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Reviews for Nightmare

By : petrifieddivinity
  • From ANON - Choister on September 17, 2005
    I like the story, but you could of fleshed out the erotic bits a little. Also, what kind of nightmare was that?
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  • From ANON - jaaf on September 15, 2005
    It seemed a bit rushed. Especially the smut scene. You left out important parts that would have given it better flow and made it much better. Also, the rest of the plot seemed a bit underdeveloped. It seems like it would be a decent story though. Rushing the second chapter like this one would probably mess it up too. With a character death, you can't be bang boom if you want effect.

    So, definitely needs some more development, but keep up the good work :D
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  • From Cindyip on September 14, 2005
    Nice, though I wish there was more lemony action in the chapter, but it's still really good;P
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  • From oubliette on September 14, 2005
    Not a bad story...though it seems very rushed and thin, more like an outline than an actualy story, but still not terrible.
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