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Reviews for Bunshin Pizza

By : Houseki

From sleeplesssama on April 17, 2009
Poor Naruto. I hope he is going to be okay. I love this story. Can't wait till the next chap.
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From LadyWolf on March 06, 2009
OK,,,,I am offically HOOKED!!!!! WTF!!!! Ok, what's the deal with Naru and Itachi??? More than likely it has something to do with Naru's parents and some software company??? Maybe Itachi wants control of it but can't b/c our beloved blonde is alive???

This is getting exciting!!

Post soon!
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From Prism0467 on March 05, 2009
I'll stick around for some boy love.
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From ladygizarme on March 05, 2009
WTF? NO! ARE YOU CRAZY? BOY LOVE? NO WE DON'T LIKE IT!

....WE LOVE IT!

*coughahem* Now that I'm back to a normal tone of "voice"... jeez, woman... you always make us wait so long for chappies... but guhh, they are so hella worth it once they come! This one was so full of fluff and drama and action and... aaaauuughhhhh I NEED MORE NOWWWWW.

guhh.

I always love playful banter between Sasuke and Naruto, especially when it still stays in character, which with you it DOES. (and props on that, cuz out of whatever edits I suggest, I can't recall a time when it's been on characterization. you ROCK on it.) I love how, as they're having their nice lil date (with cute misunderstanding when Sasuke says Naruto looks good *giggle*), Kakashi's there in the background, noticing Deidara. And they just got in Sasuke's car and drove off, not even knowing they coulda freakin DIED if they'd gone separately or taken Naru's car!

O.o

Way to put me on the edge of my seat!

Also, as soon as Deidara said "Art is a... bang!" I was like, "Why the fuck is he saying that while shooting pool? ..wait! car bomb!"

and lo and behold, i was right! kyaaa!

the stuff in the chinese place was cute, too... especially the kiss and sasuke's expression after and the other almost-misunderstanding...

ahhhhh and now they are all together at gaara's house! i hope this means naruto will tell them wtf is going ON now that they're all together (since he'd said he wouldn't say until they were together cuz he didn't wanna say it twice...right? *tries to remember*)

guhh i wanted to say more, but suddenly my fingers on my left hand are seizing up! wtf?! not good...

write the next fuckin chapter, dammit!!

oh yeah, and, DEAD TREE!! KYAA!

&hearts tomotan!

~ lg
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From tawanawelch on December 18, 2008
Ok, finally. I finally read the first story you made with Naruto. I really love it!!! You make the characters so down to earth like we've known them so long well i guess we have.:) Their thoughts are so complex and realistic. I love that about you write your characters. Just like The Affair. You make me want to be friends with them all and hang out with them. I can't wait for your muse to come back to this one. I also went to your profile and I almost forgot you've got a Backstreet story. I'm such a huge fan of BSB. And I also loooove AJ!!!!! I wanted to tell you that I am going to read that as well and I joined your icafclub. Talk to later!! Have a Happy Holiday!!!!!!
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From ANON - ren on October 08, 2008
now i decided to go ahead and review this...even though i wasnt gonna till you read mine *looks at Houseki* but i wont make you wait any more because i cannot be mean to my tsuma.
i always love when the green/blue/green gaara eye debate comes up. and i love how it was EXACTLY half and half when we FINALLY found it SO MANY long times ago
nya...plotplotplot (sound of the plot train is rolling in)
awwww gaara is hurt cause he wasnt asked to go along (poor gaa-chan)
nyaaaaaa cute naruto's response to that... *giggling like a schoolgirl over here*
Naruto! pick Gaara! he is so obviously superior to sasuke!!! jeeeez!
STUPID SASUKE...breaking up the cuteness between the two of them *growls at sasuke*
can you tell i dont like him? *smile*
very cute description of gaara and the uchiha.
But Gaara and Sasuke? That was ridiculous! hahaha inne gaara-chan...inne...or is it? *waggles eyebrows*
Bennys.... hahaha Bennys.
mmmm gaara at the Y... sweaty gaara... mmmmmmmmmm gaaaaaraaaaa
sorry...
YOSHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH ITACHIIIIIIIIIII!!!!!
my favorite makes his appearance. he can appear in this fic still! yay!
�Otouto� you are whining,� Itachi chuckled at his almost grown up brother. hahaha tell him itachi-sama!
hmmm what could naruto have done to mess with itachi's business.
i want to see itachi nekkid.
or...ummm... heh.. uh.
so anyways..itachi knew about naruto huh.. sasuke's seeing him i mean. woot itachi is awesome.
soooooooo totally much better than sasuke.. *evil laugh*
ooooooh itachi is a bad ass huh? awesome. badasses RULE!
great chapter dude. i mean it. plot is awesome. i love your writing style
but you already know that.
and i love you
but you already know that...tis why you married me *hahahaha*
cant wait for the next one.
i am awed by your prowess!
there i reviewed. gimme my ramune!
hehehe
-ren

