can see how you would worry about that, but this fic has stayed enjoyable on all levels. Hell, this is the first review I've ever given so I guess that says it all. :-}

    Anyways, I think I'll try your Kakashi/Gai fic now while I wait for update day. Sounds interesting!

    Merry Christmas, and thanks for authoring!
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  • From ANON - RadicalArcher on December 23, 2005
    *reads Ch. 15*
    Okay, I have to quote something here, because it may just be the most awesomely written "aww" moment in history:

    "This was it, he realized. This was what he wanted, and yeah, he wanted all of it, even if he couldn't understand it all either. He wanted to hold the touch-starved child-killer; the dangerous, demon-ridden man; the Kazekage; the friend; the lover, too, because that was a part of the whole as well. He wanted all of it; he wanted Gaara, so badly."

    I literally melted into a puddle of fan-girl goo after reading that, and then Lee wanted to walk Gaara home! Like their patrol had been a date! Oh gods, I laughed over that.

    The letter writing part is interesting, I really liked the whole idea of it, with the ending part of Lee burning the letter because he had realized in the back of his head long before he started writing the letters that Gai-sensei would not be able to really help him and he had to do this by himself (or rather, with Gaara, and nobody else). Great depth of feeling, and great addition to the depth of the character of Lee overall.

    I loyally wait for the next chapter, because now I'm a true fan of *yours*, and not just the series, anymore.
    ~RA
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  • From ANON - electramyers on December 23, 2005
    yay thnks for the x-mas gift! *giggle*
    I'm looking forwar to the next chapter! MERRU X-MAS AND HAPPY NEW YEAR!
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  • From ANON - Berylia on December 23, 2005
    What a wonderful Christmas Present! I was so happy to find your chapter on line this morning. Thank you for taking time for us poor little starved creatures.
    I liked the way the letter to Gai finally is written but ends up in the garbage can nonetheless because during this chapter Lee has matured enough to realize he must sort things for himself.
    I am very happy to see the two lovebirds getting closer physically (go for it, Lee, one day you WILL be able to cuddle him!), I am looking forward to the attack of Lee's hormones.
    Thank you and have a good and merry Christmas and wonderful holydays.
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  • From ANON - Mouw on December 23, 2005
    Mal you are god this is one of the best romances I have ever read I love lee and you make
    the love bitter sweet, I worship you with whips and chains
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  • From on December 23, 2005
    but he was still the same inside, which meant aloof, stubborn and doted with all the empathy of a scorpion who'd just had a bad day-

    My favorite line ^^.

    And yays updated. Such a great chapter lol. They do seem to be aking progress and that's what matters. I'll be waiting for yer next chapters with springtime youthful enthusiasm!
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  • From ShadowsCall on December 22, 2005
    I found links to your story through an artist on y!gallery, and I must say she is correct... >.> This is very good. I'm not done reading as much as you've posted yet, but I adore it already. This is probably my second GaaraxLee fic I've ever read, and it's slowly (along with good doujinshi) dragging me into liking the pairing. Wonderfully well written on so many levels. *cough* And finally! Someone who depicts a sandstorm correctly. I live where they're rather a common accurance, and you wrote the rather interesting happenings completely on target.
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  • From ANON - BoundNGagged on December 22, 2005
    For as long as I've read this story....this is one of the best romance gaara/rock lee stories I've came across. The chapters don't bore me at all. It has pretty much all the elements I truly enjoy in stories....mystery, drama, action, adventure, comedy, and a bit of romance. I hope you keep up the good work on this story and other stories you've created.
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  • From ANON - Courtney on December 22, 2005
    Wow, I enjoyed the new chapter awsome job!!!!

    Enjoy your holiday and MERRY CHRISTMAHUANAKWANZIKA O_O cause I don't know what you celebrate XDD
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  • From ANON - Razz on December 22, 2005
    Yet another, completely and utterly awesome chapter :D Your writing style, and the way you portray the characters and show what's going on in their heads just amazes me, and keeps me completely hooked x3 I can't wait for your next chapter even if I have to wait until the new year to read it ;) Have a great holiday :)

    ~razz

    PS~ Keep writing how you're writing :) I've been engrossed with this story from the begining and I don't think it's going to get any less exciting any time soon
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  • From ANON - DirtyD on December 22, 2005
    I can't give you a glorious review filled with intellectual words of encourgement or splendidly long paragraphs explaining everything I love from the deep profound dialogue or character interpretation but I figure for you the thought of that I tried would mean enough.

    I adored this stroy please, please, PLEASE do more. ;_;

    See what I mean? lol

    Seasons Greetings, have a wonderful Holiday.
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