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By : theyoungestuchiha

From ANON - Lell on November 03, 2005
I've never been so happy to see sex that wasn't perfect, or people that were wrong for each other! It was the little things - the awkwardness, the casual dismissiveness of Kakashi and spazzy!Iruka ^^ Things like Kakashi coming a tad fast or how unromantic it all was...perfect, hot, satisfying sex irritates me no end. Sex is messy, especially the first time and certainly portrayals where the damn prostate gets nailed every time and they all manage to come at once *Pffts* Written by virgins who have no clue as to what real sex is like...not that I can speak in that departmant well, but I rarely write smut anyway. What you're writing...it's the closest I've seen come to reality that I've read in a long while - the fact that it's not smoothed over and that you use as many un-sexy adjectives as ones designed to enhance a modd - I think I love you.

In a more analytical sense, this is your best chapter yet. My split personalites made an appearance again - while my roleplaying side tends towards liking your earlier chapters, when I turned that sense of and just read it through again as LITERATURE, I was much, much happier. You've reached a happy balance where you find ground between pretty little metaphors that create gorgeous images and actually getting to the point - the blend is lovely and that much more versatile by toning down the obscurity. (Am I an idiot for feeling proud of you for that?)

I'm actually quite pleased that we're taking this break from the main pairing - these flashbacks have really let me see into your Kakashi and I'm more understanding of just why he reacts certain ways. Put it this way - people wouldn't be complaining about the break from the KakaSasu-ness if it were a fic in it's entirity; they're just impatient to get to that part (that doesn't really make sense, but I'm horribly drugged up on painkillers right now >
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From ANON - lindS on November 03, 2005
is chapter 6 just an author's note? Either way.. i've been checking back for updates on this wonderful story since there really is a lack of kakasasu fics around. Its a great start! Even though i didn't really like KxI pairing but i still thought it was cute =) Your character potrayal is just so.. KAWAII XD I love sasuke here. Bring on some KxS action soon!
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From ANON - Kireiko on November 03, 2005
I'm confused... O____o?? Is chap 6 supposed to be an updated chapter or just an author's note??
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From ANON - Forgotten Dream on October 27, 2005
Ieeee! KakashixIruka is fun!

Your words have a beautiful flow to them - I'll look forward to seeing more!
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From ANON - 123 on October 23, 2005
*chuckles* As I sort of expected Iruka to act. Such a bottom ^_^ Good stuff. Looking forward to your next chapters!
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From ANON - Lell on October 22, 2005
*CackleChortleSnorfKakashi'sAnAssGiggle*

Poor Iruka's really the perfect person for yaoi, as well as being the worst. Perfect because, hot damnit, you slash him so well. Worst because...he's, well, Iruka! And Iruka squawks at everything! Still, the luff is there (even if Kakashi is teh evil this chapter ^^)

I think this was one of your better chapters - your writing didn't run so many rings around us and the clarity was a LOT better (my inner metaphor lover is still contrary though and misses the rambliness - see? Your writing has given me two personalities ^^;; That fight. A lot) Your characterisation has been wonderful throughout this story, but Kakashi really shone for me in this chapter. He really isn't romantic at all and a lot of people gloss that over - you don't and your blunt portrayal him is a whole one, not just flat or 2D

I'm also having a wicked urge to review this twenty five times on my own, but you'd count that as cheating, wouldn't you? *Sighs* I'll just have to wait though - just remember that you're making me antsy by keeping us all in suspense like this before you post
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From ANON - NSU on October 22, 2005
Okay, it sort of fits. This is going to go back to Kakashi and Sasuke though, right?
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From ANON - ka on October 12, 2005
You done good
(I found one error worth noting, when you say pension you mean penchant.)
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From ANON - blisblop on October 11, 2005
Umm,mildly amusing,not a huge Iruka /Kaka fan though there has been well written fics about them.Enjoyed the bird shocked from its perch.Dying ,just dying for the next chap.Dying you hear?Pain...mercy and all that..it was kinda kinky having Kakashi reading to him through the door.Sasuke spied on them?Must re read.Till next time..soon.The writing flowed really well but climax is needed!!!!!!!!The attention/tention is seeping from the main pair...I saw no pairing between Ita/Sas except for bro stuff,must re read.
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From ANON - NSU on October 11, 2005
What would the AU be about?
And what I really meant to ask was if you were doing the fillers or not? Some of the fillers are good or at least small enough not to make a difference, but there's a ten episode filler arc after eps. 101 that to put it mildly isn't very high quality. It doesn't make that much sense and contradicts other parts of 'Naruto'.
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From ANON - Lell on October 11, 2005
I enjoy your vaguely spazzy, extremely cute Iruka ^^ That and the fact that I can't get the image of Kakashi just sniffing soap after soap out of my head (I giggled inanely for a while before I could continue)

Does non graphic smut actually count as smut? Allusions to smut? Phwee - I don't mind; it was still vaguely citrusy. *Laughs* And mentions of Iruka/Mizuki...*Luffs*
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From ANON - egg on October 10, 2005
I demand that you count this as 20 reviews!!

Tsk, holding the next chapter ransom on us. Tis ok though, I know how writing them can feel sometimes...I myself have a Kakashi/Sasuke fic...left it right in the middle of "the good part". Bwahahaha. *should get around to posting it someday*

I only have one teeny tiny request (which, o course, you dont have to heed at all) about this next smutty chapter, is that you make it exactly that: smut. And not Kakashi humoring Sasuke's lust and curiosity. Let the lust be mutual. We like steam!! Because, the other way, yes, its lemon...but not smutty...we're all perverts here remember. Anywho, just a tip...for I like to be delusional and think that there could be chemistry between the two. *not in the real manga of course, just in our happy fanfiction world, because it won't happen for real*(/ramble)

Can't you just wait to see what Sasuke's older character is gonna look like? Heres to hoping that he isnt in the horrible get-up the Sound 5 wore.
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From ANON - Lell on October 04, 2005
Another wonderful chapter! There are such delightful mental images just from your descriptions of the two of them curled up on the bed - you even managed to make wrists sound sexy XD Next week's edition - Sasuke's neck!

Your descriptions are wonderful, but, especially near the beginnings of the chapters, you have a habit of lapsing into language patterns that are perhaps more suited to a roleplay than a piece of fiction. I enjoy it immensely, but be careful not to have your descriptions become TOO oblique or people will spend more time figuring out what you mean instead of following the story. On the other hand, your poetic if complicated descriptions touch my heart, so I'm torn between my luff as a writer and my luff as a roleplayer...

...am I making any sense? XD
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From ANON - mos on September 28, 2005
Hehehe...the evil sour milk strikes again!!!

Hmmmmm *evil cackle* As far as lemony-ness goes...I think you're right to take it slow (I find it as it is now to be very good)...However, if you ever want to throw us out little teasers...perharps a sparring match between the two? Lots of contact and high emotions.

Or...I dunno...Kakashi is rubbing Sasuke's wrist in his sleep again...and perhaps it's Kakashi's name that Sasuke mumbles...wouldn't that give him something to think about? Hehe...
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From ANON - NSU on September 27, 2005
Squee! It's so unusual to see a gen fic like this here, but it's nice to get some variety. Um, I have a few questions for you, if you don't mind. First, if these take place during the time skips, does this mean you'll eventually reach the training month before the final chuunin exam? And are you basing this off the manga or the anime? If the anime, will you also be doing eps. 101, when Sasuke is supposed to be following Kakashi? Er, final question, although it may be a bit rude . . . is English your primary language? Some of your grammar is a bit off, but I'm overly sensitive to that. Anyway, hope you update again soon!
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