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From serenagold on October 06, 2008
I'll be honest. I hated the first chapter. To much of a set up about the greatest pizzeria ever. Way too much hype.

However, I was pleasantly surprised with the rest of the story. The last four chapters were great!! I've much involved with the characters and I can't wait to find out what happens next! Disregarding the intro chapter, I'd say this story is a hell of a read. ^^
Keep up the great work!
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From ladygizarme on October 06, 2008
mmm, I want some Ramune! yusyus! *ahem* SO, finallyyyyy you've updated your first fic! i'm sooo happy!! like i said, i've been craving it!

the first scenes with naru and gaara were so sweet dude. i feel tender about gaara's feelings for naru, and vice versa. i really liked naruto's description and comparison for gaara and sasuke. that was REALLY FITTING (even if it was supersappy lol, it still fit for naruto to say it).
sasuke having a car fetish tickles me so, and i know you know why, ms. car fetish XD
omg, and plot twists! you sneaky woman! wtf happened during the summer, already??!! TELL MEEEEEEEE
what does itachi 'really do'?? did he really not know sasuke was rivals with naru for so long?
he knows sasuke really is friends with naruto? did he only find out during the summer? or did he already know before??
kyaaaaa, WRITE MORE NOW!! you and your evil cliffies...
you're lucky you actually listened to me when i told ya to keep going! cuz damn... my whip-crackin' arm is a lil rusty...and this whip's a lil dusty...hahaha *cracks whip* gotta keep up my practice, ne? XP
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From tawanawelch on October 06, 2008
Yes!!! You definitely made me hungry!!!! I really like this story because everybody love a good pizza parlor. I love pizza and I can surly picture the 3 of them doing all you wrote in the fic, as well as taste the "Super Meaty Special." Sounds good!!! This sounds like a winner!!!
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From Vague on March 01, 2008
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From ANON - a kitsunes light on December 28, 2007
can't wait for the next chapetr!!! I loed this story!!!!
please write soon!!! can't wait to know naruto's history!
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From loche606 on March 09, 2007
oh come ON! you cant just effin STOP! lmao... no you were right, i havent read that. it rocks... finish it..
oh and dude.. lmao @ the lots of different combos for Gaara's eyes... sounds rather familiar doesnt it..lmao.

but anyways, yes i agree you need to get that week off and relax *write* not think about work *write* and do your own thing, *write* and do... something else..i cant remember what.

anyways. yatta! you rock

much love my sista
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From ladygizarme on March 07, 2007
omgoddess you fuckin tease!! lmao and you didn't even tell me you'd updated things, woman! tsk tsk!! but i'm glad you're writing again! and so very VERY glad it looks like you'll finally let us in on the details of what naruto was doing all summer, once you finish the chapter, neeeeee??? you better actually finish it soon or i'll hunt you down :p
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From sainaru on March 07, 2007
is this going to be a gaa/naru story i really hope so but ill till read it if it isnt because it's umm........ how should i put it SO DAMN GOOD hurry next chap plz can't wait for the smex to begin so i can drool all over my keyboard ^^lol
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From ANON - not signed in on December 30, 2006
i like your story alot. update soon plzzz!!! :]]
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